webnovel
1step1kill
1step1killLv53yr
2021-06-09 00:03

Normally I just read and don't leave any comments but I had to leave a review for this one. This fanfiction started off with a decent idea, waking up in a wealthy pure blood child and practicing magic like a fanfiction addict would. The author ruined the fanfiction for me when the mc: 1. Had a magic core and goes through 'growth' phases at certain ages. 2. Chose to go to Hogwarts when as a Harry Potter fan you know the teachers suck and the standards are terrible. 3. Made wands the devil, where the mc is afraid of using a wand as it will stop his core's growth. 4. Uses and practices wandless magic in front of students and at students without a cover (his fake wand which he left in his room for some reason) while saying he's trying to keep it a secret (I guess he forgot about all the portraits spying too). 5. Reused lines from the original story even though it takes place like a year earlier (I guess Dumbledore uses the same lines every year now) 6. very bad romance with a 12 year old.

Liked by 151 people

LIKE
Replies13
lord_couchpotato
lord_couchpotatoLv3

Well it's not as bad tbh 1. Regarding the core thing it was not really used in the story afterword's to make an impact on the story and honestly how does it matters if the magic is in the core it won't impact progress rate 2. He chose Hogwarts because he knows about the benefits like RoR and castle itself. He didn't really need to fear the plot as he is pureblood and hence not a target for voldy and as long as he does not openly fight him like harry there is no risk tbh if i were in position i would also chose hogwarts 3. He rejects wand because he made connection between his body and magic and want was diverting the connection from his body to itself. Also as it made him much powerful so if he started using it it would be hard to do back(Though i agree author made it a bit dramatic) 4. He used wandless magic once outside as far as i remember and that time also he managed to trick his way out 5. Well i didn't notice dumbles speech but does it really matter and dumbles were giving general information and there was nothing plot related 6. There is no romance in the story as of 87th chapter, there has been some girls showing interest but that is just like minor crush at most.

Noel_Elitia
Noel_ElitiaLv1

try reading when i got reincarnated as a spider with my goddess you won't be disappointed

shubh_gupta
shubh_guptaLv2

The reviewer is not the mentor of the author, why are you trying to saddle him with the responsibilities of one?

The content has been deleted
KING_IN_YELLOW
KING_IN_YELLOWLv5

i think i get the guy hating the core stuff it made the novel like xianxia where if someone has higher core than you then you lose no matter what, but that rule don't apply to mc and in harry potter thats not how it works even merlin would lose to voldi if given the right prep, so yeah it isn't the best to add a core system plus in harry potter spell can be learn by anybody without needing to have a core level etc.

lord_couchpotato:Well it's not as bad tbh 1. Regarding the core thing it was not really used in the story afterword's to make an impact on the story and honestly how does it matters if the magic is in the core it won't impact progress rate 2. He chose Hogwarts because he knows about the benefits like RoR and castle itself. He didn't really need to fear the plot as he is pureblood and hence not a target for voldy and as long as he does not openly fight him like harry there is no risk tbh if i were in position i would also chose hogwarts 3. He rejects wand because he made connection between his body and magic and want was diverting the connection from his body to itself. Also as it made him much powerful so if he started using it it would be hard to do back(Though i agree author made it a bit dramatic) 4. He used wandless magic once outside as far as i remember and that time also he managed to trick his way out 5. Well i didn't notice dumbles speech but does it really matter and dumbles were giving general information and there was nothing plot related 6. There is no romance in the story as of 87th chapter, there has been some girls showing interest but that is just like minor crush at most.
lord_couchpotato
lord_couchpotatoLv3

That's now how cores work in hp fanfics it's just the capacity of magic wizard can hold and utilize, it does not make them immune to spells. Maybe it enhances body and instincts a but but that does not make them unbeatable and similar logic can be used when using magic present in environment. I prefer magic core as other wise if you are in a place with no ambient magic wizards will not be able to use magic one bit.

