Reviews of Gambit of the Living Weapon
Gambit of the Living Weapon
Breno_Ranyere
- Overall Rate
- Writing Quality
- Updating Stability
- Story Development
- Character Design
- world background
I like how Daren is being more of a reasonable person than Marceus. I have qualms about using mockery as an encouragement. Marceus! You can encourage people without teasing and degrading their person! Poor Daren. Evlin is such a savage! I can see why you have her as your favourite. Please give me more Lilith interactions! I've read the entirety of the updates and some concepts still confuse me for some reason, like the origin of beasts and spirits, or did I just miss them? Also, the consistent change of characters in focus is quite distracting. I suggest that you dwell on a particular group for an extended window before moving on to the next. The action scenes are quite abrupt, so it lessens the excitement. You do not need to use such complex words to relay an action; you just have to narrate to the readers what you're seeing in your mind as honestly as possible. I don't think that your grammar is that bad. Although, I have noticed overuse, misuse, and absence of punctuations in several passages. Punctuations are like the backbone of grammar. It allows the writers the opportunity to have better transitions. It is our job as writers to study te very grammar aids in out story-telling, and we are always learning. In addition to this, instead of using just adjectives, can you elaborate more on your descriptions? The readers would like to see the vividness of your imagination! :D I did not say anything out of spite. I hope that you take them as constructive. I'll be cheering you one! Your story has a great setting and there will definitely be readers who will love this utterly.
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This will forever remain one of my favourite stories. It's just so amazing. Have I read stories with better writing? Yep. Have I read stories with better world development and magic? Yep. Do those stories have the same character and personality and emotion and charm that this one has? Nope! Okay well maybe a couple but still! It's so engaging and so brilliant and I love it to bits. Thank you for this journey. Thank you for writing this. I'll keep following it and I don't think anything now can make me not love this any less than I do now.
After reading until chapter 150, I can safely say that this story is one of those glorious hidden gems that truly get way too little attention to how good they truly are. So, first of all, is the writing quality. The writing is decent, it is not the greatest of grammar, but it makes you emersed, invested, and truly is comfortable on the eye. The world background slowly improves, although, I have to warn you xianxia fansand the like, this story doesn't have the world-building you see in the 10,000+ chapters novels, but it does a pretty good job at it as the story progresses. The characters are oh so amazing. Seriously, you'll come to love them a lot (even the villains) and you truly despise the author when you see bad things happening to them, which only shows how amazingly written the characters are. The story development and plot are truly unpredictable. It's not generic in the slightest and has some plot twist, cliffhangers, and moments that truly leave you speechless. It is beautifully crafted and executed well to the point where you can binge read 60 chapters per day yet feel as if you've only been reading for 2 minutes. Pssst, do you want to know something even more interesting? All those praises that I gave this story....are all for 1 volume out of 20 glorious volumes that each far surpass the other. Go on and read this marvelous novel right now!
Oh man, this is such a great read! Where do I start? The premise itself is so interesting and fun. The world-building is nicely done, in depth and detailed and from the first few chapters we already get a sense of where the story is heading. The characters, honestly I love them all, a great ensemble, even if there are bad ones, the author gives them depth and tries to justify their reasons. The story itself has a mixture of everything, adventure, comedy, action and romance. Never thought Id say this but id like to see more romance haha Altho I do appreciate the characters pov change, i feel like its a bit disconnecting to the reader if we stray away from the protagonist too long. Or this might just be a story with multiple protagonists at this point, which works! The writing style is simple yet descriptive and easy to follow! I really like it and the dialogue pops out but just a small complaint of mine, might be just my preference, but I wish author wouldnt just put dialogue as it gets a bit confusing as to whos saying sth. It might be beneficial to add a 'daren said' or other character said. All in all, great work and Im really amazed by your uploads and hard work!
Hmmm... Nicely done, I must say. I like the fact that although I know who the mc is, the story is written from different perspective the entire time, without actually mentioning who the mc is. XD Also, no glaring grammatical errors, with a good background of the world, and very well-expressed character personalities.
Out of the 51 chapters posted, I have read 10 chapters. The story is interesting. The stability of updates is good, Story is developing nicely. The character design is OK. A world background is good but it is not specified which era it is or what place it is. There are some issues with typos and spellings. The capital for 'I' is used less and the small i is appearing. At some places the sentences start abruptly and the inverted commas of the speech portion get left behind. These mistakes do not however interfere with the reading of the book. I would suggest you run your draft through an online grammar checker. It will get rid of many of the errors. I also do that otherwise little mistakes tend to creep in. All the best.
Well. That happened. What is "that?" A lot. It's a lot. A lot happens in this book. Some of it is very funny. A lot of it is depressing. And all of it is incredibly entertaining. Without spoiling anything, I love the main character. From the first chapter, he's charming and funny, and that makes him endearing. I also love his friends, who are all interesting in their own ways. More characters are introduced as the story moves along, and established characters also change and sometimes even die. I really appreciate the author for sticking with his guns on that. I mean, it's not game of thrones, because this story stays consistent and actually follows through with the aftermath of deaths and such. If you like stories that stay consistent (well, actually I think he improves quite a lot as the story goes on) and has a good dose of action, comedy, and adventure, read on!
