Review Detail of Traps_Are_Gay in Cliche Fanfic with Multiverse Travel. (Indefinite Hiatus/Dead)

*sigh* I explained in the A/N that the 3rd wish ISN'T looks its to "have the same body" 2 very different things. Next about chapter again in the A/N explain in the original Rika openly jokes about a guy rubbing her chest so not a stretch to think she would rofl over something if her thought it was funny enough. 3rd again she really doesn't seem the type to care about that as has no problem with the others using her stuff and taking her guns, hummer whatnot. And Shizuka the first time you see her she is sleeping in the infirmary so..... And lastly the world is a ecchi, harem story originally. So it make total sense for stuff to happen.... again all of this is in the A/N at the end for any that didn't catch things or think it makes no sense.... Its in the synopsis to please check the notes too.....

Hum no. Frankly it's just easy plot. I read the chapter and there was no explanation. No building. Just straight up cringe. Or course there's nothing wrong with that. In hentai plot people **** after just 3 or so pages. Still don't try to explain it like it's logical. Just so you know for Rika she doesn't just joke around with anyone. The guy with whom she joked was her boyfriend and *** buddy. So her joking about her boyfriend groping her doesn't mean she will accept any man she just met groping her

Crings yes. And no real build up to Rika yes.... But the guy she jokes with IS a buddy, BUT NO I looked could I find the OG author staying they were **** buddies. Yes the "Fandom" wiki says it sure, but in no interviews did author confirm they were...(If he did then tha's my bad. I just didn't find it) This also seems the case as even when the guy is dieing he says I really wished he could have felt her up...(This again COULD just be a joke between lovers sure, but it doesn't seem that way to me atleast.) This is what I based her off of anyways. (^.^)

Couldn't ******

Doesn't really change my point. Guy was her partner for years. This isn't the kind of relationship anyone can imitate. So her joking about *** and groping with her best partner and friends doesn't mean she would do the same with a perfect stranger. Though once again I am not trying to demean your work. Just that will most people like fast R18. That only works when there's at least some buildup even if a little. You should have seen the consequences of rushing things too much from the different reviews you received

*Sigh* yes... yes I did.... Still learning, not saying that like it magically makes everything alright.... I do agree there is a big difference between the two as one she knew for years yes... My thought was she see him as a "harmless kid" and he fully takes advantage of that dact and kisses her... Again with her even thinking it would be nothing more then a peak or something, BUT they both instantly got lost in the effect of the Incubus powers... I kind of explained the effects of using them later on.(Well most likely not well, but still I did list the Warning so it should clear up a bit.).... Hopefully.... Thanks for the comment... Negative ones suck but they do help to know were I'm wrong on stuff.....(T.T)

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