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2021-02-15 17:13

Alright, let's beginnnnn my long-ass review :D First off, lemme say that this is, indeed, a quality book! So good job on that, author! <3 The writing is absolutely impeccable. Even though this is a fantasy genre, but the writing is poetic and the author was able to describe the setting in detail. I could imagine the place and the events pretty clearly in my head! :D I really love that this novel mainly utilizes first-person POV, makes it easier for me to get immersed in their story hehe! The characters also felt real and they're well fleshed-out, I think it was clear that the author put a lot of thinking into them hehe! For the update schedule, I won't complain even though the frequency is pretty low. But to me, I always think that quality is better than quantity so it okei hehe! Although, as far as I know, this site favors books that are frequently updated (maybe daily?), so it would be better if you can update it like, maybe 2-3 times a week? :D Now please keep in mind that my suggestions are all personal opinion, not facts okie :D First, I think some paragraphs could be spaced out more, particularly when there are like 3-4 dialogues in a single paragraph. Some paragraphs containing fight scenes are also very long imo, but I guess it's needed for the flow? So it's up to you hehe! :D Secondly, I like the characters, I really do. But maybe I'd be able to connect even more with them if there are more of "show, not tell" in terms of their backstory. The thing is, you were able to convey their emotions and thoughts so well using first-person POV, but in the first chapter, for example, Amy's backstory was spilled in around 1-2 paragraphs when they gathered around and share their story. It's not bad, honestly, it painted the picture for us readers. But a bit of a glimpse would also be nice? :D Maybe like, when Amy told them about how she hitched rides and stuff to arrive there, it could've been conveyed through dialogues like, Tarik says "ah, I regret coming here," and Amy could reply by saying "dude, I've gone through this and this just to be here. Don't be so gloomy, you got me!" But aye, those are just my personal opinion hehe! Me really like how well-thought the world background and the characters are :D Also, I like your poetic writing style and your plot! :D Great work, authorrr <3

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Alright, you know how this works. It's time for an author's shameless self-review. What makes this particularly awkward is that I actually write reviews for my blog. If I were to be completely honest in a legitimate review, my webnovel would get high marks, but not the highest out of the several webnovels I've reviewed so far. That being said, now's not the time, to be brutally honest, but the time to promote. Why should you read Ember's Crown? That's easy. It's a great Webnovel. It starts off good, but it gets great. I'm serious. As of now, there are 30 chapters released. I have more scheduled for release, and even more chapters mapped out ready for writing. If you just read the 30 chapters I have out now, you'll see what I mean. It starts out good, but then it gets great. I'm a never-ending fount of awesome ideas, and Ember's Crown is the beneficiary of those ideas. I weave the story in such a way that it seamlessly connects in awesome ways. Nothing is forgotten, abandoned or left out. When you read this webnovel, you'll see what I mean. I'm not throwing around random adventures because I'm not at a loss for where I want to take this story. I took the bold approach of blending the observations of the third person with the intimacy and detail of the first person. If you're worried that as a first-person story, this webnovel is slow or very internal, allow me to put those worries to rest. This webnovel is fast-paced in one sense, the story is always moving forward, and it's slow-paced in another sense. Moments are fleshed out and expanded upon. My goal in writing Ember's Crown was to write a story that I would be excited to read. I think I've done that. I hope my excitement for this story pours out of the pages and reaches you. I want you to be just as excited to read Ember's Crown as I am to write it. So, do I think you should read this Webnovel? Yes, I really think you should. I think you'll enjoy it, and I really want you along with me for this awesome journey we get to experience together. Alright, shameless promotion dispensed with, I'll let you judge for yourselves. Ciao.

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Throughout three chapters so far, I can say that I am intrigued. The plot is looking solid so far. The take of our protagonist taking a cruel challenge to begin his quest for a grand change works very well on how the author plans to build the world background. It is clear from the few chapters that the author has a knack for creating scenarios with details excellent details. From the gruelling battles and an environment where only despair can be mostly seen, it has been conveyed clearly through the way it was written. Although what made the most impression was the characters. The behaviour and characteristic of the first few characters that have been introduced are already cemented in such a short time. This might also be due to the detailed writing of the author. Yet the detailed writing may be too much in some parts of the story especially in dialogues between the characters. It is fine to explain how the characters act during a conversation, but sometimes it is better to have none. Another small thing I noticed is the use of 'tension'. In this story, it is supposed to be like a power conduit for the characters. But because 'tension' has not yet been properly explained except in the synopsis, sometimes there are parts where I got confused on how it was used in the paragraph because the literal meaning of 'tension' also works. It might be better to capitalize 'Tension' when it concerns the mysterious force. Besides that, there maybe be some grammatical and punctuation mistakes which can be improved later on. The usage of (' ') and (" ") might get confusing at first, but you'll get used to it sooner or later. OVERALL: A promising story with promising characters. P.S. I feel like Tragedy will be good in this even though I'm not really a fan of it.

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