Reviews of Star Wars:Eternal

Just remembering, I'm a new writer, I've never written anything before, so there's no use asking for a super engaging original storyline with lots of plots, because unfortunately I don't have the capacity for it, I'm writing just for my fun while I hope you have fun too, with that said, I still intend to have a good story. I really hope you enjoy it!

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At first by seeing reviews I thought it would be nice ff, but it's full of shiiit, At first MC got a system, cliche but good, system had sentience, even more cliche and cringe. But MC relies on the system like a dog, even asks for the smallest of questions from it. Not that, he apparently has S level INT and still couldn't figure out any answer for his situations, and lastly MC his a SIMP. Read if you read ****. And author may likely delete this review because all he has on his ff are 5 star and 4 star review.

I have read so many star wars fanfic that i hope this one keeps going i has a good start and it has the the ability to get better and dont forget that time skips help like using a hyperspace jump going wrong.

Trash Star Wars fanfic idk how it’s ranked so high you got a system that controls the MC if he does any bad deeds revokes his system you know what happens after that what I don’t get is why make a Mc look so heavenly handsome but hides his face 24/7 “it bring too much attention” might as well make him ugly plus the Mc a retard with SS intelligence but I forgot can’t be smarter then the author right ? Plus it’s just follows usual plot pretty similar to other fanfics author also nerfs Mc a system is suppose to correct your flaws automatically an improve but forcing him to find a master so dumb An you can’t forget Anakin get on ya knees suck him off Mc this story not for me I was hoping for a more anti hero dark side but I found 💩💩💩

So your grammar is not to bad way better then some stories on here. The story seems fun so far and I hope you update a lot. I also hope you continue to have fun writing.

Wings what are they made of. Energy or meat I hope you don't make the mc dense And here I thought he's going to be king of his race and planet.

Really good star wars fanfic with a lot of good twists of the cannon that makes you keep reading although the Grammar isn't perfect its still really good so if u get the chance to read it its definitely worth it

I only read to the first 20 chapters, it was good and I had my fun. The grammar is good and legible while some deeper meaning do appear here and there. It updates within a good rate, and there are times where you are left for more and would like a higher frequency but the word count is also at a satisfying amount. Within the first 20 chapters there not much story yet, the MC usually just follows the original plot so he can experience the actual world of Star Wars. So the character development is still developing as well. Not much to see about the MC yet, but it starts to fall flat at some chapters. While in other chapters you feel attach to the MC for his character. Is still unstable up to this point. The main character usually has everything planned out and expected things to go his way. Which does until chapter 20 where he gets toyed with the best in the field of politics. That’s actually a good thing because it shows that the Mc can lose sometimes. It’s actually pretty fun, however chapter 20 became an issue for me for other reasons I won’t spoil. The story is good and it will help you have some fun, there’s also some frustrating decisions the MC takes but it is what it is. Give it a try, to some it might be bland, to others interesting for awhile. Some it might be new while others cliche but still enjoyable. I stopped reading at chapter 20 out of personal taste, but that’s just my opinion which I won’t include I’ll be as non-biased as possible.

......................................................................................... Awesomen😍😍😍😍 keep the good work mate👍 .........................................................................................

Latest chapter killed this in my eyes... I can no longer pretend the constantly falling quality is just the author's subpar linguistic skills... MC basically just nonchalantly asked his "crush" to pay him back for his services with her body in the middle of his "confession." And then proceeded to force a kiss on her in the moment of shock that followed. But ofc, since the author sees nothing wrong with that, she gives a positive response. The first part could be the language barrier. The 2nd part is not as easy to excuse, and worse(since he doesn't just ask for something fcked up, which could have just been meant as a joke. He actually forcefully takes it. Entering the realm of what I'd consider a legit crime. A fairly minor one relatively speaking, but a real sexual harassment crime all the same. And I don't see how a language barrier would excuse it this time). To draw a comparison, how would you like it if a larger and stronger guy than you. One that you've known for some time, and at least tacitly trust - Suddenly says something that shocks you into a stupor, and then forces a kiss on you while you're out of it. It's likely not the same, due the general sexual orientation. But I had to include the part about them towering over you, both in terms of physical ability, and size. And have you consider that you don't know the other's thought on the subject yet, you just push past that.

wish fulfilment story with a bunch of plot armor. Author changed how some force abilities work for... I don't know, more plot armor??? Seriously there is just too many things wrong about the force in this ff, if you are true fan of sw you should stay away from this.

This book keeps getting better and better I can’t stop reading it so please keep writing this book and please write the next chapters soon so I’ll be able to read it thank you 🙏🙏

Episode I is now complete and cannon is destroyed!!!!!! Probably the best Star-wars fan fiction out there, just read and enjoy!!!!! ............................................................................................................................xp

The story is well written, and quite entertaining, although the MC might seem a little clumsy in the beginning. But the Author has trouble putting the right articles, upholding a consistent sentence structure and narrative (it switches back and forth between first and third person, sometimes in the same sentence) so it can get a little irritating from time to time!

Shameless grinding of exp.

Sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo Goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood Please write moaaaaar

Although the writing quality is average at best, considering author's language it's more than acceptable. Update stability is perfect but considering it's just the beginning of the novel we have to see in the future how author will keep going . Overall and all things considered it's a very fascinating fanfic specially since it's from SW. I say give it a try and by ignoring some grammatic mistakes, enjoy this novel

Me gusta mucho la historia, aunque solo va en el arco 1, no se apresura como otros, y muestra habilidades y cosas no solo de las películas sino de todo el universo de Star Wars, lo que es un buen toque ya que es una franquicia muy grande y con potencial para un fanfiction. En especial me gusta mucho su habilidad Mechu-Deru, aunque no entiendo porque sería malvado ya que manipula máquinas, no seres vivos. Los personajes son retratados como se muestran en la película, Qui gon es amable y de mente más bodega que el jedi promedio, Obi wan es un mocoso arrogante, Padme es una niña valiente, decidida e ingenua. No creo que haya un mejor fanfic de Star Wars, y felicito al autor y espero que continúe con esta excelente historia.

The story has left cannon, huge changes so far....He totally stole the Siths milk money!!!!! And I am sure Luke and his sister may not exist in this universe [Thumbs up!] ...................................................................................................................