Review Detail of Photosphere in Zhoro's Universe:Loose Screws

The premise is unique in the sense that’s more like studying the MC’s psychic condition, but I’d present more external experiences than inner monologues to create more impact with the reader, the grammar is very nice and overall I’d recommend, it kinda reminds me of a movie which title I don’t recal right now, about a grandpa that lived in England, the story is shown as if everyone thinks he’s going insane, as the spectator we think he’s right because we’re seeing his viewpoint together with his delusions, by the end of the movie, we’re surprised to know that he was mad all along. I’d recommend an approach like that to a psyche research book. Also be careful with the words you translate from Spanish to English, although some of them exist, they’re not widely used. Adolescent is not common, it’s mostly teenager that’s used in that case. Best of look.