webnovel
Jeonson
JeonsonLv14yr
2021-02-15 07:56

Wow, I'm amazed by the grammar and the structure management over your paragraphs. After reading just the first chapter, I realized that my work needs way more refinement compare to your writing. So far I really enjoyed how the story has taken me, and I think that this book deserves much more attention! Keep up the phenomenal work!

Liked by 1 people

LIKE
Replies1
Clone_v2
Clone_v2Author

Thank you kindly. My main drawback in gaining attention is the pace at which I write. I'm thinking of releasing more regularly, but I don't want to lose consisistency. Thank you for your kind words.

Other Reviews
Clone_v2
Clone_v2Author

Alright, you know how this works. It's time for an author's shameless self-review. What makes this particularly awkward is that I actually write reviews for my blog. If I were to be completely honest in a legitimate review, my webnovel would get high marks, but not the highest out of the several webnovels I've reviewed so far. That being said, now's not the time, to be brutally honest, but the time to promote. Why should you read Ember's Crown? That's easy. It's a great Webnovel. It starts off good, but it gets great. I'm serious. As of now, there are 30 chapters released. I have more scheduled for release, and even more chapters mapped out ready for writing. If you just read the 30 chapters I have out now, you'll see what I mean. It starts out good, but then it gets great. I'm a never-ending fount of awesome ideas, and Ember's Crown is the beneficiary of those ideas. I weave the story in such a way that it seamlessly connects in awesome ways. Nothing is forgotten, abandoned or left out. When you read this webnovel, you'll see what I mean. I'm not throwing around random adventures because I'm not at a loss for where I want to take this story. I took the bold approach of blending the observations of the third person with the intimacy and detail of the first person. If you're worried that as a first-person story, this webnovel is slow or very internal, allow me to put those worries to rest. This webnovel is fast-paced in one sense, the story is always moving forward, and it's slow-paced in another sense. Moments are fleshed out and expanded upon. My goal in writing Ember's Crown was to write a story that I would be excited to read. I think I've done that. I hope my excitement for this story pours out of the pages and reaches you. I want you to be just as excited to read Ember's Crown as I am to write it. So, do I think you should read this Webnovel? Yes, I really think you should. I think you'll enjoy it, and I really want you along with me for this awesome journey we get to experience together. Alright, shameless promotion dispensed with, I'll let you judge for yourselves. Ciao.

BlueBlueLemon
BlueBlueLemonLv4

Throughout three chapters so far, I can say that I am intrigued. The plot is looking solid so far. The take of our protagonist taking a cruel challenge to begin his quest for a grand change works very well on how the author plans to build the world background. It is clear from the few chapters that the author has a knack for creating scenarios with details excellent details. From the gruelling battles and an environment where only despair can be mostly seen, it has been conveyed clearly through the way it was written. Although what made the most impression was the characters. The behaviour and characteristic of the first few characters that have been introduced are already cemented in such a short time. This might also be due to the detailed writing of the author. Yet the detailed writing may be too much in some parts of the story especially in dialogues between the characters. It is fine to explain how the characters act during a conversation, but sometimes it is better to have none. Another small thing I noticed is the use of 'tension'. In this story, it is supposed to be like a power conduit for the characters. But because 'tension' has not yet been properly explained except in the synopsis, sometimes there are parts where I got confused on how it was used in the paragraph because the literal meaning of 'tension' also works. It might be better to capitalize 'Tension' when it concerns the mysterious force. Besides that, there maybe be some grammatical and punctuation mistakes which can be improved later on. The usage of (' ') and (" ") might get confusing at first, but you'll get used to it sooner or later. OVERALL: A promising story with promising characters. P.S. I feel like Tragedy will be good in this even though I'm not really a fan of it.

Related Stories

SSS rank Mother-In-Law to an Invincible Family

[sexual content and lemons warning] Warning: Sexual content, lemons, Comedy, MILFs, Genius Mc and his harem. Possessive MC, Large Harem, Capable Harem members, No Conscience towards men, Mc is a Chill guy until anything happens to his women. ~×~×~×~×~×~×~×~×~×~×~×~×~ I GOT CLICHED!!!. When Xu Qianghua opened his eyes, he found out that he was reborn back in time before the game Immortal Odyssey: Paths of Destiny merged with his world. With only a few items left with him, Xu Qianghua is stunned and unhappy because he had a good life and was not like those who either betrayed or died to some really powerful monster. Until he saw the introduction of them: Family Token (Chaos): A small world with Immortal veins and high-level spirit crystal mines…. Key of the Ancients(Chaos): A mini-world with infinite monsters and riches to collect…. While Xu Qianghua also deals with his wives Xu Qianghua: Mother-in-law this is wrong Sister Meiying: This is not wrong, I need to check if my daughter can be satisfied. The jumps on Xu Qianghua After a few hours Liu Anwei: Brother Qiang, what were you talking with my mom about? Xu Qianghua: Nothing, your mother wanted you to have a new sibling, so she asked for my help Liu Anwei: What? Read as Xu Qianghua and his now new try again with a different path from his past life which might lead them to ruin or become the strongest family out there. ….. No NTR ..... PS: This is my first novel so I will have a lot of mistakes, so if you find any please feel free to comment and I will fix it as soon as possible. ....... Discord Link: https://discord.gg/9yEfZx3hEa

Anime_timez24 · Fantasy
4.4
444 Chs