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Narration: Decent and immersive Worldbuilding: Vast and detailed Character development: Nice and steady Character design: Outstanding Dialogues: Realistic and Lifelike Pacing: Not fast nor too slow Writing quality: Magnificent Execution of the Genre: Good pitch Story potential: High Updating Stability: Steady This is my review! Hope you like it! đ
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I loved the fantasy-magical theme of the novel the imagination of the writter is wide and Amazing the flow of story was good but there were few Petty mistakes breaking the flaw of the novel like - punctuation mistakes, typography, grammatical errors but if the author works on these things nothing can stop this novel from rocking on. a little cheer up dance for my author best of luck
This reads very much like a screenplay. I'd like to see author expands and add more than actions and dialogues. Plot is intriguing and characters are interesting enough. The battle scene is exciting. Epic, I dare say. The story's got a huge potential. So, a bit more muscle on the bone, and this would rake in stars and readers.
I can see that the author tried his best to make it epic. There's nice worldbuilding, though I would like it if you stretched that more. The main problem is stretching... your story looked too easy... stretch it, make ot more difficult and make it as believable as possible. There are quite a few grammatical errors... you should solve them asap, especially the punctuations. The writing style is easy on the eye with a bit of fixing it would be even more promising... Good luck... Author.