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Ember's Crown

Author: Clone_v2
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Releases: Wednesdays, Thursdays and Saturdays (for the time being) 20,000 years ago the Towers emerged. From the Towers, a mysterious force known as "Tension" Spread through the walled continent of Aspire. In a dying land, replete with corruption and bloodshed, Nero XIII dreams of ascending the Grand Tower and seizing the power to change the world... Or will he choose to destroy it instead? He isn't transmigrated, he isn't reincarnated, he doesn't have a system. What he does have is years of training under the enigmatic "Father" and an unshakable will. Raised as the perfect weapon from youth, Nero sets out on a journey to scale the heights of power, strike fear into the hearts of those who cross him, and claim Ember's Crown. ______________________________ Check out my webnovel reviews at: clonereviews.wordpress.com If you have the money spare, please consider supporting me on Patreon on Paypal. Links below. https://www.paypal.com/donate?hosted_button_id=YXPYPHDR7L3CY https://www.patreon.com/user?u=11594848

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Chapter 1The Doors

The towering golden gates mark the entrance of Sapphire Academy, its majesty rivalled only by the foreboding reality of what waits on the other side.

I had heard the rumours, everyone has. For the nameless, Sapphire Academy is the equivalent of a death sentence, and that's what I am. Nero XIII, nameless. Born a nobody into a family of nobodies. I grew up with nothing and even that was taken from me.

Since the day I was born, no one expected anything from me. No one, but Father, and he's gone now too.

My right hand clenches into a fist at my side. Maybe no one expects anything from me, but I am strong. I have come too far to turn back now.

As I move forward, the titan gates to the academy squeak gradually open permitting me entry. Pressing ahead, I pass the threshold of the school and enter into its gaping maw. As I progress, the clap of feet alerts my mind to the people behind me. A few pass by. Some walking in groups, others like me are alone, but from each face I glimpse, I notice the same expression of nervous apprehension I suspect is mirrored by my own.

'I'm going to die', I hear someone whisper. Repeatedly, like a mantra, the acknowledgement of impending demise spreads through the crowd like a plague born of words.

The truth is, They might....

No.

They probably will. Their fears are not misplaced. It isn't an odd occurrence for applicants to die during the Sapphire Academy entrance exams. It isn't rare at all.

Of the hundreds of candidates each year, I've heard that only fifty pass. Maybe around fifty fail to try again, but the majority, they die. Their bodies returned to their Clans or unceremoniously buried in unmarked graves beneath one of the fields of the nameless.

"There's no equality in this world, not even in death."

Father's words spring to my mind, releasing a surge of rage-fuelled adrenaline throughout my body. Nails claw the flesh of my palm as my fist tightens.

Breathe.

Allowing air to rush in, I recenter my mind and retune my senses to the surroundings.

Like a fish swimming with a school, guided by the multitudes, I navigate the vast and unfamiliar academy grounds. Allowing my thoughts to wander, I drift with the tide of fellow applicants and allow them to guide.

Unsure of how much time has passed, I return to myself as I feel the push and pull of the crowd around me relent.

We have arrived.

An Immense stone tablet protrudes from the earth beneath. Engraved on every inch of it, a name, written in large, underneath a group number, ranging from one to one-hundred and forty. Systematically, my eyes traverse the groups and names until I find my own.

"Nero XIII – Group: 132. Waiting Area: E"

Tracking the signs throughout the academy grounds, I make my way to the prescribed waiting area. A large tented space. Inside, a bustling crowd with more gradually trickling in.

'Group one three two', I hear someone shout.

'Group one three two!' Another voice, a male voice timidly replies.'

'I'm in group one three two.' In the sea of roaming bodies, locating a single call amongst the wave of harmonious voices presents a challenge. Through swivelling head and roving eyes, I find the source of the cries.

A girl and a boy no older than fifteen wade through the crowd and make their way to one another. I follow suit.

'One-three-two?' The girl asks. The boy nods. 'Ha!', she screams enthusiastically, 'Well it took you long enough, I've been waiting here forever! You know, it's not good to keep a lady waiting. Where's the other one', she asks, frantically shifting her from head side to side as if in profound disagreement.

'That would be me,' I reply.

'Well you took your sweet time getting here, but I'll forgive you just this once since this is our first-time meeting. Amy II', she says without pausing. 'Nice to meet you.'

'You're nameless?' I ask.

