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The First Store System

作者: pinaka_
奇幻
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A strange store that sells everything suddenly appears in the town. The Owner of the store is a young man and anyone who tried to mess with him %$#@. The products of the store are expensive, yet the queue outside the store never stops. "So what, If you're an Emperor? I'll fight to the death with you if you try to break the queue." These scenes outside the store were daily occurrences. *** Join the Discord server, https://discord.gg/4nbaU7Cy *** The cover art is not mine. I have taken it from pinterest. Please contact me if it is your art.

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4.7
1641 Chs
目錄
0 :Auxiliary Volume
1 :The First Store
2 :Conspiracy!
3 :The Last Quest!
4 :The Sacred Dimension!

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I’ve read more than 800 chapters, and so I have caught up. Good points: -There is a good number of interesting side characters who has a nice chapter or a few to them. (Author forgets some however. That girl Princess with the 1 eye, and is looking for revenge against against the organization. The guy who has a vendetta against an organization, and the Bisan kingdom/empire for selling his territory, leading to his tribes deaths. The prince of the Holy Empire. The moon elf politics, and the sunlight elf conflict between siblings. These are just some.) -The writing quality is good, and the updates is good. (Small errors with the numbers, and powers don’t make sense always.) -There are more good points. Bad points: -Lily is so annoying. I don’t read 80% of the writing involving her. -I’m fine with arrogant characters but the MC, and Lily is to arrogant or rather they are hypocrites. “The weak should act weak” is what Lily says several times but they keep acting stuck up in front of beings far above them, and are so rude but dislikes rude people. -The side characters, and the world is really like +90% of the reason I’m still reading. I skip half the training arcs, and Panagea because we don’t see anyone of them again other than knowing that they are going stronger. The characters in Panagea we never meet again the next arc. -I get that the MC doesn’t care to be a shop owner but why are you writing a novel that is mainly about him being a shop owner. He’s to shameless, and you wrote that the system also is against him blackmailing, and stealing but he scoffs at that. Have the MC become less shameless because it gets so difficult to read whenever that happens. -MC does not have moral issues, and believes he is better than everyone else... that’s fine but that doesn’t mean you have to write him to be so rude. He’s not scared of death... that’s fine but what about torture of Lily because of what he did? Is he scared now? -Writing that Lily is cute, and has a childlike voice does not mean she’s cute. -I don’t care if the MC is not a good person, I like villains (MC is not a villain) more but not when they are 3rd rate villains or so arrogant for no reason. I like smart, humble (arrogant but knows when to be humble or thankful) but still can be very cruel, and uncaring for the misery for others type of villain. Overall, Author, you don’t have to change the character personalities but decrease the training time writing. Hopefully you decrease Lily’s writing time also, and increase the writing for the customers.

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