KING_IN_YELLOW:i think i get the guy hating the core stuff it made the novel like xianxia where if someone has higher core than you then you lose no matter what, but that rule don't apply to mc and in harry potter thats not how it works even merlin would lose to voldi if given the right prep, so yeah it isn't the best to add a core system plus in harry potter spell can be learn by anybody without needing to have a core level etc.
MKA2401
MKA2401Lv1

Hm. The author was simply trying to make a comprehensible magic system.

kkkking
kkkkingLv3

that's my adoptive mother

The content has been deleted
MrPadz
MrPadzLv12

shameless plug lol

Noel_Elitia:try reading when i got reincarnated as a spider with my goddess you won't be disappointed
Kono_phineas_da
Kono_phineas_daLv2

Xiphos_Gladius_03
Xiphos_Gladius_03Lv1

Even if the teachers suck, he has the room of requirement. He can also ask flitwick to mentor him in dueling and McGonagall for help if he impresses her.

Onigami
OnigamiLv5

who is his love interest?

Mysteries_
Mysteries_Lv11

Obrigado por me ajudar a poupar tempo

CFrank1
CFrank1Lv1

Pls use a spoiler tag please, you’ve ruined it for me now

Other Reviews
Related Stories

Harry Potter: Se’x Oriented Hogwarts

“Please, Daddy fuck me. I need you so much!” Lucifer let go of her bum and slid his hand under her hip, going straight for her pussy. Her petals were silken with want, and he nodded, deciding that it was wet enough. “Get on your knees, pet. Suck me hard again.” Hermione backed off his lap and knelt to receive his offering. Tickling and tapping him with her tongue, she worked it back to full strength. His hand sank into her hair, slowly dragging her mouth closer to his pelvis. “That’s my good girl. Are you ready for that dip you’ve been begging for?” Hermione released his cock and looked up at him in a daze. “Did you say dip or dick?” “Dip,” Lucifer repeated, smirking. “But since you’re a good girl, you can have both.” ______________ Synopsis - Lucifer Morningstar, The Devil escapes the Underworld to have a vacation on Earth. But due to some unexpected problems, he would be forced to enroll into Hogwarts, and meet a certain Bushy-haired girl, Hermione Granger. All characters doing sex age is 18+ Lucifer, The Devil is Billions of years old, with Hermione Granger having multiple personalities, her other self's age is 18+ (Hermione - Blessed by Amenadiel, time works differently for her, she has already surpassed age of 18+) __________ Remember do not compare reality to fiction. No copyright infringement intended. All characters rights belong to their owners. Updates - Mon, Wed, Fri, Sun 1 Extra Chapter - 125 Power Stones! ________________ To Read 45+ Advanced Chapters, and support this novel, pls join me on Patreon. Link - patreon.com/SmutDxddy Thank you so much for your Support!

SmutDxddy · Book&Literature
3.6
307 Chs

Game of Dragonborn.

Jon Snow is a Dragonborn after 2 millennia without another appearing, an identity that is neither on the light side nor the dark side, only caring about his own goals before wanting to be good or evil. Some may label him a demon while others a hero, but Jon Snow lives his life as he wants and tries not to have regrets. But even such a powerful being, after years of accumulating power, had a fragile moment at some point. He had a difficult childhood when he lived in Westeros; his uncle hated him for reasons unknown to him, while he was belittled for being a bastard in Winterfell by his uncle's wife. His half-siblings hated him under the influence of his mother. However, at some point, unknown entities took them out of this world suddenly and threw them into Skyrim when he was 8 years old. 12 years later, having experienced everything possible not only in Skyrim but throughout Tamriel, earning titles such as: Dragonborn, Dovahkiin, leader of the Companions, sword of Dawnguard, Archmage, Legalist, regent king of Skyrim, among many others he received inside and outside Skyrim. Now, at 20 years old, he was no longer that scared boy. Jon Snow was summoned by the same entities that brought him to this world back to his old original world, revealed the truth behind his birth. How could the Dragonborn stay silent after hearing this? He wanted revenge and to bring peace to the ghosts who had been wronged for a long time. So, he returns to the North of Westeros, but is the continent prepared for the Dragonborn seeking revenge? The time has passed 12 years in Skyrim and 8 Years in Westeros.

RaccoonLeague · Book&Literature
4.7
93 Chs