A charming tale with a lovable protagonist. While I must confess I did not truly sympathise at first with the protagonist, I must confess she grew on me as the story advanced. There is a youthful naiveté about her that makes her very endearing. The chemistry seemed a tad obligatory, which confused me at first, but now that I think back on it it rather suits the beginning of the story very well. So I assume it’s done on purpose. Overall, it’s a riveting tale and a pleasure to read.

An entertaining story that makes for a diverting read. The writing style itself is very easygoing and clear. I deem it a very relaxing book, perfect to read on a rainy day.

The author presents us with a charming story that handles some very mature themes. Keeping this in mind, I deem it ideal for snuggling up on a cold winter day, with a hot beverage. There are several powerful moments (on which I will not elaborate as I want to keep this review spoiler free). Overall a lovely piece of fiction.

The premise is very promising, and certainly delivers throughout futher chapters. The sentence structure feels a tad off, and it would be a pitty if it were to repel future readers from reading the story. Overall, I deem the story to be a bit of a rough draft of what it could be. I hope you keep practicing, so that all of us might read it in the future.

Very well-written and grammarwise impeccable. The author presents us with a suspensful story that makes for a very fluent and entertaining read. The characters are well-rounded and likeable. My personal preference goes out to stories that are little more discriptive, but I must confess that the current writing style suits the story very well. Overall an engaging work of fiction.

Thank you very much for your feedback.

Thank you very much for your feedback.

Thank you very much for your feedback.

**: I can clearly see in later chapters that your grammar improves, but I’m afraid your readers won’t be able to get past those first few paragraphs

I must confess I have been quite candid while writing this review, more so than I usually would be. This is in the hope to help you progress, rather than to simply song you praise. So with that in mind: While I clearly recognise the effort you take to tell us your story, I find it very difficult to immerse myself. I do not feel invited to read beyond the first few paragraphs. I could account this to two things: firstly, the poor sentence structure and grammar, and secondly, the lack of rhythm. The protagonist himself is engaging, and he has a certain youthful nativity about him that makes him entertaining. Lastly, I wish to bring up the chemistry, which feels very obligatory, and does not thoroughly convince me. I do recognise that this is very hard to write. I hope I did not dissuade you too much and wish you a lot of fun continuing your story.

Not really. My personal preference is a little more descriptive, but I think the current rhythm suits your story very well, so I wouldn’t throw it around too much. There’s a certain charm in the easy and clear style you deploy, and I don’t know whether you would do your story any favours where you to start using overly floral descritions.

While I’m incredibly flattered (I’m not even kidding I’m blushing right now) I actually disagree... the power of the story lies in the soft suspense and realisation of the protagonist. Which are silent. But perhaps you’re just a way better visionary than I am, and you could pull it off.

You’re correct, thank you so much for pointing it out.

I’m blown away by your response, thank you so much for your feedback.

The author combines suspense and uncertainty to give us a work that makes for a very enjoyable read. Since I recently tried my hand at these for a one-shot, I can confess from firsthand experience that these are quite difficult to pull off. And must confess the author does a splendid job. I seldom encounter a story on this platform that is as well-written as this work.

A charming work with a promising premise and characters that come together to form an overall entertaining story. While I must confess that I did not, at first, find myself very sympathetic to the protagonist, she grew on me as the story unfolded. The writing is very clear and clean, making it an easy, relaxing read.

Thank you very much

The author presents is with a compelling story that catches your attention right from the start. The writing style itself is very clean and easygoing, making it an easy and relaxing read. The characters are realistic and lovable; they grow on you each chapter. Grammar wise I have nothing to correct (do keep in mind that English is not my first language and the possibility that I overlooked mistakes is very real). Overall a charming story that reads like a page turner.

Thank you very much for your thoughts

Thank you