'Yeah, and what of it?' Amy retorts. 'I don't need a name, with my boundless potential I'll make a name for myself!', she declares while making her hand into a fist and pumping her arm. 'What am I supposed to call you anyway?' She asks

'Nero XIII', I say back. 'Like you, I'm Nameless-'

'Boundless you mean', Amy interrupts. 'Don't let anyone tell you otherwise', she continues with a beaming smile on her face radiating enough warmth to rival the sun.

'And what about you?' She asks, turning to the cowering boy beside me. The boy turns and looks at me as if pleading with me to somehow save him from some unrelenting force. I shrug, and his expression turns from one of silent petition to mournful acceptance.

'Tarik West, my name is Tarik West', he tells us.

'I haven't heard of your clan,' I tell him.

'That's actually why I'm here on this suicide mission,' he replies. 'The West clan is the smallest in Area VIII. We're not well known and we're not particularly powerful. If I'm being honest, I don't have any business attempting these exams', he says in a defeated tone. 'It's not a foregone conclusion, one must always account for the possibility of a miracle, but I'm reasonably confident I'm going to die here', Tarik says in an increasingly downcast voice. For a moment, between the three of us, it is silent. Amy lifts her right arm to the sky; she balls her hand into a fist and forcefully hammers Tarik's head with it.

'You need a miracle?' She asks, 'well you're looking at her.'

'You don't understand', Tarik begins

'No, you don't understand', Amy interrupts. 'You're in my team, that means victory is guaranteed! No more of this "I'm going to die" nonsense.' She turns to me and says, 'and that goes for you as well! Nameless, low-tier, mid-tier, or high-tier, it doesn't matter. All that matters is the will to be somebody, and I have enough of that for all three of us. I'm strong', she continues. 'So, don't worry so much; If you feel weak then you can lean on me.' Whatever nerves I had been feeling evaporate under the warmth of her words, even Tarik appears at ease.

'That's a heavy promise to make to people you just met', Tarik says. Amy moves her fist directly in front of Tarik's face.

'Do you want another whack?' Amy asks in a tone that blurs the lines between playful and genuinely menacing. 'I've said it now, and I always keep my promises', she finishes confidently. I hear laughter erupt, my laughter I recognise it as my laughter. I hadn't laughed like this since before I met Father...

'You think I'm kidding around', Amy growls.

'It's not that', I say. 'I'm just happy I got to meet you, both of you', I say, turning my head towards Tarik. Amy smiles. Her smile widens.

The minutes tick away as we talk among ourselves. Amy tells us the story of growing up in Area II's Tanker Village. She tells us about how she was the only person in her entire village able to use tension, how she used to stand up to bullies and protect the downtrodden and oppressed in her community's middle school.

Giving a partial re-enactment, Amy regales us of how she single-handedly protected her village from mounted goblins and spider-wolves. She tells us of how her mother didn't want her to attend any Academy and how, in order to live up to her potential, she had to disobey them, hitch dozens of carts, and bunk a dozen more journeys on a steam train just to get here in time to enrol this year. Tarik's less than encouraging comments regarding her decision to join the academy is met with disproportionate, playful violence, and we all laugh together.

Without feeling the time, hours pass.

'So, you know why we're here. 'What brings you to Sapphire?' Amy asks, looking in my direction.

'I was born in Sunlet Village, right at the border of Area XIII', I say, inspiring silence from both Tarik and Amy.

'When the Xander Clan attacked, my family were one of the many to die. I was orphaned. Orphaned as collateral damage in the power struggle between high-tier Clans. Though it was their fault', I say in an increasingly aggressive tone. 'Not a single highborn bastard did anything for any of the nameless survivors of their war.'

Seconds pass in silence before I continue. 'I'm here so that I can get stronger, strong enough to conquer the Grand Tower, and put an end to rot decaying this world.'

We stand where we are, none of us saying a word. A moment passes, Amy wipes a tear with one hand and with the other, she places it atop of my shoulder.

'Now that's what I'm talking about!' She screams in my face, as if unable to hold back a stream of excitement. 'Two nameless nobodies are about to change the entire world.'

'The Grand Tower?' Tarik exclaims. 'No one has been able to conquer the Grand Tower since the First King, thousands of years ago. You two are crazy!'

Amy's smile broadens, she puts an arm around my shoulder as if the two of us have taken a united stance.

'All the best people are.' She replies.

Tarik and Amy argue back and forth on the merits of their opposing worldviews, occasionally turning to me for support. Though Tarik espouses a bleak worldview where the strong oppress the weak, and we all die before the sun sets, I notice that being around Amy calms him. He doesn't believe what he is saying, not in the way he had just minutes before.

