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Sevennamed
SevennamedLv124yr
2021-03-31 08:32

There are a couple of things I really dislike about this story: I absolutely loathe transmigration with memory / identity loss tropes. I believe it's the lowest form of fanfiction. There's something very off about the sentence structure and grammar that makes this story uncomfortable to read. 👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎

HP: A Magical Journey [Complete]

FictionOnlyReader
4.6
442 Chs

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Avaritia_0010
Avaritia_0010Lv5

did you even try reading 5 chapters or did you read 1 den criticize the story just because you don't like transmigration

4yr
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Sevennamed
SevennamedLv12

Did you even read my review before you commented on it?

Avaritia_0010:did you even try reading 5 chapters or did you read 1 den criticize the story just because you don't like transmigration
4yr
19
Avaritia_0010
Avaritia_0010Lv5

yep

Sevennamed:Did you even read my review before you commented on it?
4yr
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peter_spindler
peter_spindlerLv13

ok so you don't like transmigration with memory/personality loss. I can actually get that, but the grammar thing I don't understand, you gotta elaborate. if you can't I implore you to raise the rating at least by a half

4yr
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Sevennamed
SevennamedLv12

Reading a story is like listening to music the sentences should flow together into the paragraphs in the paragraphs into the chapter. Reading this was like a listening to a radio that was jumping between stations every few seconds.

peter_spindler:ok so you don't like transmigration with memory/personality loss. I can actually get that, but the grammar thing I don't understand, you gotta elaborate. if you can't I implore you to raise the rating at least by a half
4yr
74
peter_spindler
peter_spindlerLv13

I see, i don't agree but that's ok.

Sevennamed:Reading a story is like listening to music the sentences should flow together into the paragraphs in the paragraphs into the chapter. Reading this was like a listening to a radio that was jumping between stations every few seconds.
4yr
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T0xicity
T0xicityLv14

That’s actually an incredible metaphor for writing...

Sevennamed:Reading a story is like listening to music the sentences should flow together into the paragraphs in the paragraphs into the chapter. Reading this was like a listening to a radio that was jumping between stations every few seconds.
3yr
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Snooozer
SnooozerLv2

Yeah,it feels like a poorly done translation where the words get translated to english but not the the "structure".

3yr
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FastestOfAllSperm
FastestOfAllSpermLv2

3yr
2
DaoOfCookies
DaoOfCookiesLv4

Then just don't read it, that solves everything...

3yr
5
Noel_Elitia
Noel_ElitiaLv1

try reading when i got reincarnated as a spider with my goddess you won't be disappointed

3yr
ScorpiusMalfoy1981
ScorpiusMalfoy1981Lv4

Each fanfiction has a different story, why are you even reading the story if you do not like the main idea of the story. Also don't review without reading all chapters.

3yr
4
Notacatowner
NotacatownerLv1

I personally feel that the grammar is near-perfect, but whatever you say...

3yr
3
White_Sami
White_SamiLv12

It's kinda weird you go around telling people to read you own novel/fanfic without saying you are the author

Noel_Elitia:try reading when i got reincarnated as a spider with my goddess you won't be disappointed
3yr
6
mysteriousoldman
mysteriousoldmanLv2

not faster than me

FastestOfAllSperm:
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3yr
QueLeo
QueLeoLv10

The title already disgusted me

Noel_Elitia:try reading when i got reincarnated as a spider with my goddess you won't be disappointed
3yr
7
ChangedReviewer
ChangedReviewerLv4

Kind of unfair to give him the lowest rating just because you don't like a particular trope. Also his English is extremely good... especially compared to yours. So kindly delete this review.

2yr
2
ChangedReviewer
ChangedReviewerLv4

It's hilarious listening to this guy complaining about sentence structure and grammar. It's like a mutant who has 7 fingers complaining about gloves for people. Sure they don't fit you but you shouldn't judge things in the first place just because you are very different from other people.

2yr
2
BenisBoy14
BenisBoy14Lv13

I'm 6 chapters in and the writing quality is atrocious. Some paragraphs are written by a 5 year old who hasn't figured out pronouns yet. Like, fr fr. If you have a page-long paragraph and it keeps talking about the MC, then it doesn't need to contain the name 50 times. Once is enough.

