The Last Primal

Dear Visitor/Hoping-to-be-future-reader! Below you can find my own review of this story. I hesitated to do one myself, as it feels cheap (you obviously won’t rate your own story below 5-stars, however, probably currently I’m the only one who can give you the deepest insight into what this story is going to be about. Please take your time to read it through and then make your own judgment about if you would be giving it a try. **** Important: STORY: The story is about who, -in very mysterious circumstances- dies, and gets another chance from a being known as Ioris, before his soul would be cast into the Wheel of Reincarnation. The reason this almighty-being took a liking to our poor protagonist is because his soul was different from the others, something unique, something that this being hasn’t seen since countless millennia. Giving it another chance at life, he blesses our hero, giving him a helper, another higher existence, along with a System, that will aid him on his quest as the Last of his kind, the Last Primal. As a primal, he first has to understands the limits and purpose of his existence, than reclaim what was taken from him, and reclaim his rightful place in the world. CHARACTERS: Most characters have their own personality, their desires, their wants, their needs. There are countless races across the world, almost everything you can imagine in a fantasy world have their presence here. The pacing is slow at the beginning, but that is deliberate, every epic story needs a good start, this is the same here. To understand his future choices and actions, you also need to understand Aiden’s past, his ‘childhood’, the ups- and downs of his life in it’s full spectrum. Writing Quality: There might be some grammar errors, and an occasional slip-up with the genderswap. I try to make sure this doesn’t happen, and I do 2 rounds of checkups (+ I’m using Grammarly as well). Stability of Updates: 1 new chapter between 1500-1700 is something I promised to myself at the start of this journey. One thing I can safely say: This story will not be dropped, no matter what. Unless something happens to me, this story will receive it’s finish at some point in the future. World Background: There are countless hours already invested in this story, among with years of writing and playtime testing in the world you are going to experience. There are literally hundreds of pages of lore that I (and my friends during our RPG nights) created in the past. I did refresh the world and the main story when I decided to go public.

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From reading the synopsis, I thought this would be a dark-fantasy with a brutal main lead, but you get the opposite. The story feels like a Disney movie. A character that hesitates to kill a bug, and a system that talks with the main character like she's his mother, the whole thing feels really weird. I read books for the purpose of seeing something interesting, not life lessons on how killing is bad, and how you should always avoid hurting others. The story skips along very weirdly, from random power boosts to scenarios that shouldn't happen given the current powers of the main character, but they do, which is fine if they at least make sense.