There are a couple of things I really dislike about this story: I absolutely loathe transmigration with memory / identity loss tropes. I believe it's the lowest form of fanfiction. There's something very off about the sentence structure and grammar that makes this story uncomfortable to read. ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ
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LIKEReading a story is like listening to music the sentences should flow together into the paragraphs in the paragraphs into the chapter. Reading this was like a listening to a radio that was jumping between stations every few seconds.
peter_spindler:ok so you don't like transmigration with memory/personality loss. I can actually get that, but the grammar thing I don't understand, you gotta elaborate. if you can't I implore you to raise the rating at least by a half
Thatβs actually an incredible metaphor for writing...
Sevennamed:Reading a story is like listening to music the sentences should flow together into the paragraphs in the paragraphs into the chapter. Reading this was like a listening to a radio that was jumping between stations every few seconds.
It's hilarious listening to this guy complaining about sentence structure and grammar. It's like a mutant who has 7 fingers complaining about gloves for people. Sure they don't fit you but you shouldn't judge things in the first place just because you are very different from other people.