ForgottenLife
Hello! Author here. I am a new writer who is writing a original novel. I have read various and thought of writing a fan-fiction to improve my writing skills. NOW FOR THE FAN-FIC There will be no harem, sorry to disappoint harem lovers. Though there can be two wives depending on reader's demand. A poll will be conducted to decide that. I am writing a action novel with mix elements of fantasy and adventure. I have zero experience in writing romance and don't expect me to pull out cheesy romance out of nowhere, though I am currently reading some romance novels to learn, but that will not be the focus for this novel. As unnecessary romance and harem may f**k up the story and drastically reduce the quality of reading experiences. Thank you and stay tuned with me and also don't forget to check out my original Novel based on Indian Mythology with many legendary beings and powers.
Hmmm can't really write a review since I'm bad at describing things but I'll try. Well let's see, grammar, its ok, I don't have any problems with it. Update, well its stable so that's good. Story development, I don't know since I can't think of anything to say to this. Characters, they're not emotionless puppets so that's good. World background, the author I guess knows it so its good
Not for me, dropped chater 23, i don't understand the need to make the Mc so OP from the beginning , lit's like if he was litteraly screaming "I'M DIFFERENT, I'M SMART, I'M GENTLE" non stop with his action and the story developpement , while saying "I'm totally normal" to other character. Sad , the concept of Madara's grandson could have been nice if he wasn't so stupidly OP from the start
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I'm disappointed. The author doesn't seem to have a grasp of how to form a storyline well, and keeps mixing up details between the various time periods in the story. Good effort, but the story lacks draw. It seems to me like the new villains only exist to give a challenge to the OP MC, who is only OP 50% of the time. That being said, writing is tough and I do see talent in the author as a writer. The language is clear and the writing itself isn't bad at all. Improving your foreshadowing skills and solidifying your overall plot before writing anymore would be nice. It's also unnecessary to give the MC so many powers, when just a few of them are actually used. Study the manga a little more - and I'd suggest reading some of the fanfics on translatinotaku, to inspire you more. Thanks for the hard work!
I really wanted to like this story, it has a non psycho uchiha MC that tries to gain knowledge and skills to his best ability But once he started to collect the infinity stones for his gauntlet I started questioning it hard. Also why even bother giving the MC future knowledge, at best he uses it to notice characters. I am at the 9 tailes attack and he hasn't used it directly to change ANYTHING. Story has changed very slightly but it's stuff the MC did on accident or in passing But I dropped it when a forced time skip happened just so it could screw with the MC's plans and keep the plot mostly intack. Might as well just read the manga at this point. If you are gonna make a AU then don't force the story plot to happen
i gotta ask you where did you come up with light, dark, chaos and void elements? as pointed out by others, naruto's world already has so many elements and aspects, why add these? it is just gonna make it all the more confusing and complex. your writing skills are great, its been a while since i have read without seeing grammatical errors every chapter. ig im just not much into too op mc stories, it kinda takes the fun out of it for me. but for those who like op mc, which i think were majority of your readers, i think you should have kept the mc op instead of nerfing him later, or maybe introduce stronger opponents or some roadblock in his progress to even it out a little. good luck