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Entrail_JI
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2021-07-16 14:25

Writing quality : The writing quality is absolutely superb. Poetic and fluent in every way. Stability of updates : mh...It seems like there is a 5-month gap between the last post and the newest post. But seeing that author is starting to pick up the story I will leave it to the benefit of the doubt and still give it a 5 star. Hopefully you continue writing this story and update it regularly cus you have my collection. Story development : Only 8 chapters so I can't really comment to much with regards to this, but so far it is impeccable. Character design : Even though there are only 8 chapters, you can't put anything below 5 stars as each character is well throughout and the author does a magnificent job at depicting their character well. World background : Same as before. There are only 8 chapters and thus not much to work with. But so far, I would say it is going in the right direction. 5 star through and through Extra thoughts : The author uses ' for dialogues, which is not wrong, it's just that it can be confusing since most authors on this platform use ". Most of the time ' would be used for internal monologues. This is just my personal opinion so you don't really have to follow through with this. anyhow this story, accompanied by its impeccable grammar, has A LOT of potentials. All it needs is a constant update schedule and the author can find himself with a gem.

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Alright, you know how this works. It's time for an author's shameless self-review. What makes this particularly awkward is that I actually write reviews for my blog. If I were to be completely honest in a legitimate review, my webnovel would get high marks, but not the highest out of the several webnovels I've reviewed so far. That being said, now's not the time, to be brutally honest, but the time to promote. Why should you read Ember's Crown? That's easy. It's a great Webnovel. It starts off good, but it gets great. I'm serious. As of now, there are 30 chapters released. I have more scheduled for release, and even more chapters mapped out ready for writing. If you just read the 30 chapters I have out now, you'll see what I mean. It starts out good, but then it gets great. I'm a never-ending fount of awesome ideas, and Ember's Crown is the beneficiary of those ideas. I weave the story in such a way that it seamlessly connects in awesome ways. Nothing is forgotten, abandoned or left out. When you read this webnovel, you'll see what I mean. I'm not throwing around random adventures because I'm not at a loss for where I want to take this story. I took the bold approach of blending the observations of the third person with the intimacy and detail of the first person. If you're worried that as a first-person story, this webnovel is slow or very internal, allow me to put those worries to rest. This webnovel is fast-paced in one sense, the story is always moving forward, and it's slow-paced in another sense. Moments are fleshed out and expanded upon. My goal in writing Ember's Crown was to write a story that I would be excited to read. I think I've done that. I hope my excitement for this story pours out of the pages and reaches you. I want you to be just as excited to read Ember's Crown as I am to write it. So, do I think you should read this Webnovel? Yes, I really think you should. I think you'll enjoy it, and I really want you along with me for this awesome journey we get to experience together. Alright, shameless promotion dispensed with, I'll let you judge for yourselves. Ciao.

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Throughout three chapters so far, I can say that I am intrigued. The plot is looking solid so far. The take of our protagonist taking a cruel challenge to begin his quest for a grand change works very well on how the author plans to build the world background. It is clear from the few chapters that the author has a knack for creating scenarios with details excellent details. From the gruelling battles and an environment where only despair can be mostly seen, it has been conveyed clearly through the way it was written. Although what made the most impression was the characters. The behaviour and characteristic of the first few characters that have been introduced are already cemented in such a short time. This might also be due to the detailed writing of the author. Yet the detailed writing may be too much in some parts of the story especially in dialogues between the characters. It is fine to explain how the characters act during a conversation, but sometimes it is better to have none. Another small thing I noticed is the use of 'tension'. In this story, it is supposed to be like a power conduit for the characters. But because 'tension' has not yet been properly explained except in the synopsis, sometimes there are parts where I got confused on how it was used in the paragraph because the literal meaning of 'tension' also works. It might be better to capitalize 'Tension' when it concerns the mysterious force. Besides that, there maybe be some grammatical and punctuation mistakes which can be improved later on. The usage of (' ') and (" ") might get confusing at first, but you'll get used to it sooner or later. OVERALL: A promising story with promising characters. P.S. I feel like Tragedy will be good in this even though I'm not really a fan of it.

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