RenuKakkar
A poetess ( Poemhunter.com) & a published Author (Granny's Return from Heaven as an Incredible Car). I write articles, do numerology & palmistry. I am a Divine Reiki Master.
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RenuKakkar2mthCommentedThanks everyone for being patient. I will start the second volume probably from Mid December 2020.
Thanks everyone for being patient. I will start the second volume probably from Mid December 2020.- RenuKakkar2mthReplied to Its_anamiCh 50 Discussion on the Past Life Session
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The story is interesting and is developing well. I found it a bit confusing in the early chapters, as the Main female lead seems to be having mental issues. The Characer Design is good. Not many characters yet but the main Male lead with the purple eyes seems interesting. Who he is, will be revealed in later chapters, I suppose. World background is good in so far as the present scenario is concerned. I have reached the 18th Chapter but I do not find the synopsis tallying with the story. Maybe later on the synopsis will reflect the story. The stability of updates seems good too and the writing quality is ok. However, if you are writing in the first person, i.e. you are the main character, then stick to the first person. But if you are the narrator then write about the characters in the third person, then stick to that style. Please don't mix the two. This is the first time that I am reading a book with lots of emotions. Nice change. I will be watching out for the rest of the story. The book is in my library and further chapters are awaited. All the best, Author!
- RenuKakkar2mthCommentedCh 1 Prologue
- RenuKakkar2mthCommented
Why did you leave ...is a question ?
Why did you leave... - RenuKakkar2mthPosted
Quite an interesting start. I startedreading, stopped for a break and found that I had read 8 chapters. The writing quality is good. I did not find anything to complain about. The stability of updates is ok since 29 chapters have already been published. The story is developing well. The Character design is good too and I love the dragon :) .The world background is well described. Your book is saved in my library and I will definitely read it. I would recommend it to readers too. All the best, Author!
- RenuKakkar2mthCommentedCh 3 Land of the Midnight Suns
- RenuKakkar2mthPosted
The novel has a good plot and promises to be an interesting read. I prefer to give honest reviews, so here goes :- I have read 5 chapters so far. The story is developing nicely. The stability of updates is good as I can see 28 chapters have been published. The character design is developing ok. Ava and Ben are (Chapter 5) still mysterious people. World background is equally good. Each chapter stops at a cliff hanger. The only thing that needs a relook are the grammar and proof reading, before posting. A few mistakes do not interfere with the flow of the novel but too many are not good. We all make mistakes, even I do. I would suggest that you download a grammarly or run your text through an online grammar checker. Please reread your chapter before posting. This is called proof reading or you can ask someone to read it for you. Writers sometimes do not see the obvious mistakes. I will be reading your book as it is saved in my library. All the best, Author!
- RenuKakkar2mthCommented
Who is Ben? Again a cliff hanger :)
It was Ben - the same stranger who met me yesterday and left our conversation in between , but today he looked different and was wearing a black leather suit with a red cape and he looked elder today as he was not having a beard but now he was having a full grown manly beard which suited his personality and his awesome costume and was looking at me . - RenuKakkar2mthCommented
...went looking for Ben.....
After the school got over I went to Ben but couldn't find him may be he had left for his residence before I could reach him . - RenuKakkar2mthCommented
ok, a new character is introduced.
The next day when I woke up my face was sweating terribly . I was very frightened and the reason being the same , but for the first time I saw a face in so clearly in my dream . It was a pretty girl with an attractive , strong face . Blonde , somewhat fragile , intelligent in expression and was carrying a black and red wizard's s robe . She was just amazing and was saving the helpless people of Magica , and they called her , Ava . - RenuKakkar2mthCommented
Some grammar issues in the chapter. Please run the draft chapter through an online grammar checker or download grammarly ( I think that is its name). Either of these two the online or the download will help you a lot.
But all I needed was peace of mind which nobody has offered and I headed towards my residence with a heavy heart . - RenuKakkar2mthCommented
Dont mix tenses. If in present stay in present eg. The bell for the first period rang and the class bagan. Or the bell for the first period rings and the class begins.
The first period bell rang and our class begins, the first lesson was of mathematics and I tried to concentrate my mind in the subject but was failed in doing so. I was peeping out of the window where I should concentrate at my book. While looking out at the sky I was trying to visualise my dream and was able to see dragons in the sky. Suddenly, Silas jog my shoulder and said, "What's wrong , the teacher is calling out your name and you are in your own world ." I was again back to the reality and walked towards my teacher and he asked me to solve a mathematical problem , it was not at all difficult for me as I was getting good grades almost in every subject taught to me in school and I solved the problem in less than a minute . The class and the teacher applauded but it meant nothing to me.
