Review Detail of Bahtiyor in Child of Wolf

You should change the perspective to third person. If you wrote this story in first person, I think your story would be either rushed or very slow, depending on your writing style, so third person would be ideal. Concerning for story development, it was slow it first because you stayed on an event or idea too long, but later on you picked up the pace. If you wanted to captivate readers, you should rework the first few chapters, so it would be eye-catching and intriguing.