Soul for a Girlfriend?

As the author of this book, I will really appreciate if people who are reading this book, add this to their library. It really helps out a small creator like me. 🍀

Hello Author-san here ;) This is my first novel and plot development is a bit slow because I want it to be as detailed as possible. So please bear with me. ^W^

[Reviewed on: 12-06-2021] GOOD POINTS: - Comical vibe through the chara of female demon/devil - MC is reasonably smart, not too dumb to cringe at all - The flow and pace is fine too - Apparently there are no issues in grammar [will explain further below] - Storyline somewhat resembles 'my pick up artist system' but no it's not a fanfic - MC has a goal to achieve or he will die - At first it gave me 'death note' vibe, then the devil felt a succubus to me as she emerged - It was entertaining~ WEAKNESS: - Synopsis doesn't really tells what's inside, it should be more elaborative on the contract aspect - The initiative strategy in chapter 1 is extremely wrong - No one wants to read the routine of MC, his house, work, what he is wearing, food, etc - The narration is in personal/1st person but the repetition of 'I' is annoying, in about five lines 'i' is overly used seven times! - 1st chapter should have begun by the later half, the upper half is completely dump in my opinion. Since 2 and 3rd chapters are without fillers and absolutely good with hooks, while 1st [initial half] is a turn off. - Devil can read his mind but at places she doesn't respond to his thoughts, why?

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I like this novel its similar to an anime i watched called The World God Only Knows btw if you end up liking this novel then the animes is worth a watch also this works vice versa if you liked that anime you will probably like this novel. [img=recommend]

Hello author, hope you had a good day (or night) depends. So I have seen your work, today I will review your novel and I think you are doing fine with your narrations. I can still see that it can be improved. The narrations were direct and concise. It was a nice story all in all and Such cuddly and heart pumping in some places. What a beautiful novel you have. I think I have to read more as I am just on the tip of the iceberg. Making me see just a shallow part of it. But so far, I can see its potential. Good luck in the Spirity! Hope you win! Have a five star to brighten you up. ✨

This is just to tell you guys who are reading my novel or going to read it, that I update my book on weekly basis. Every MONDAY and THURSDAY I post new chapters. Since it's not possible for me to update daily. 🍀

This is very good and I like that the story starts right away. I also like that the character seems well developed and we can see how the character thinks from the onset. I think this is a really good book and I can't wait for other chapters. good luck to the author!

A fantastic piece of work from Author-san. A marvelous concept storywise. Although the pacing seems to be quite slow compared to some other stories I've read so far, Author-san has done an amazing work using it to give the readers a detailed, in-depth look into the characters' interactions, relationships, and machinations of our seemingly impassive and calculative MC. The interactions between the characters also feel quite natural and realistic. The only slight criticism I have is about the grammar. There's usually some misplacement of pronouns or other tidbits during most chapters, and some descriptions of the characters' interactions that just feel a bit wrong detracting from the story, but otherwise it's quite good. I recommend using Grammarly if you don't already. It effectively and efficiently aids in helping fix grammar mistakes and also allows you to learn from them properly. It's also free which is always a plus. Moreover, personally, I'm somewhat sad it doesn't seem to be a harem-type story so far but hey, that's just me. It would be quite interesting to possibly have a side-story or development where all the girlfriends that the MC has helped, remember him for it or whatnot. However, Author-san may possibly have some plans regarding this already. That aside, I'm definitely enjoying the read so far. I can't wait to see how Author-san develops this since it has so much potential and they're absolutely smashing it so far. Keep up the good work Author-san, you have my support! [img=recommend]

Loving this one. Author characterizes really well with his informal first person approach. I was immediatly impressed by his ability to write, which exceeds many of the authors on this website by far. If you are a fan of romance, check this book out! You wont regret it. <3

A good idea behind the story but after the first target I thought mc was going to be much more cruel than he was, but he became more of a pushover but then again its character development

Please read the whole thing... One of the shzt if the the shzttiest of stuff that actually got me hooked like real good... I mean bruh you can't ask for anything better... Well if you're like me though..😉😉😉 Anyway... al i can say is ... this novel has super potential as well as it in itself is awesome... there are some hiccups along the way... which i experienced... but if you can push through it then you will enjoy it like everything... like bruh i wait for when that person who likes to be a super f king sadist(no offense bruh) to upload the chapters...😙😙😙 ( PS: you know who that sadist is but please don't sell me out, he'll eat me alive😖😖😖...not literally but yea you get the point) so anyway enough with bs...😁😁 Just read it and enjoy...😉😉😉

Finally... A gold... The development of the plot is good enough and kinda reasonable at least... The characters progression is Great.. it also suit my taste.. yeah solid 4.5 from me..

the Novel is great,i dont find any major problems regarding grammatical except for some minor problem including typos that i can found every now and then. story development as the author said in hos self review,a little bit slow in pace,i dont mind if u want tl slow some things to build some set up for future purpose. character design,the characters design are great,regarding their personality tho but u can try to polise ur phrase regarding what kind of situation their get that changed their feeling about mc more. updating stability is good enough as long as u dont drop this. world background,for the world background tho,i really appreciate about your slow pace novel but it will great if u can established some important rules regarding the contract first like is there any time limit for the mission? what kind of gift the curse give him? everytime i read your novel i always wondering about that. lastly i really appreciate your similar that have quite similar theme with the old good the world god only knows anime/manga,i just hope that we can see more character development from the mc tho,keep up the good work,author!

I have completely fallen in love with this story. The plot line is so interesting and fun to read. I like reading from the different POV cause it helps me understand the characters better.

Good book! The start is somewhat plain but it has the perfect elements to hook readers. Give it a go, readers. The cute demon is a cutie, you'll love it!

I'm new to WN as one of my friends recommended me to read this story. This story looks good but it has some flaws in its writing like the change in tense. Except that the writing is detailed and the plot is also really good. based on my enjoyment I would rate it as 5. The author can improve their writing and I'll be waiting for the upcoming chapters.

I AM IN LOVE WITH HER! This gives me anime vibes this would be so great if this was anime :0 In the first chapter, I was a bit confused if MC was male or female, but it got clear soon. Adding this to my library I can't wait for more chapters

I like the plot It kinda reflects on my personality so I'm going to wait for more update in the future I wanna see what going to happened on the future cant wait please update more