1yr
2
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FictionOnlyReader
FictionOnlyReaderAuthor

Review #2 [FictionOnlyReaders' Author Review] At the time of this post, this review is the 269th review of this story. (200+Nice!) Current Story stats: Regular chapters: 125 || Aux chapters: 1 Collections: 11.55K || Views: 3.47M || Average Word Count: 3.36K || Rating: 4.84 Stars My rating: 5 STARS || Reason: Because I like my story, that's it. My review was too long and wasn't being accepted, so I have broken it down and put it in comments. Please go down to see the rest. Just like always, Review, comment, add to the library and share this fic. Thx. Regards, FictionOnlyReader (LET'S GO!)

3yr

NotSoBigShlong
NotSoBigShlongLv14

Sad to see youre not doing kuroko no basuke fic anymore....hope you can get back on thst soon 😭😭. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . .

4yr
Geraint124x
Geraint124xLv5

It's a little sad that you can't still write or update on your KnB Fanfic after waiting for more than 5 months. I guess I'll read this for now for the time being while I write my Paimon fanfic. Here's some 5 star from me. I'm grad that you're still doing okay.

4yr
1step1kill
1step1killLv5

Normally I just read and don't leave any comments but I had to leave a review for this one. This fanfiction started off with a decent idea, waking up in a wealthy pure blood child and practicing magic like a fanfiction addict would. The author ruined the fanfiction for me when the mc: 1. Had a magic core and goes through 'growth' phases at certain ages. 2. Chose to go to Hogwarts when as a Harry Potter fan you know the teachers suck and the standards are terrible. 3. Made wands the devil, where the mc is afraid of using a wand as it will stop his core's growth. 4. Uses and practices wandless magic in front of students and at students without a cover (his fake wand which he left in his room for some reason) while saying he's trying to keep it a secret (I guess he forgot about all the portraits spying too). 5. Reused lines from the original story even though it takes place like a year earlier (I guess Dumbledore uses the same lines every year now) 6. very bad romance with a 12 year old.

3yr
Reader_Harris
Reader_HarrisLv10

The author had a generally good idea but he ruined it because he had to throw roadblocks like an idiot. I feel very justified to say I should’ve never picked up this story.

3yr
DaoistyQNGiX
DaoistyQNGiXLv14

So my review was deleted but the countless of 5/5 reviews that are from the same accounts stay? Story HAD potential but it became garbage. You can skip the trash parts aka the vault parts and still know everything so you wont miss anything. MC gets embarrassed by Wormtail and loses an eye lol i wouod go more into detail eith how bad this fic is wnd how much of s waste of time it is but slim chance anyone will read this review lol too many reviews and so many repeated 5/5 reviews that wont get deleted but mine will lol garbage story

3yr
Thigs_0508
Thigs_0508Lv3

the author wanted to create an MC Op in the Hp world, but he didn't want this MC to change the canon, so you ask me how the author compensated for the presence of the MC and the canon remaining the same? the potters survived and had 2 children, so he justified that it's "AU" and in all the remarkable moments in the canon it happened the same because it's an "Au" or the MC becomes incredibly dumb or he becomes weak in moments that you need to use the power

3yr
WealthyRaccoon
WealthyRaccoonLv14

a whole lot of build up with zero pay off, author and MC are far far too passive to the point where it's just the Harry potter books with a side character who should be and could be doing more. look at the last 20 chapters and you'll find countless readers complaining and frankly the author deserves far worse. nothing but a drought of creativity.

3yr
Archonstine
ArchonstineLv5

Buddy, after reading the first two chapters of this fan fiction, there is only one thing I want to say. Thank you. Finally a character who is not overpowered and doesn't start practicing the goddamn unforgivables by the age of 11 and actually experiences difficulty in harnessing his accidental magic. Just like you I am an avid reader of the Harry Potter fabrications and have read close to 800 of them. Out of all of them, I only managed to find less than 10 which explored the journey of learning magic realistically. So the fact that you are doing just that and addressing issues that other fanfics don't usually deal I'm like guilt, is a huge win in my opinion. Your grammar is near perfect and the conversations font seem forced, so I am sticking with this. Hope you don't hit a writer's block on this book as well, cause I like your other fabric and have still not given up on it.

4yr
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