Now that the story has ended: REVIEW UPDATE! Look, I'm a Gambit shill. I loved gambit when i first started reading it, and I loved gambit till the moment it ended. This novel, is my personal definition of 'a good time!' Really nice characters, cathartic character development, nice humour, and an author you'll love to hate (jk, inside joke). The world isn't the most detailed, and the plot doesn't require a single brain cell to comprehend, buuuut i think thats part of what makes it so fun, so carefree, and also gives you the opportunity to just fall in love with the characters. The novel is based entirely on the characters and how they'd react when thrown into different scenarios or how their relationships change with time and with events. Its like a typical found family story, but its just so fun that I love it. And it also just follows the rule of cool, and i love it. If you're looking for charming characters and a fun time, read this. If you're looking for something that'll make you wrack your brain, then well, this isn't it, but you should read it anyway. Uhhh, here stop my incoherent rambles, uhhhh bye? I'll miss this story. And "Is that so?""Is that so." is one of the most fun catchphrases ever I'll die on this hill you devilled ben
The novel is worth my time. Truly enjoyed the work. The plotline is humorously designed pertaining to schemes, adventure, cool dynamics, actions and mysteries. The concept is exciting and gives you wonderful experience! The characters are descriptively tailored with unique traits carrying individual importance. The dialogues are humorously incorporated and further adds in flavour to the plotline. The world building is well progressing as well. Nice work author! 👍
The author is a very talented individual in the art of character design, able to generate long fluid conversations that seem to go on forever which many novels lack. In my opinion, however, that is a flaw. The conversations go on long enough that it starts to give me a headache. The author puts heavy emphasis into the conversations and does not balance it out with the world background. The author does not seem as good with the world background. For example, the prince's castle at the beginning is merely referred to as a "castle" with no additional details. I get a mental image when the term is mentioned, but I get a stale one which has no details. Another example is when the MC is escaping along with her friend, yet most of the writing is down on their conversations rather than their surroundings. In reality, I doubt two people would have the energy to converse when they are fleeing for their life. Other than that, the author does put in the details when it comes to fighting, so props to that. The writing quality is very good and the author does seem to have a direction he/she wants to go in. A personal complaint would be the time skip at the beginning not long after the MC arrives into this world. I feel like a lot of potential was wasted in what could have been invested into character growth. It is like saying the MC survived a life or death situation at point A and then somehow got over it and became stronger in the future at point B. This is merely my opinion however, so just take it as creative criticism. I have not even fully read the novel since I became overwhelmed by the long conversations which take up half of each chapter.
Not a lot to say really. My constant comments on this book will serve as part of my review, plus I don't want to spoil it for anyone else. Just imagine a perfectly crafted story with amazing world building, fun characters, and a growing plot. Anyone would love it to bits and it only took me a day to read through Volume 1 of the book. Honestly a fun read that I'll keep enjoying after this review.
Gambit of the Living Weapon is a book of fiction by Breno_Ranyere. Personally, I love the main character and the fact the weapon the protagonist has is a crossbow rather than some enchanting sword or anything similar to this. The other characters are lovable, one that would make readers remember their name even if the book is finished. I've two major flaws that I've found while reading this book, scenes and punctuation. i'm not going to judge your grammar anymore since it's good. The basic principles and fundamentals, I could see that they're followed. Alright, the scenes! When it comes to this part, there were times when my excitement was building up then suddenly the action ends right away. It's a bit too fast if you were to ask me. As for the emotions, I would suggest that you add more feelings rather than using adjectives but don't overdo them. For the descriptions, the best advice I could give you is to add more emotions and actions to prolong it. I will give an example: Quietude succumbed to his mind, draining every emotion. Yes, descriptive, but we could add more emotions and descriptions to this. "Once the quietness arrived, it stayed and spread in Estha. It reached out of his head and enfolded him in its swampy arms…sent its stealthy, suckered tentacles inching along the insides of his skull, hoovering the knolls and dells of his memory, dislodging old sentences, whisking them off the tip of his tongue" A little warning though, only use it during important scenes such as the action because too much will consider your book as "overdescriptive" Next, the punctuation. Punctuation is one thing authors must learn about since it helps when it comes to telling the readers when to pause or how to read that particular sentence. Try reading these sentences: As promised I will give back your money. As promised, I will give back your money. The second sentence has a comma! When one would read the first, they would go straight out without pausing. When one would read the second, there would be a slight pause after the word promise. I know learning punctuation is a difficult task, trust me, I've been there. If I can, you can too! I'll be rooting for you! Overall, it's great! All the author has to improve on is his punctuation and scenes.
It's been days since I started reading this novel, I still have a few more chapters to go. It was a fun read. Writing quality: There's a few grammatical errors, some lacks punctuations and capitalizations. I was confused on who was saying some lines in the dialogues. After the author fixed these, it will be a smooth read for the readers. Need some editing for the scenes to flow naturally. Character design: It's difficult for me to remember all the characters. But, I like their strengths. Marceus' power is cool! World background: I want more background of their world, for me to fully connect to the novel. Story development: A bit fast for me, eh? Need some breather scenes. Lol. Stability of updating: You have wrote a lot of chapters, great job! Best of luck, author!
