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VaporaFireLv32yr
2022-11-23 12:19

Neutral review here any spoiler after ch 266? or whatever significant happened next. I already got bored reading this, feel like its getting redundant. Its like showing us how big is the multiverse and iits dimensions but then telling us how big planet earth is :/ And what's with virtual portal world thing? Is it important plot wise for future chapters? This is better it there are more fight scenes with mc outside the shop and not telling us that expressionless face. I know that his goal is to find info about himself from the system by doing the shop missions. That Wine immortal system is better than this story wise.

The First Store System

pinaka_
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pinaka_
pinaka_Author

Since, I've already uploaded more than 300 chapters, I think, it's time for me to add another review. The Writing Quality is for the readers to decide, so I'll say nothing about it. For the story development, sometime it's slow paced and sometimes it flows normally. Unlike the other store stories, this story starts at the peak of a dimension, so from the get go, the store has been getting strong and known characters. Aakesh, is our MC, who wants to find put about his past, and the system helps him just do that by completing quests. He's a character who has a nonchalant attitude for everyone and everything except his cat, Lily, who is just as chaotic and destructive as a cat. There'll be no romance in the story, so the question of Harem doesn't arise. I update two chapters daily, and for extra chapters, I've announced the goals in the Synopsis. As for the World Background, It's a Multiverse, that is seperated into four dimensions. MC is starting from the weakest dimension. There are countless races like Elves, Dwarves, Orcs, etc. If you still don't like what you read from the review, then go read the book, and if you like what you read from review, then I don't think, I need to tell you what to do.

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Deathy_70
Deathy_70Lv3

It's a good novel, really nice with no romance I've seen too many. of them it's unique and the mc calm and collected, hehehe but that girl is honestly getting annoying sigh.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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Nakirium_Supplier
Nakirium_SupplierLv1

Writing? Readable Story? Good Character? MC is a SIMP (to his Cat) and Lily the Cat is irritating that its disqusting There no problem other than MC and his Cat, but I will not read paragraph that has the word Cat or Lily

3yr
Kurdi123
Kurdi123Lv11

He simpt Maria for already a few chapters giving her all space rings of the people he killed without a good reason. At first I give it another Rewiew with 3,4 Star but then a few chapters later he is still a Trash ....oh I mean Trash simp

3yr
_Jo1Jo2Jo3Kurdi_
_Jo1Jo2Jo3Kurdi_Lv11

First the Cat is annoying... Second the Author's Deva to extremely Op fetish is unnecessary. And the reason number 3 is that its little boring. (And for God's sake or for you for Devas sake please stop the i, ii,iii... and no. for number, number = is Nr.)

3yr
Ashton_A
Ashton_ALv12

Woulda gave it 5 starts but he simps so hard FOR HIS PET CAT and lily is so annoying, maria is just cancer in evey chapter shes in, feels completely forced and she should clearly understand he dont give half a f about her and she starts liking him once she learns hes strong before he did anything to help her. Everything else is great but those 2 were enough to stop me from reading

3yr
Incognito0001
Incognito0001Lv13

Solid writing quality but cant say its 5 stars, beginning seems more like a prologue showing what mc will become in the future and then jumps around here and there which seems somewhat unnecessary and somewhat poorly done imo, the one thing that I hate about books is inconsistency and plot holes and there are already some appearing in the first 20 chapters that discourages me from giving this book more of my time. I usually like the OP store owner/system books but I find it hard to like this one. Might check it in future but for now 3.4 stars is me being generous :/ my rating might seem harsh but I am comparing it to books that actually have 4.8+ rating and are not inflated like your book currently is

3yr
Kurdi123
Kurdi123Lv11

If it was without lily then+1 And I dont like World background with Deva are Op. and there are few other things that I dont find good.......

3yr
DaoistD4bpsi
DaoistD4bpsiLv1

Hi, my name is José, and I'm from Brazil, and I wanted to tell you that this story is AMAZING and I'm completely addicted to it, you're doing a great job, I'm looking forward to the next chapters, greetings (sorry for the english, it was for the google translator)

3yr
Thee_AngryBird
Thee_AngryBirdLv5

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