Reviews of Rebirth in the 50's
Rebirth in the 50's
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Decent story, poor execution. I always like isekai stories and I myself write them. This particular story felt nice but it has flaws. loads of flaws. the abrupt change of tense isn't pleasant but the main issue is pacing. one moment mc is cursing her life and the next moment she's dying. I think this story would benefit a lot with a proper edit. If I'm being harsh, sorry. but that's just the truth. hopefully, you'll continue to write this and improve it. good luck
I'm sorry to say this but I believe this story has a load of flaws. The pacing in the story was to fast. One minute mc was complaining the next she's dead. You needd to establish the characters better then that and explain each scene, there looks, emotions, ... etc. The next problem was the scenes were jumbled together it was hard to distinguish were each began. The sentence structure also needs work. I got lost multiple times trying to follow the story. I get what your trying to say and do but the writing quality is so poor that it doesn't matter. I know this is hard to read, but don't take it to heart like i'm after you. Use it as motivation to prove me wrong and fix your book.
The writing quality could use some work. Most of it can be fixed with a few formatting changes like capitalizing some letters and finishing quotes. Story development seems to be interesting and solid overall. Character design seems decent, but there are some things that are missed. I think a bit more time could be used to describe how the characters look. The story could also use a bit more description. When it comes to laying out the setting and describing the characters in more detail. World background is pretty good but, could use a bit more detail. I like how this is a more light-hearted story and isn't a crazy story about monsters. No disrepsect to those stories, some are great. It's just refreshing to get a more normal and realistic one. Keep working author, there is always room for growth. I look forward to seeing what comes next.
this is one of these stories that make me think what I got now isn't so bad and I should be thankful what I got now. Author did a good job with the understanding of what the money lows was like in the 50s also divides. It quite difficult to know something from the past when wasn't there so good job.
