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2021-02-15 07:56

Wow, I'm amazed by the grammar and the structure management over your paragraphs. After reading just the first chapter, I realized that my work needs way more refinement compare to your writing. So far I really enjoyed how the story has taken me, and I think that this book deserves much more attention! Keep up the phenomenal work!

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Thank you kindly. My main drawback in gaining attention is the pace at which I write. I'm thinking of releasing more regularly, but I don't want to lose consisistency. Thank you for your kind words.

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Alright, you know how this works. It's time for an author's shameless self-review. What makes this particularly awkward is that I actually write reviews for my blog. If I were to be completely honest in a legitimate review, my webnovel would get high marks, but not the highest out of the several webnovels I've reviewed so far. That being said, now's not the time, to be brutally honest, but the time to promote. Why should you read Ember's Crown? That's easy. It's a great Webnovel. It starts off good, but it gets great. I'm serious. As of now, there are 30 chapters released. I have more scheduled for release, and even more chapters mapped out ready for writing. If you just read the 30 chapters I have out now, you'll see what I mean. It starts out good, but then it gets great. I'm a never-ending fount of awesome ideas, and Ember's Crown is the beneficiary of those ideas. I weave the story in such a way that it seamlessly connects in awesome ways. Nothing is forgotten, abandoned or left out. When you read this webnovel, you'll see what I mean. I'm not throwing around random adventures because I'm not at a loss for where I want to take this story. I took the bold approach of blending the observations of the third person with the intimacy and detail of the first person. If you're worried that as a first-person story, this webnovel is slow or very internal, allow me to put those worries to rest. This webnovel is fast-paced in one sense, the story is always moving forward, and it's slow-paced in another sense. Moments are fleshed out and expanded upon. My goal in writing Ember's Crown was to write a story that I would be excited to read. I think I've done that. I hope my excitement for this story pours out of the pages and reaches you. I want you to be just as excited to read Ember's Crown as I am to write it. So, do I think you should read this Webnovel? Yes, I really think you should. I think you'll enjoy it, and I really want you along with me for this awesome journey we get to experience together. Alright, shameless promotion dispensed with, I'll let you judge for yourselves. Ciao.

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Throughout three chapters so far, I can say that I am intrigued. The plot is looking solid so far. The take of our protagonist taking a cruel challenge to begin his quest for a grand change works very well on how the author plans to build the world background. It is clear from the few chapters that the author has a knack for creating scenarios with details excellent details. From the gruelling battles and an environment where only despair can be mostly seen, it has been conveyed clearly through the way it was written. Although what made the most impression was the characters. The behaviour and characteristic of the first few characters that have been introduced are already cemented in such a short time. This might also be due to the detailed writing of the author. Yet the detailed writing may be too much in some parts of the story especially in dialogues between the characters. It is fine to explain how the characters act during a conversation, but sometimes it is better to have none. Another small thing I noticed is the use of 'tension'. In this story, it is supposed to be like a power conduit for the characters. But because 'tension' has not yet been properly explained except in the synopsis, sometimes there are parts where I got confused on how it was used in the paragraph because the literal meaning of 'tension' also works. It might be better to capitalize 'Tension' when it concerns the mysterious force. Besides that, there maybe be some grammatical and punctuation mistakes which can be improved later on. The usage of (' ') and (" ") might get confusing at first, but you'll get used to it sooner or later. OVERALL: A promising story with promising characters. P.S. I feel like Tragedy will be good in this even though I'm not really a fan of it.

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