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Yup, I could have written that; and I was about to make him at around the age of 15 or 16. Howwweveeer, It will be so unrealistic if he was mature for his age when he is still 14 yrs old (15 or 16). So, I kinda placed him in the normal age group (18) and settled for that. But your suggestion is still running inside my mind, and I would like to take that into consideration. Thank you~
We all have different taste, and that's fine.
Thanks, mate ^^
Yep, he still can. However, Blake was depressed and, although it wasn't mentioned in the story, he haven't eaten a proper meal for 3 days. Hence, his lack of energy fighting back against the abductor.
You have an interesting plot with an outstanding book cover! I like how the author creates the conflict and would be later on fixed while the story progresses. The passion is there, and I could bet it would reward you soon! The only advises that I can give you are few suggestion to edit the paragraphs from here and there. There are missing and numerous commas, your and you're (difference between words), and some sentences that are slightly difficult to understand. But don't be down because English is an arduous thing to learn. In no time, you will notice these errors and fix them in due time! Nevertheless, I believe that that story has some potential, and I invite you all to read this book
Calm her down! HAHAHA
I should have written centimetres or metres away, but I wanted to place a sort of metaphor for the distance, showing that the presence of the gun (where Blake had first seen it) was afar; describing his keen eyesight.
Oh, ejaculated means saying something suddenly. I wanted to write that for the memes (and it fits fine for the sentence wkwkwk)
do a flip do a flip HAHAHA
*i am sorry for replying using the english language (because i dont want to googletranslate anything Iwould say, and i dont trust google translate that much). the reason behind Blake/Lake going with the humans is because he doesnt want to be affiliated with the rest of the goblins. His goal is to make a name for himself for the deity that he met from before. He also wants to revive his family and doesn't want to live in the den of goblins where they rape or abuse women. Grer and Izz are special (this is somewhat a spoiler) is because of his system. They are the first party members that Lake's system invited. Hence, they are both intellegient creatures that resembles human nature. However, I will add twist soon in the story, and I hope that you, readers, would enjoy it! thank you for the review, and I hope I can bring more adventurous spirit inside of you! and have a nice day~
I am a sucker for isekai story lines, so I wil lgive this novel 5 thumbs up! The plot has a promising story, together with the setting and art style paired on the cover. I really love how the author expresses his/her thoughts and adds multiple words to bring light to the story. The onyl advise that I can is that there are some lines that needs commas, periods, semicolons, and dashes that might help to describe the story. Also, it will be great if you can post the author's thoughts on the author's notes when writing the chapters. I have only a single chapter for this book, and Im quite impressed by the flow of the story. Good job author, and good luck on your story!