HP: A Magical Journey [Complete]

Review #2 [FictionOnlyReaders' Author Review] At the time of this post, this review is the 269th review of this story. (200+Nice!) Current Story stats: Regular chapters: 125 || Aux chapters: 1 Collections: 11.55K || Views: 3.47M || Average Word Count: 3.36K || Rating: 4.84 Stars My rating: 5 STARS || Reason: Because I like my story, that's it. My review was too long and wasn't being accepted, so I have broken it down and put it in comments. Please go down to see the rest. Just like always, Review, comment, add to the library and share this fic. Thx. Regards, FictionOnlyReader (LET'S GO!)

Sad to see youre not doing kuroko no basuke fic anymore....hope you can get back on thst soon 😭😭. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . .

It's a little sad that you can't still write or update on your KnB Fanfic after waiting for more than 5 months. I guess I'll read this for now for the time being while I write my Paimon fanfic. Here's some 5 star from me. I'm grad that you're still doing okay.

Normally I just read and don't leave any comments but I had to leave a review for this one. This fanfiction started off with a decent idea, waking up in a wealthy pure blood child and practicing magic like a fanfiction addict would. The author ruined the fanfiction for me when the mc: 1. Had a magic core and goes through 'growth' phases at certain ages. 2. Chose to go to Hogwarts when as a Harry Potter fan you know the teachers suck and the standards are terrible. 3. Made wands the devil, where the mc is afraid of using a wand as it will stop his core's growth. 4. Uses and practices wandless magic in front of students and at students without a cover (his fake wand which he left in his room for some reason) while saying he's trying to keep it a secret (I guess he forgot about all the portraits spying too). 5. Reused lines from the original story even though it takes place like a year earlier (I guess Dumbledore uses the same lines every year now) 6. very bad romance with a 12 year old.

There are a couple of things I really dislike about this story: I absolutely loathe transmigration with memory / identity loss tropes. I believe it's the lowest form of fanfiction. There's something very off about the sentence structure and grammar that makes this story uncomfortable to read. 👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎

The author had a generally good idea but he ruined it because he had to throw roadblocks like an idiot. I feel very justified to say I should’ve never picked up this story.

So my review was deleted but the countless of 5/5 reviews that are from the same accounts stay? Story HAD potential but it became garbage. You can skip the trash parts aka the vault parts and still know everything so you wont miss anything. MC gets embarrassed by Wormtail and loses an eye lol i wouod go more into detail eith how bad this fic is wnd how much of s waste of time it is but slim chance anyone will read this review lol too many reviews and so many repeated 5/5 reviews that wont get deleted but mine will lol garbage story

the author wanted to create an MC Op in the Hp world, but he didn't want this MC to change the canon, so you ask me how the author compensated for the presence of the MC and the canon remaining the same? the potters survived and had 2 children, so he justified that it's "AU" and in all the remarkable moments in the canon it happened the same because it's an "Au" or the MC becomes incredibly dumb or he becomes weak in moments that you need to use the power

Buddy, after reading the first two chapters of this fan fiction, there is only one thing I want to say. Thank you. Finally a character who is not overpowered and doesn't start practicing the goddamn unforgivables by the age of 11 and actually experiences difficulty in harnessing his accidental magic. Just like you I am an avid reader of the Harry Potter fabrications and have read close to 800 of them. Out of all of them, I only managed to find less than 10 which explored the journey of learning magic realistically. So the fact that you are doing just that and addressing issues that other fanfics don't usually deal I'm like guilt, is a huge win in my opinion. Your grammar is near perfect and the conversations font seem forced, so I am sticking with this. Hope you don't hit a writer's block on this book as well, cause I like your other fabric and have still not given up on it.

a whole lot of build up with zero pay off, author and MC are far far too passive to the point where it's just the Harry potter books with a side character who should be and could be doing more. look at the last 20 chapters and you'll find countless readers complaining and frankly the author deserves far worse. nothing but a drought of creativity.

This just isn't a very good story, I don't know what else to say. The focus of the story is also constantly wasted on a lot of nonsensical or unimportant stuff.

The Time Travel BS at Chapter 306 307 and so on ruined the entirety of the story that has been written and from then on. You may not agree with me and that's fine, but anytime time travel is used like that to further the plot and bring change to the MC feels VERY VERY cheap and forced.

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it started of good but quickly became completely dog shi.

this story is so incredible that I can’t even begin to describe it, the details are perfect, you feel like you’re in the scene and imagining the world and the work behind being a good wizard, it’s not just sitting around and nobody is ready more can enter my mind, it is so perfect that it hurts to wait for new chapters, congratulations author you are amazing.

Spoiler Warning: The first ~300 ch were fine its the where he goes back into the sin vault again it goes downhill, for me. I especially dont like the future version of mc comes and helps the past mc. It just seems like lazy writing to fix his plot hole. And i hate that the future self just memory wipes the whole interaction and then mind controls his past self, becuase from therefore we dont know how much is the originals mc’s decisions or the futures mc mind manipulation. We dont know the lasting effect the mind manipulation will have on the mc, basically creating a different character in my opinion.

why would I read this knowing the author is someone who leaves his work unfinished ? this review may be unrelated to this story but I can't bring myself to read anymore of your work. I was huge fan of your KNB fanfic and I liked it very much, seriously, it's a wonder to me how many people keep reading this fiction knowing your irresponsibility to your fans and work.

Started good and was going that way until the author decided to add vaults. Vaults were nice till the sin vault where he got fckd up royally and didn't even noticed it for a along time, as if it wasn't enough he got and infected himself again with sin vault (which has the seven sins and each one of those sins affects his si-ssy personality till he gets his 2 girl friends.) Overall wasted potential for an amazing story. I recommend to simply leave it.

I was a Patreon for a few months and really liked this the first like 160 chapters. It was fun to read about the vaults, magic, and Quinn as a person. However the author now is clearly trying to milk Patreon given how lengthy the social fillers were and fourth year, as well as the stupidity of Quinn KNOWING Voldemort’s plans fully and yet still had no plans to get rid of the horcruxes and the war effort before it could escalate. Not to mention we follow canon events and timeline and of course he would end up getting involved with the trio. Add onto a very annoying romance set up with unlikable one dimensional teenage girls - basically no personality and can use one adjective to describe them, and I’m no longer interested. Now it’s just not worth anyone’s time

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