Item: The First Store System
Rating: 5
Author: pinaka_

pinaka_Author3yr

2022-02-19 12:27

Since, I've already uploaded more than 300 chapters, I think, it's time for me to add another review. The Writing Quality is for the readers to decide, so I'll say nothing about it. For the story development, sometime it's slow paced and sometimes it flows normally. Unlike the other store stories, this story starts at the peak of a dimension, so from the get go, the store has been getting strong and known characters. Aakesh, is our MC, who wants to find put about his past, and the system helps him just do that by completing quests. He's a character who has a nonchalant attitude for everyone and everything except his cat, Lily, who is just as chaotic and destructive as a cat. There'll be no romance in the story, so the question of Harem doesn't arise. I update two chapters daily, and for extra chapters, I've announced the goals in the Synopsis. As for the World Background, It's a Multiverse, that is seperated into four dimensions. MC is starting from the weakest dimension. There are countless races like Elves, Dwarves, Orcs, etc. If you still don't like what you read from the review, then go read the book, and if you like what you read from review, then I don't think, I need to tell you what to do.

The First Store System

pinaka_

4.2

1629 Chs

Liked by 47 people

Replies19

Andrew_Mark_9766Lv10

mc does have any romantic relationship is kinda sucks for me might as well make him a enunch

3yr

Chef_MandieLv1

No romance, no harem....sign me up! 😍

3yr

KcorpionLv12

loving it so far currently on Ch 160 looking forward to future chapters I will make a detailed review for this novel soon keep up the good work author

3yr

novelfanaticLv5

i hope there would be romance in the future

3yr

CirclethatoneLv15

just wait, he let's the cute little troll that visits his store die like a dog

Kcorpion:loving it so far currently on Ch 160 looking forward to future chapters I will make a detailed review for this novel soon keep up the good work author

3yr

KaPiLv4

I shall officially worship you for stating beforehand there’s no romance in this <3

2yr

ThunderheadzLv13

2yr

The_Snow_EmpressLv14

Well u got me at no romance hehe let's go!!! I hope this is a good one with proper would building .....

2yr

The_Snow_EmpressLv14

oops ment to say world 🤣

The_Snow_Empress:Well u got me at no romance hehe let's go!!! I hope this is a good one with proper would building .....

2yr

Spark_Hawk_666Lv1

Author would you resume pursue of eternal

2yr

MadmistressLv3

reread the review💀

novelfanatic:i hope there would be romance in the future

2yr

MephistoPheles7Lv11

everything else is fine but the fact the story is written in a way where every single conflict is stretched unnecessarily when it could just be solved with a single move is so annoying not to mention the repetitiveness, overall this ruined the story for me and the author is pretty scummy too for doing this to just get the story going bc he can't come up with something original or new

2yr

Abhishek_Choudhary_9529Lv11

2yr

Moist_BedBugsLv4

You monster...

novelfanatic:i hope there would be romance in the future

2yr

animeanythingLv13

Does the mc ever grow stronger than when he started? I know it's a store system type novel but there are 4 dimensions and he doesn't seem to progress at all. I'm only at chapter 170 something.

1yr

Shen_CaelynaLv3

thanks for this comment author. I'm looking for a good read after I just came out of a pedophilic garbage bin I unexpectedly fell in. 😫

1yr

John_AnnexLv1

No romance/harem? I'm glad you mentioned that so I don't waste my time.

1yr

blacLv15

I just wanted to know if you are taking a break. I love your book it's one of my favorite novels

9mth

pinaka_Author

Was unable to write due to some serious personal reasons, but in all likelihood, I will start reupdating from Friday. Thank you for liking the book. I really appreciate it.

blac:I just wanted to know if you are taking a break. I love your book it's one of my favorite novels

9mth

Other Reviews

Deathy_70Lv3

It's a good novel, really nice with no romance I've seen too many. of them it's unique and the mc calm and collected, hehehe but that girl is honestly getting annoying sigh.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

3yr

Nakirium_SupplierLv1

Writing? Readable Story? Good Character? MC is a SIMP (to his Cat) and Lily the Cat is irritating that its disqusting There no problem other than MC and his Cat, but I will not read paragraph that has the word Cat or Lily

3yr

Kurdi123Lv11

He simpt Maria for already a few chapters giving her all space rings of the people he killed without a good reason. At first I give it another Rewiew with 3,4 Star but then a few chapters later he is still a Trash ....oh I mean Trash simp

3yr

TheoreticalLv11

First the Cat is annoying... Second the Author's Deva to extremely Op fetish is unnecessary. And the reason number 3 is that its little boring. (And for God's sake or for you for Devas sake please stop the i, ii,iii... and no. for number, number = is Nr.)

3yr

Ashton_ALv12

Woulda gave it 5 starts but he simps so hard FOR HIS PET CAT and lily is so annoying, maria is just cancer in evey chapter shes in, feels completely forced and she should clearly understand he dont give half a f about her and she starts liking him once she learns hes strong before he did anything to help her. Everything else is great but those 2 were enough to stop me from reading

3yr

Incognito0001Lv13

Solid writing quality but cant say its 5 stars, beginning seems more like a prologue showing what mc will become in the future and then jumps around here and there which seems somewhat unnecessary and somewhat poorly done imo, the one thing that I hate about books is inconsistency and plot holes and there are already some appearing in the first 20 chapters that discourages me from giving this book more of my time. I usually like the OP store owner/system books but I find it hard to like this one. Might check it in future but for now 3.4 stars is me being generous :/ my rating might seem harsh but I am comparing it to books that actually have 4.8+ rating and are not inflated like your book currently is

3yr

Kurdi123Lv11

If it was without lily then+1 And I dont like World background with Deva are Op. and there are few other things that I dont find good.......

3yr

DaoistD4bpsiLv1

Hi, my name is José, and I'm from Brazil, and I wanted to tell you that this story is AMAZING and I'm completely addicted to it, you're doing a great job, I'm looking forward to the next chapters, greetings (sorry for the english, it was for the google translator)

3yr

Thee_AngryBirdLv5

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