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Aevitas

Aevitas

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Hello! I write fantasy n stuff. Enjoy ^.^

2020-08-25 JoinedUnited States
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  • Aevitas
    Aevitas1yr
    Posted

    Shameless first review. I hope to have fun with this novel, so I hope everyone reading will have fun as well <3

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    Dropped/w//ww/w/
    Fantasy · Aevitas
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  • Aevitas
    Aevitas2yr
    Posted

    I have only read 9 chapters, I could not force myself to read any further. This review won't reflect the series as a whole, just what I could stomach. The translation quality is barely above machine translation level, making it very jarring to read Even if somehow you look past the translation, the framing of all the scenes is awful. Things happen with no explanation, perspectives shift out of nowhere, and it goes back and forth between present and past tense constantly. It is really hard to concentrate on the story. That leads to the final point, the story. The story is nothing special, pretty much just cookie-cutter cliche Chinese characters with as much depth as a speed bump. Cliches aren’t bad, and are often enjoyable, but not when cliches are literally every part of the story. Final statement: Don’t bother reading unless you have nothing better to do, and even then think twice.

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    Worlds' Apocalypse Online
    Sci-fi · Flaming Fortress
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  • Aevitas
    Aevitas2yr
    Posted

    It has an interesting premise, but to be honest, is kind of boring. Up till chapter 5 at least not much happens. The dialogue comes off to me as a little bit cringey, and it made it hard to read.

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    An Isekai Where Flags Are Raised Almost Every Chapter!
    Fantasy · spicyscribbles
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  • Aevitas
    Aevitas2yr
    Posted

    Steven universe is cool, hope your work does well.

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    an In n In wa hi
    Fantasy · Erivva
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  • Aevitas
    Aevitas2yr
    Replied to Niravana

    Thanks for the catch, i mistyped it and grammarly didnt correct me because it was a real word.

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    VRMMORPG: Emperor's Ascent
    Games · Aevitas
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  • Aevitas
    Aevitas2yr
    Replied to Rude_Ana

    I recommend using grammarly, its free and helps a lot. It catches all the mistakes for you.

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    Fantasy · Rude_Ana
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  • Aevitas
    Aevitas2yr
    Posted

    Other than a few grammatical and spelling errors here and there it was really well written. It has a story I find interesting and I hope it does well.

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    Fantasy · Rude_Ana
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  • Aevitas
    Aevitas2yr
    Replied to RuinedWorld

    Your comment gives me energy <3

    Ch 7 First Mission
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    VRMMORPG: Emperor's Ascent
    Games · Aevitas
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  • Aevitas
    Aevitas2yr
    Commented

    Wouldnt this be unlikely, becaude wouldnt yuan become the leader as strongest=leader? Sects generally Arent Herditary like cla s

    If the Flying Sword Sect accepted a genius like him into their ranks, they will surely be overjoyed. Hell, they may even consider him a candidate as a future Sect Leader!
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    Cultivation Online
    Games · MyLittleBrother
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  • Aevitas
    Aevitas2yr
    Posted

    This is really good! It reminds me a lot like Death Parade, one of my favorite anime. The writing quality is a lot better than most I see on this site as well.

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    Phosphene
    Fantasy · NPC_0425
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  • Aevitas
    Aevitas2yr
    Posted

    It's cool, just needs a bit of work here and there on grammar. Sometimes the paragraphs are way too long, making it a bit clunky to read as well. I'd recommend grammarly, it works wonders.

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    When Our World Ends
    Fantasy · mirxkewl
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  • Aevitas
    Aevitas2yr
    Posted

    It has an interesting premise with the mc being a deal with the devil type character. The cover art looks amazing as well. The only problem I had with it was the grammar making it a bit hard to read.

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    FLOCK OF JUSTICE
    Action · ihatepower_45
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  • Aevitas
    Aevitas2yr
    Posted

    The premise is really cool! It feels a lot like the discord for webnovel and amuses me greatly. It's a bit hard to read due to the grammar but I like it overall.

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    A Writer's Deadline
    Fantasy · meixiaolian
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  • Aevitas
    Aevitas2yr
    Posted

    The grammar was pretty bad, and it made it very confusing for me. It seems interesting though.

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  • Aevitas
    Aevitas2yr
    Posted

    It was a bit too dramatic for my taste, but I don't really read romance novels personally. Overall it is cool.

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    A contract marriage with A vampire king
    Fantasy · Xeeraaruwa
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  • Aevitas
    Aevitas2yr
    Posted

    Shameless self review, its not perfect but I'll be writing what I would want in a VRMMORPG. I hope you check it out.

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    VRMMORPG: Emperor's Ascent
    Games · Aevitas
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  • Aevitas
    Aevitas3yr
    Posted

    Writing Quality: 3/5 The grammar needs a lot of work, it was barely readable. Story Development: 3/5 It was kind of all over the place, couldn't really tell what was going on half the time. Character Design: 4/5 The characters are fine, a bit hard to understand at times due to the grammar. World Background: 3/5 Generic from what I saw, didn't really get to see much.

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    The Kind Prince Who Became An Evil Lord of Darkness
    Fantasy · Gaburieru
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  • Aevitas
    Aevitas3yr
    Posted

    *Uno Reverse* I only have one word for this novel, one word only. Are you curious about my one word too? Why so curious? Stop reading to find out my one word man. Omg, please stop being so curious. Curiosity will kill the cat, don't you know this. Fine, seeing how you're so desperate to know my one word. It's collection. What's collection? Obviously, it's adding this novel to your library fool.

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    Eternal Odyssey
    Eastern · Idczhen
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  • Aevitas
    Aevitas3yr
    Posted

    The grammar and spelling is kind of all over the place, but I am guessing that is due to being new to English. It is difficult to learn English grammar, but using something like Grammarly or just Google docs can greatly help in that department. Otherwise the story is pretty generic, Orphan girl is bullied by the rich popular person. There hasn't been much development so far.

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    I'm the person who will cherish you
    Teen · ellen000
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  • Aevitas
    Aevitas3yr
    Posted

    The story has a pretty generic Cinderella type story, but it is executed extremely well. Definitely the start to one of the best romance novels on webnovel if the quality stays the same.

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    Your Turn to Chase Me, Reborn For Revenge
    Urban · xAlexiax
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