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the dialogue and the monologue is so messed up, I don't know who's talking to who, and while reading this novel for 3 minutes my eyes is hurting.
Cliche Fanfic with Multiverse Travel. (Indefinite Hiatus/Dead)
Zader
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from the first 5 or so chapter they still have the Name: says...... Format so..... ()For thoughts {} For 4th wall break thoughts That should be the format mostly til later chapter then dialogue changes to a more fluid. name does this and says"words" "words" replies name with so on.... But with clear breaks in between each speaker.
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Zader:from the first 5 or so chapter they still have the Name: says...... Format so..... ()For thoughts {} For 4th wall break thoughts That should be the format mostly til later chapter then dialogue changes to a more fluid. name does this and says"words" "words" replies name with so on.... But with clear breaks in between each speaker.
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the plan is to fix atleast up to chapter 15. But it is slow going. I am still working on it thought so it will be done... I know reading it like is, is bad but man fixing them even somewhat is SUPER rough. so it's not a quick change.(T.T)
HentaiElderVampire:Pls Fix it chp 7~ I really like your novel.