iam_adh
Mysterious enough to keep you engaged. Grammar was decent for me and plotting was carefully made. I like the story! đ Keep it up, more readers will surely get your work into their reading lists and will be in tune for your updates. Details were standard and narrations were fluent. Just like the other reviewers said, your story is lit! Gold!
WOW author, what an amazing introduction đ¸â¨!! The first chapter is filled with just the right amount of mystery to keep any reader easily wanting to read more đ¤Š. And I absolutely love the fact that the author created Auo Ju to be such a smart character. I found his first conversation with Irene to be quite clever and enjoyable! This book is so good! I did notice an accidental shift or two between the past and present tense, but those simple mistakes didnât at all hinder my reading. Great job author! This is a really good work :)
The story so far was interesting, easy to read yet descriptive. I could even imagine what happened to the MC vividly through your words alone. To be honest, everything was polished, as if youâve been an author for a long time. Since youâre doing pretty well, please continue with your passion and do not give up :). I canât wait to continue reading new chapters soon!
Writing Quality: I'm not the person who dwells in grammar so much as long as it's understandable, but the writing quality is good. It is understandable, has little to no typo, and is clean. Aside from the occasional consecutive long sentences, it's great. What I do like about it is the narration. It really flows well and naturally. Stability of Updates: Not sure about this, but I hope it'll have a consistent release. Story Development: 5 chapters out and there wasn't anything much to say about the story yet. Understandable since the novel needs a bit of a warm-up before takeoff. So far, we only have questions, questions, and more questions. Looking forward to some answers and more questions. Character Design: Before I wrote this review, I check other reviews and says our mentally unstable MC is interesting. Personally, he is not. He is creepy. Not in a bad bad way but also not in a good way. I think interesting is an insult. It makes the mc sound shallow because the story is deeper and darker. The MC is someone you will observe because he intrigues you and not because he is interesting. There's a difference. That's why I said I liked the narration because I felt like I am sitting behind the one-way mirror and observing while waiting for what will unfold. World Background: still five chaps... so can't say anything. Overall, the story is nothing but mysterious. What's interesting about this novel is that it will not make you want for the next chapters. It will make you want the answers. Hence, you need more. And I think even though the first five chaps didn't have strong hooks, you will still end up reading the next one because of the lingering questions it'll leave in your head. I really liked what I read, and it's such a shame there are only five chaps. If there's 50 chaps, I would've read it in one sitting. I like crime and mystery. Although the tag is fantasy, I'm hopeful the vibe from the first five chaps will remain solid. Will I read it? Yes. I planned to follow this one. I hope it won't get dropped. For the author, you did a good job. Keep up the good work. I'm now your reader and although I'll be a silent one, I stab if you don't update. Jk jk. If there's anything I would like to suggest is to add more to the synopsis. I like short synopsis as a reader, but your synopsis is too short and doesn't give away anything. So readers might just ignore it. If not for the swap review, I would as well and missed this gem. Good luck! Looking forward to more chapters!
This book has so much detail the images are almost projected into your mind as you read. The characters are very detailed and described in a relatable and realistic way. The world background is a bit iffy, but itâs manageable if you think of it as present time in our world. I hope this continues soon...
I really like the story! The writing quality is amazing and is really understandable. There were no grammatical errors. The author is good at giving descriptions of areas and newly introduced characters, which was really helpful. The main character is really interesting and entertaining. The whole plot is well written and I can't help but want to read more. Keep it up author!
The premise is unique in the sense thatâs more like studying the MCâs psychic condition, but Iâd present more external experiences than inner monologues to create more impact with the reader, the grammar is very nice and overall Iâd recommend, it kinda reminds me of a movie which title I donât recal right now, about a grandpa that lived in England, the story is shown as if everyone thinks heâs going insane, as the spectator we think heâs right because weâre seeing his viewpoint together with his delusions, by the end of the movie, weâre surprised to know that he was mad all along. Iâd recommend an approach like that to a psyche research book. Also be careful with the words you translate from Spanish to English, although some of them exist, theyâre not widely used. Adolescent is not common, itâs mostly teenager thatâs used in that case. Best of look.