Reviews of Cliche Fanfic with Multiverse Travel. (Indefinite Hiatus/Dead)

The Updating stability got 2* everything else is one I'd give zero for some If I could. Firstly I could only make it to page 10 of chapter 2 before I left to make this review (warning). I usually joke about "losing brain cells by reading" but for the very first time I've gotten a headache by just reading 3 paragraphs. In the first chapter I became weary of the main character just from his use of a wish to make him look like a character from FF7. He went on to meet girls for the first time ever invite them into his house where he made out with one and the other one died from laughter (rolling on his floor). If you see nothing wrong with this then you're probably a prepubescent h*rny virgin. I won't even address making out with someone you just met within 5mins while not being drunk, high or a wh*re. In most cultures being a guest at someone home you behave and show manners it's like this in japan aswell in fact they take it to the extreme. So a girl rolling on the floor of the house belonging to a man she just met is yeah… I'm just saying save yourself from reading this or read chapter 2 and you'll see why I couldn't bare any longer.

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Wahaha this is a very good School of Zombies Fanfiction. With his hot docis of Snu snu. And not hesitate to get women and kill if necessary. The story improves as it progresses.😁

Yo author here just going to do a 3 as I know I'm no where near a 4,or 5 even 3 might be pushing it lol. well the story focuses on the MC with not only the worlds themselves having some influence but hidden gods/goddesses doing things to have fun although the outside influence hasn't been much other than some minor things here and there cookie for those who caught them.

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the dialogue and the monologue is so messed up, I don't know who's talking to who, and while reading this novel for 3 minutes my eyes is hurting.

The writing was pretty meh at the beginning and annoying to read, but the author improved largely about chapter 20 or so. Honestly mostly like the story. It's your classic system MC going for a harem but some stories proved you can make it worse then it is so this is a refreshment personally. The biggest complaint is how rushed and cringe it is at start, but honestly it isn't THAT bad, just annoying. It becomes better the longer you read. The characters could be better. Kinda rushed development and it's felt since we're early in the story, but I think it'll be better next world since it'll feel more natural for them to be together like they are. Stable updates, nothing much to add there. I recommend giving it a read and bearing through the more cringe or forced moments.

Ok this story is in no way shape or form a masterpiece, the way the MC gets his girls is stupid and unbelievable 😂. The system and the D&D spell system is so sensless it is nearly a parody moreso because it D&D 3.5 like the worst one of the bunch. The writing quality isn't that great either, not impossible bad but yeah fluid is something else. But the most important thing, did I have fun reading it? Yeah shure did, just get a few drink and don't think to much about stuff and it's a fairly enjoyebel read. Don't expect great storytelling it's basically Smut with a bit of story In it , but hey if the mood gets you for something like that why not.

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It is not a masterpiece. but it is an entertaining story. but what the ****, I'm not paying to read so thanks for the effort in doing something that is entertaining me for free👍🙂🙂🙂

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pensé que iba a ser mejor con danmachi al final, pero es una mierd* no salí de los 10 capítulos por la calidad de escritura, los tartamudeos con comas, los párrafos gigantes que no se entienden, lo estúpido que es el mc fusionando un anillo de almacenamiento con un reloj y le costo 2 millones, después nerfeando el sistema porque la moneda se devalúa, las relaciones que va teniendo como shizuka que al segundo o tercer día ya le toca el dic*, se que es medio tonta pero no tanto, dijo que iba a arreglar los problemas gramaticales pero nunca lo hizo, y tengo una pregunta se supone que tiene el cuerpo de Cloud que es fuerte y todo eso, pero ¿porque se cansa corriendo junto con rei y saya? si se supone que tiene superfuerza no se debería cansar como los demás, bueno es solo una opinión espero que no se tome a mal.

Wahaha este es un fanfiction muy bueno de School of Zombies. Con su docis caliente de Snu snu. Y no dude en conseguir mujeres y matarlas si es necesario. La historia mejora a medida que avanza

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