Review Detail of Nr_Yet1208 in Rebirth in the 50's

Decent story, poor execution. I always like isekai stories and I myself write them. This particular story felt nice but it has flaws. loads of flaws. the abrupt change of tense isn't pleasant but the main issue is pacing. one moment mc is cursing her life and the next moment she's dying. I think this story would benefit a lot with a proper edit. If I'm being harsh, sorry. but that's just the truth. hopefully, you'll continue to write this and improve it. good luck