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Sevennamed
SevennamedLv123yr
2021-03-31 00:32

There are a couple of things I really dislike about this story: I absolutely loathe transmigration with memory / identity loss tropes. I believe it's the lowest form of fanfiction. There's something very off about the sentence structure and grammar that makes this story uncomfortable to read. πŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘ŽπŸ‘Ž

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Avaritia_0010
Avaritia_0010Lv5

did you even try reading 5 chapters or did you read 1 den criticize the story just because you don't like transmigration

Sevennamed
SevennamedLv12

Did you even read my review before you commented on it?

Avaritia_0010:did you even try reading 5 chapters or did you read 1 den criticize the story just because you don't like transmigration
Avaritia_0010
Avaritia_0010Lv5

yep

Sevennamed:Did you even read my review before you commented on it?
peter_spindler
peter_spindlerLv13

ok so you don't like transmigration with memory/personality loss. I can actually get that, but the grammar thing I don't understand, you gotta elaborate. if you can't I implore you to raise the rating at least by a half

Sevennamed
SevennamedLv12

Reading a story is like listening to music the sentences should flow together into the paragraphs in the paragraphs into the chapter. Reading this was like a listening to a radio that was jumping between stations every few seconds.

peter_spindler:ok so you don't like transmigration with memory/personality loss. I can actually get that, but the grammar thing I don't understand, you gotta elaborate. if you can't I implore you to raise the rating at least by a half
peter_spindler
peter_spindlerLv13

I see, i don't agree but that's ok.

Sevennamed:Reading a story is like listening to music the sentences should flow together into the paragraphs in the paragraphs into the chapter. Reading this was like a listening to a radio that was jumping between stations every few seconds.
T0xicity
T0xicityLv14

That’s actually an incredible metaphor for writing...

Sevennamed:Reading a story is like listening to music the sentences should flow together into the paragraphs in the paragraphs into the chapter. Reading this was like a listening to a radio that was jumping between stations every few seconds.
Snooozer
SnooozerLv2

Yeah,it feels like a poorly done translation where the words get translated to english but not the the "structure".

FastestOfAllSperm
FastestOfAllSpermLv2

DaoOfCookies
DaoOfCookiesLv4

Then just don't read it, that solves everything...

Noel_Elitia
Noel_ElitiaLv1

try reading when i got reincarnated as a spider with my goddess you won't be disappointed

ScorpiusMalfoy1981
ScorpiusMalfoy1981Lv4

Each fanfiction has a different story, why are you even reading the story if you do not like the main idea of the story. Also don't review without reading all chapters.

Notacatowner
NotacatownerLv1

I personally feel that the grammar is near-perfect, but whatever you say...

White_Sami
White_SamiLv12

It's kinda weird you go around telling people to read you own novel/fanfic without saying you are the author

Noel_Elitia:try reading when i got reincarnated as a spider with my goddess you won't be disappointed
mysteriousoldman
mysteriousoldmanLv2

not faster than me

FastestOfAllSperm:
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QueLeo
QueLeoLv1

The title already disgusted me

Noel_Elitia:try reading when i got reincarnated as a spider with my goddess you won't be disappointed
ChangedReviewer
ChangedReviewerLv4

Kind of unfair to give him the lowest rating just because you don't like a particular trope. Also his English is extremely good... especially compared to yours. So kindly delete this review.

ChangedReviewer
ChangedReviewerLv4

It's hilarious listening to this guy complaining about sentence structure and grammar. It's like a mutant who has 7 fingers complaining about gloves for people. Sure they don't fit you but you shouldn't judge things in the first place just because you are very different from other people.

BenisBoy14
BenisBoy14Lv13

I'm 6 chapters in and the writing quality is atrocious. Some paragraphs are written by a 5 year old who hasn't figured out pronouns yet. Like, fr fr. If you have a page-long paragraph and it keeps talking about the MC, then it doesn't need to contain the name 50 times. Once is enough.

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