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I'm disappointed. The author doesn't seem to have a grasp of how to form a storyline well, and keeps mixing up details between the various time periods in the story. Good effort, but the story lacks draw. It seems to me like the new villains only exist to give a challenge to the OP MC, who is only OP 50% of the time. That being said, writing is tough and I do see talent in the author as a writer. The language is clear and the writing itself isn't bad at all. Improving your foreshadowing skills and solidifying your overall plot before writing anymore would be nice. It's also unnecessary to give the MC so many powers, when just a few of them are actually used. Study the manga a little more - and I'd suggest reading some of the fanfics on translatinotaku, to inspire you more. Thanks for the hard work!

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Reborn in Naruto As Madara's Grandson

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Thanks for the review. I have posted a timeline for the fic. Also, it is a AU story so there are major changes in the timeline. Still, I am sure I didn't mix up the timelines. I eould really appreciate if you can point out a few timeline mixes, I will see if I can fix them.