WidestGrin
really immersive, really good description of what the mc's doing and how he did it, it felt like im the one doing it. Its exactly what a human would do when they became a wolf cub. Although i think mc accepted the fact that he became a wolf to easy and fast, like the eating part. A bit emotional turmoil would seems great. I cant see any grammatical error, great!! More world description and power's system are always welcome in the future. I'm now interested on how the Author will do the mc's romance(if there will be any).
I love the first three chapters. I could feel the process of 'how to reborn as a wolf puppy' ... the way you explain it is awesome... couldn't wait for what will happen next to Nuh... the only problem I get, only to get an idea about all characters. I feel that there are too many characters at the beginning of the story. But as more part are going to be published, wish I could read more about other characters as well. Keep on this great work[img=recommend]
It was basically the life of a wolf that used to be a human. It was an interesting story because a wolf was not a character many people would expect. People would expect a human. And the fact this is a wolf makes this ever more interesting. At the beginning, you're wondering how this human is suddenly a wolf. You're asking, "how did he die?" or "how did this even happen?". And it makes you enticed until the very end of the novel.
I realy like the story its rather unique and the quality of writing its excellent it was really good and I see you did some deep research about our leading wolf its a very nice arcs with more efforts into it imma leave it in my library since ill be watching for more chapter hehehe please update more
It took a few chaoters for the story to finally progress but once it did it’s very ineresting! Your writing overall is very unique and this is one of the few times I’ve seen a novel in first person that’s been written very well. I like our MC’s personality very much~ I haven’t seen any other novel with animals involved. I hope you’ll continue to update frequently! A little confused on the sudden switch from first to third person though? Even thiugh it did change back. ╮( ̄▽ ̄"")╭
Oh but this is GOLDEN! A***w! I feel so warm just reading this. It is a fantasy novel without it being on the heavy side with all the terms and whatnot related to world building! It was great that you are taking it slow and the chapters are short, however I was expecting for the inciting incident to happen and what really happened to Adam. Haha. I am definitely curious! Overall, this is really well-written and I had a great time reading! ❤️
You should change the perspective to third person. If you wrote this story in first person, I think your story would be either rushed or very slow, depending on your writing style, so third person would be ideal. Concerning for story development, it was slow it first because you stayed on an event or idea too long, but later on you picked up the pace. If you wanted to captivate readers, you should rework the first few chapters, so it would be eye-catching and intriguing.
I do see where you want to go and where you are coming from. Your writing style is very distinct in a way that creates a definitive connection between the narrator and your main character. As in: you use only your main character's thoughts to describe what is going on around him/her. Which is perfectly fine. Although I would suggest describing what your main character sees/smells/hears/tastes as well. That helps shaping an image for your reader to immerse themselves into. However, this is a more than decent start! Keep up the good work!
The story is tender but perhaps a bit tedious at first, and did not really invite me to read on. But later on it charms it’s reader into reading on as the author’s pleasant and easygoing way of writing starts growing on you. And I found that it was quite an unique story, perfect to cuddle up with on a rainy day with a hot drink in your hands. A charming, gentle story that grows on you the longer you read.
First review beside the author so I will give you my full support. It was unique in my opinion. The way the author describes the MC's new life as a newborn wolf cub is nice and easy to understand. World background still not much developing, but it could be better later as it was still below ten chapter. Good luck author :)