At the peripheral of my eye, I sense a gaze from across the tent. Turning to identify the source of the glare, I see a well-dressed boy. His hair is well kept, short, and dark; his clothes wouldn't be out of place at a high society ball. A dramatic contrast to how Amy and I are dressed. Mud-stained and tattered, the comparison's a joke. Even Tarik, who juxtaposed with us looks like royalty, compares poorly to the well-dressed teen.

Not to be outdone by his attire, our stalker, bulged with well-defined muscles in every part muscle could possibly form on a human body, and yet his tall, lean frame implies to me, more agility than anyone with his musculature has any right to expect. breaking the persistent argument between my newfound friends, I direct their attention towards the youth.

'Who is that?'

Colour drains from Tarik's face.

'That's Wolf Yung,' He stutters. 'He's the younger brother of the Yung clan head. The renowned genius, Xan Yung.' trembling, Tarik describes the Yung clan. He details their propensity for violence and their reputation for unparalleled strength among the mid-tier Clans. Emphasising in no unclear terms, he lets us know they're not a group "normal people" can handle, all while pleading with Amy not to antagonise him.

'It doesn't seem like I have to do anything', Amy remarks. 'He already seems plenty antagonised.' It's true, not once did I see Wolf's eyes not fixed in my direction. If Wolf is someone we need to avoid in order to survive, Tarik's first evaluation may be right.

There's no getting around it, he's not going to just let us go.

I've seen those eyes before. They're the eyes of a hunter. The eyes of a beast that see all as prey. Lambs to the slaughter, no more than food. I've seen those eyes before.

They're Father's eyes...

They're my eyes as well.

'If you could please follow me.'

Breaking me free from my thoughts, I track a voice behind me and see a woman in her twenties. She would be beautiful, no. She is beautiful. Dishevelled, but beautiful.

Her indigo hair is scattered in every direction as if fleeing an electric shock. Her clothing, creased and ruffled. Her skin would be like porcelain, but for the grime she allows to reside there. To my eyes, the only thing betraying her appearance as a vagrant is her breath-taking beauty and the sapphire badge she carries above her left breast.

'Don't make me repeat myself,' the woman says with more than a hint of annoyance in her voice. The three of us follow the woman.

'Who are you?' Tarik asks.

'Nettle,' the woman replies. 'I'm the instructor for your first assessment'

'Is the first test now?' Tarik continues

'Yep', Nettle replies apathetically. The two of them continue in their exchange; Tarik asking banal questions, Nettle replying with as few syllables necessary to convey meaning. Each passing word shades the girl's face in red, until, finally she turns to face her harasser.

'Do you ever shut up?' Nettle explodes. Unclear if it's caused by Tarik or the foliage in her hair, she scratches her head in irritation. With a snort, she continues our journey, leading us before enormous double doors on the outside of what seems like an immense colosseum.

'We're here', She says, betraying the relief in her voice. 'Right through there.' she goes on, pointing at the hulking double door affixed between us and the inside of the amphitheatre. 'Good luck. You have twenty minutes.' The ambient Tension in the air congeals around the woman, without looking back she walks through the doors.

'That was mist walk', Tarik says in surprise.

'We can marvel at her Art later', Amy interjects. 'Right now, we have a test to pass.' She runs at the doors, placing a hand on each door, Amy pushes.

The door remains closed

'This might be easier if you two actually help out', Amy shouts. Moving forward, I push one of the doors while Tarik pushes the other.

Nothing.

We push and grunt and sweat and push and push and push and push and push, but the doors don't move.

'This can't be about physical strength', Amy remarks, 'If this were about strength the doors would have opened when I first pushed it.' Once again, I feel the Tension shift in the atmosphere, this time it's around Amy. She focuses the Tension into the door. Nothing.

'Hey!' she says, 'hold my shoulders; match your tension output to mine.' I place my right arm on Amy's left shoulder, Tarik places his left on her right. I feel the Tension as it leaves Amy's body, I focus on that feeling. Drawing a deep breath, I match her output, Tarik must have done the same as the doors, the impassable, mammoth doors...

They swing open.

