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Hello everyone. Sorry, I have been away so long. This is to inform you all my readers that I have started volume II of this novel. One chapter has already been posted. Chapter 133.
Thanks everyone for being patient. I will start the second volume probably from Mid December 2020.
Thank you. Hoping to shift all the characters to the place where it all started. I want to wind up by 75th chapter. So that I can get back to my science fiction book called, Trapped in Time' volume 2.
The story is interesting and is developing well. I found it a bit confusing in the early chapters, as the Main female lead seems to be having mental issues. The Characer Design is good. Not many characters yet but the main Male lead with the purple eyes seems interesting. Who he is, will be revealed in later chapters, I suppose. World background is good in so far as the present scenario is concerned. I have reached the 18th Chapter but I do not find the synopsis tallying with the story. Maybe later on the synopsis will reflect the story. The stability of updates seems good too and the writing quality is ok. However, if you are writing in the first person, i.e. you are the main character, then stick to the first person. But if you are the narrator then write about the characters in the third person, then stick to that style. Please don't mix the two. This is the first time that I am reading a book with lots of emotions. Nice change. I will be watching out for the rest of the story. The book is in my library and further chapters are awaited. All the best, Author!
Why did you leave ...is a question ?
Quite an interesting start. I startedreading, stopped for a break and found that I had read 8 chapters. The writing quality is good. I did not find anything to complain about. The stability of updates is ok since 29 chapters have already been published. The story is developing well. The Character design is good too and I love the dragon :) .The world background is well described. Your book is saved in my library and I will definitely read it. I would recommend it to readers too. All the best, Author!
The novel has a good plot and promises to be an interesting read. I prefer to give honest reviews, so here goes :- I have read 5 chapters so far. The story is developing nicely. The stability of updates is good as I can see 28 chapters have been published. The character design is developing ok. Ava and Ben are (Chapter 5) still mysterious people. World background is equally good. Each chapter stops at a cliff hanger. The only thing that needs a relook are the grammar and proof reading, before posting. A few mistakes do not interfere with the flow of the novel but too many are not good. We all make mistakes, even I do. I would suggest that you download a grammarly or run your text through an online grammar checker. Please reread your chapter before posting. This is called proof reading or you can ask someone to read it for you. Writers sometimes do not see the obvious mistakes. I will be reading your book as it is saved in my library. All the best, Author!
Who is Ben? Again a cliff hanger :)
...went looking for Ben.....
ok, a new character is introduced.
Some grammar issues in the chapter. Please run the draft chapter through an online grammar checker or download grammarly ( I think that is its name). Either of these two the online or the download will help you a lot.
Dont mix tenses. If in present stay in present eg. The bell for the first period rang and the class bagan. Or the bell for the first period rings and the class begins.