first person omniscient

A good story with good plot but the form of writing is a bit weird as it is written in a first person limited pov. For me, this type of pov, hampers the flavor of excitement created by this type of genre, as oppose to the more conventional 3rd person omniscient pov writing. just my 2 cents.

I'm hooked reading the first chapter, it's rather well written with clear tone. Though a bit info dump here and there. There's nothing to say about the Writing style—it's top-notch in WN. The author used the 3rd person Omnicient in her writing I couldn't figure out which one is it though, it's more like the true omniscient. I recommend to pick omniscient limited with first or third person. It gave more things to work with. another thing the world building, try not to info dump them. there's many other way to do it. Overall it's looking promising. Good luck author.

The only criticism I have is that the story is written a bit messily. For example, I do not understand who the narrator is. Is it first person? 3rd Person? Omniscient narrator? Observer? A person who’s part of the story? It’s hard to tell. The story is interesting though, we have an MC who has reached the top and now tries i think again, but with a different route. Keep it up!

I only want to point out about the perspective. At first the author used 3rd person perspective which is normally used in many novels/books (3rd and/or 3rd omniscient). But then the author decided to use 1st person perspective, its ok because he gave the "warning" about changing perspective not just suddenly "jump". However! He is using 1st person perspective in a 2nd person perspective style! So yeah it becomes really messed up obviously.

I feel you need to change the type of writing point of view because you keep switching from third omniscient view to first person point of view. I couldn't make it past the first chapter because of that. Hopefully you'll take this correction and fix it because there are readers who don't like it. Thank you.