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Clone_v2
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Alright, you know how this works. It's time for an author's shameless self-review. What makes this particularly awkward is that I actually write reviews for my blog. If I were to be completely honest in a legitimate review, my webnovel would get high marks, but not the highest out of the several webnovels I've reviewed so far. That being said, now's not the time, to be brutally honest, but the time to promote. Why should you read Ember's Crown? That's easy. It's a great Webnovel. It starts off good, but it gets great. I'm serious. As of now, there are 30 chapters released. I have more scheduled for release, and even more chapters mapped out ready for writing. If you just read the 30 chapters I have out now, you'll see what I mean. It starts out good, but then it gets great. I'm a never-ending fount of awesome ideas, and Ember's Crown is the beneficiary of those ideas. I weave the story in such a way that it seamlessly connects in awesome ways. Nothing is forgotten, abandoned or left out. When you read this webnovel, you'll see what I mean. I'm not throwing around random adventures because I'm not at a loss for where I want to take this story. I took the bold approach of blending the observations of the third person with the intimacy and detail of the first person. If you're worried that as a first-person story, this webnovel is slow or very internal, allow me to put those worries to rest. This webnovel is fast-paced in one sense, the story is always moving forward, and it's slow-paced in another sense. Moments are fleshed out and expanded upon. My goal in writing Ember's Crown was to write a story that I would be excited to read. I think I've done that. I hope my excitement for this story pours out of the pages and reaches you. I want you to be just as excited to read Ember's Crown as I am to write it. So, do I think you should read this Webnovel? Yes, I really think you should. I think you'll enjoy it, and I really want you along with me for this awesome journey we get to experience together. Alright, shameless promotion dispensed with, I'll let you judge for yourselves. Ciao.

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BlueBlueLemonLv4

Throughout three chapters so far, I can say that I am intrigued. The plot is looking solid so far. The take of our protagonist taking a cruel challenge to begin his quest for a grand change works very well on how the author plans to build the world background. It is clear from the few chapters that the author has a knack for creating scenarios with details excellent details. From the gruelling battles and an environment where only despair can be mostly seen, it has been conveyed clearly through the way it was written. Although what made the most impression was the characters. The behaviour and characteristic of the first few characters that have been introduced are already cemented in such a short time. This might also be due to the detailed writing of the author. Yet the detailed writing may be too much in some parts of the story especially in dialogues between the characters. It is fine to explain how the characters act during a conversation, but sometimes it is better to have none. Another small thing I noticed is the use of 'tension'. In this story, it is supposed to be like a power conduit for the characters. But because 'tension' has not yet been properly explained except in the synopsis, sometimes there are parts where I got confused on how it was used in the paragraph because the literal meaning of 'tension' also works. It might be better to capitalize 'Tension' when it concerns the mysterious force. Besides that, there maybe be some grammatical and punctuation mistakes which can be improved later on. The usage of (' ') and (" ") might get confusing at first, but you'll get used to it sooner or later. OVERALL: A promising story with promising characters. P.S. I feel like Tragedy will be good in this even though I'm not really a fan of it.

