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lon_okamiAuthor3yr
2021-06-15 00:43

Hello Author-san here ;) This is my first novel and plot development is a bit slow because I want it to be as detailed as possible. So please bear with me. ^W^

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Black_realmLv14

not a problem 🙂

Lazy_NEET_Cat_UmULv5

You're just a sadist who likes to torture... *hmph...

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Lazy_NEET_Cat_UmU:You're just a sadist who likes to torture... *hmph...
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Lazy_NEET_Cat_UmULv5

You sad buddy...!!???

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The_Final_FrontierLv2

I demand update

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ZephyirLv13

A fantastic piece of work from Author-san. A marvelous concept storywise. Although the pacing seems to be quite slow compared to some other stories I've read so far, Author-san has done an amazing work using it to give the readers a detailed, in-depth look into the characters' interactions, relationships, and machinations of our seemingly impassive and calculative MC. The interactions between the characters also feel quite natural and realistic. The only slight criticism I have is about the grammar. There's usually some misplacement of pronouns or other tidbits during most chapters, and some descriptions of the characters' interactions that just feel a bit wrong detracting from the story, but otherwise it's quite good. I recommend using Grammarly if you don't already. It effectively and efficiently aids in helping fix grammar mistakes and also allows you to learn from them properly. It's also free which is always a plus. Moreover, personally, I'm somewhat sad it doesn't seem to be a harem-type story so far but hey, that's just me. It would be quite interesting to possibly have a side-story or development where all the girlfriends that the MC has helped, remember him for it or whatnot. However, Author-san may possibly have some plans regarding this already. That aside, I'm definitely enjoying the read so far. I can't wait to see how Author-san develops this since it has so much potential and they're absolutely smashing it so far. Keep up the good work Author-san, you have my support! [img=recommend]

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