Reviews of The Unknown Goddess: A Naruto FanFic
The Unknown Goddess: A Naruto FanFic
Archer_Phoenix
- Overall Rate
- Writing Quality
- Updating Stability
- Story Development
- Character Design
- world background
onion ninha is op the first 20 chapters and charakters stand out its great the worst wold be tha grammar not du tp author not understanding welp easier showing yes but somthimes it be ys or yrs not a lot of it tho but you notice it ones in a while
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The story itself isn't ALL bad. It pains me to leave such a bad review when the other stories are entertaining... This character is literally a Mary Sue, for those who don't know, that's an overpowered character that has everything and barely any, IF ANY, weaknesses. Right off the bat, she tells everyone she knows literally everything from the beginning of time to the end of the plot. They accept it and don't even ask any questions to know more about what's to come and whatever else. She literally just dissed hard the leader of one of the strongest clans, he'd never allow that, even if she's "protected" by the Hokage. Banking his reaction on a chance that most likely only happened near the end of Shippuden for plot reason, Hiashi isn't a nice person who'd chuckle at being shat on by a kid. I like the other stories a lot, understand that this one however isn't all that great.
Writing quality: grammar is fine, but your punctuation is so horrible that it makes me want to vomit every time I see a sentance that needs a period 2 stars. Stability of updates 2 stars. nuff said. story development. 2 stars. come on dude. she has no power, and yet she badmouths hirashi hyuga and doesnt get any backlash. 3 stars for character design, she makes some sense, but she's depressing af 2 stars to world background, it's not accurate enough.
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To be honest the beginning was really cringy since she shared her knowledge that she knows everything from..manga and anime (uuuuuugh), but it was needed since she literally spawned outside the gate without any connections. Aside from the cringe I also did not like how she got allot of OP stuff in the beginning, but then we would also have to go through allot of training chapters to power her up so ?maybe? it was best to skip all of that stuff since allot of power ups in the narutoverse depend on the tailed beasts and kekkei genkai. I did enjoy reading the story, the characters are well defined (I really love how you portrayed interactions between her family, it is just so wholesome.) and the story is ok.
I love your writing it is very well done. Unlike many fanfics I've read with string OC yours actually can beat Zabuza. I enjoy that while you use the canon as a guide you make changes and make it your own. I was tired of all the fanfics that develop their OC as super strong S ranked ninja or whatnot but they never actually effect the plot line so they loose to Zabuza etc. I'm looking forward to how you handle snake pedo.
The first half deals with the MCs inner demons and can be a bit of a struggle to get through cause it hints at darker themes that I for one am thankful never get graphically retold. But then it becomes a fun tale of people becoming strong and family coming together. I dearly hope our beloved author will update as much as she can cause I am just in love with the pairing in this fic.