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87wLv2

Here is my honest review for your novel! I hope it can be useful for future references :D The way you write the story is very charming. Lots of choice of words and very less repetitive words. You can describe the appearance of location without making it sounds boring, and I also have a clear image of the location you described. There’s also lots of good one liners. Amy has most of them. Nero has lots of them too, but mostly it’s not the spoken dialogue, it’s in his head. The tone of the story. It’s full of tension (no pun intended) from the beginning to the end. The lighthearted moment didn’t ruin the tension, which is even better. Battle scene. The battle scene is clear and it has very less repetitive words. Normally in battle scene words such as ‘attacked’ or ‘defended’ become repetitive, but in this novel it doesn’t. Personal opinion only: 1. About Nero: Nero described as someone very hard on himself, but he ended up telling lots of his life stories to the two new friends he just met. Looking inside Nero’s mind is fun, the choice of words described in his mind is really good. I like this protagonist, but I’ll like him more if you show more his internal conflict of trust to contrast with Amy’s charisma to move people. (After reading some more, I notice Amy has died, so never mind ._.) 2. About Amy: I think Amy’s charisma will shine more if only she could move the protagonist at later chapter (maybe chapter 3 or 4) instead of the first chapter at their first meeting. I really like Amy’s one liners, she had all the cool positive quotes without making it sounds annoying or demanding. And that is why I think her charisma will shine more if you show a scene where a character slowly show their trust to her at later chapter instead of their first or second meeting. It doesn’t have to be only towards her friends, Amy could be a really great character if her charisma will somehow affect one of the villain. (However since she died, maybe never mind. I just put this here coz I have spend some time and thought to write it ._.) 3. About wolf From the description, I instantly Imagine a very cool and edgy villain or maybe rival. However in his first battle, he said something along the lines of “everyone exist for my entertainment.” This line ended up became very cartoonishly evil. One of the charm of edgy villain is, they are actually intimidating. But these lines are not intimidating at all. Rather than writing about how “everyone is insect and lowly trash for my entertainment.” How about try to make it more like: “They are small, weak, helpless. I want to kill them to relieve their suffering. It’s a give and take relationship, I got my entertainment, I gave them a painless death.” (Edgy, realistic, somewhat sad, sympathetic) however it’s also depends on the personality of the villain. The dialogue I write above doesn’t match Wolf at all since he’s more ruthless and less sympathetic. Also, wolf has this dialogue: “What belongs to me is mine and only mine to destroy.” This sounds somewat funny and not intimidating at all. I think it will be more intimidating if it’s reworded like this: “My belongings is mine and how I treat it is none of your business.” For a realistic edgy villain, avoid using cartoonishly evil insult such as (trash, insect, lowly something, etc) and try to find any other word to replace those. Cartoonishly evil insult will make the villain less intimidating, less charming, and less relatable. 4. The girl Amy fight in chapter 6 This one is also a comically evil antagonist. Most of her line is just served her role as an antagonist, but not as a person. Normally ‘people in power’ would avoid topic about oppression. But this character just going with the topic and said “I do it because I can!” Which normally actual evil people won’t say. Normally actual evil people would made it seems like it’s the fault of the oppressed one, in other words gaslighted them. Adding various gaslight moment will make this character much more intimidating and horror inducing. Example: if this antagonist fight Nero Nero: why did you have to kill her?! Antagonist: ask yourself, why did you abandon her?! You’re stronger than her, so you should be the one who took her place at that time! (This is example of gaslight) Nero: *induced with guilt* (it’s not actually his fault) (I know she’s dead, this is just example. Also my portrayal of Nero in the dialogue above might be out of character) 5. Space between paragraph. I notice lots of times 3-4 dialogue shoved into 1 paragraph. Separating the paragraph for each dialogue will make it easier to read. Putting more than 1 dialogue in paragraph usually done when the character continuing what they said after they stopped for a brief moment for some reason. Example is if the character chuckled for a bit before continuing what they said. 6. Update Writing a good piece takes time, I know. In this webnovel however, their standard is kinda different. They give better exposure for novel that updates often. Many webnovel authors aim to update daily. Or at least five chapters per week. However if your novel is really just a passion project, then you don’t need to worry about this. Updating daily usually done by author who tried to win a contest to get their story contracted. That’s it! Please keep up the good work!

mozza_mello
mozza_melloLv3

Alright, let's beginnnnn my long-ass review :D First off, lemme say that this is, indeed, a quality book! So good job on that, author! <3 The writing is absolutely impeccable. Even though this is a fantasy genre, but the writing is poetic and the author was able to describe the setting in detail. I could imagine the place and the events pretty clearly in my head! :D I really love that this novel mainly utilizes first-person POV, makes it easier for me to get immersed in their story hehe! The characters also felt real and they're well fleshed-out, I think it was clear that the author put a lot of thinking into them hehe! For the update schedule, I won't complain even though the frequency is pretty low. But to me, I always think that quality is better than quantity so it okei hehe! Although, as far as I know, this site favors books that are frequently updated (maybe daily?), so it would be better if you can update it like, maybe 2-3 times a week? :D Now please keep in mind that my suggestions are all personal opinion, not facts okie :D First, I think some paragraphs could be spaced out more, particularly when there are like 3-4 dialogues in a single paragraph. Some paragraphs containing fight scenes are also very long imo, but I guess it's needed for the flow? So it's up to you hehe! :D Secondly, I like the characters, I really do. But maybe I'd be able to connect even more with them if there are more of "show, not tell" in terms of their backstory. The thing is, you were able to convey their emotions and thoughts so well using first-person POV, but in the first chapter, for example, Amy's backstory was spilled in around 1-2 paragraphs when they gathered around and share their story. It's not bad, honestly, it painted the picture for us readers. But a bit of a glimpse would also be nice? :D Maybe like, when Amy told them about how she hitched rides and stuff to arrive there, it could've been conveyed through dialogues like, Tarik says "ah, I regret coming here," and Amy could reply by saying "dude, I've gone through this and this just to be here. Don't be so gloomy, you got me!" But aye, those are just my personal opinion hehe! Me really like how well-thought the world background and the characters are :D Also, I like your poetic writing style and your plot! :D Great work, authorrr <3

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