dialogue in first person story

Billionaire's First Doting Marriage

Xia Yangyang receives her 20th birthday present by witnessing her boyfriend and her best friend in bed. The next moment, she ends up marrying the most eligible and wealthiest bachelor in the city, Gu Qichen. From then on, she levels up and becomes invincible. Xia Yangyang’s jerk ex-boyfriend tries to win her back, while her scheming friend plots against her. Mr Gu comes to her rescue and seeks revenge on her behalf. She has a vicious half-sister and a stepmother who makes things difficult for her. Mr Gu retaliates and teaches them a lesson. Everyone knows that Mr Gu is ruthless and cold-blooded. But no one has ever seen how he pampers and dotes on his wife…

Feng Family's Seventh Child · Urban

First Marriage, then love: wife, never divorce

Five years ago, she replaced her twin sister to marry him who was burned beyond recognition and even became a eunuch. Five years later, when they met again, he pressed her against the wall in the corner A low voice sounded with doubt. "Is your daughter mine? " The corners of her mouth curled into a sneer. "Are you sure you have the ability to do that? " His originally cold face instantly turned into the darkness before the storm His voice was fierce and low as he growled, "woman, you are challenging me! "

Joe Mai · Urban · MTL

Let's Squander A Billion First!

After Chuzheng is suddenly pronounced dead by a system all of a sudden, her only worry in life becomes—spending money. Ever since she gets stuck with this system, her back is no longer sore and her legs no longer ache. Heck, there isn't even a time when she goes out of breath. System: Let us set a small goal first and squander a hundred million... Little Miss, stop right there! Don't activate the invincible mode! (▼皿▼#) Chuzheng: Can you please explain what is this thing that is leeching off me? Random Thing: Babe, you can do whatever you want to me. Chuzheng: (touches her blade) In-In that case, I will not stand on ceremony. System: Little Miss, please put the saber down right this instant! (▼へ▼メ) #LittleMissAlwaysDoesAsShePleases.

Mo Ling · Sci-fi

The First Legendary Beast Master

Born into a dirt poor mining family, Karl only had one chance to get ahead in life, the annual elite recruitment day. On their final day of middle school, every student in the Golden Dragon Nation was given an experimental injection to awaken their affinity with magic. Those few who succeeded would become the Elite, the leaders and idols of the nation, blessed with incredible magical powers and respected by all. Those who did not would return to their normal lives of hard work and low wages, just doing the best they could. But with the nation surrounded by enemies, both humans and monsters, how long would these peaceful days of magical idols last? Follow the story of Karl as he awakens a unique power and strives to become the world's first Legendary Beast Master. Want to join the community for updates and upcoming news? Check out the discord. https://discord.gg/aokiaku

Aoki_Aku · Fantasy

The First Store System

A strange store that sells everything suddenly appears in the town. The Owner of the store is a young man and anyone who tried to mess with him %$#@. The products of the store are expensive, yet the queue outside the store never stops. "So what, If you're an Emperor? I'll fight to the death with you if you try to break the queue." These scenes outside the store were daily occurrences. *** Join the Discord server, https://discord.gg/4nbaU7Cy *** The cover art is not mine. I have taken it from pinterest. Please contact me if it is your art.

pinaka_ · Fantasy

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I went through it and it's not that bad seems to be an interesting story, but you should really separate the dialogue from the actual story, if not it may come off confusing. You also open quotation and close it sometimes, It also seem like you were writing in third person but then it changed to first person. This is just my Opinion

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The image of the Imperial Concubine as a salted fish has collapsed again.

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