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A_Sleepless_dream
A_Sleepless_dreamLv142mth
2024-11-30 05:26

If the story just abt mc that’s it…. Well it’s alright ig…. No one cares abt the cannon stuff but mc has been acting stupid…… to be forced to follow plot of cannon which makes the overall work suck…. Plot… follows cannon to the letter… author isn’t creative enough to make an actual story… so he is just copying the plot… mc is virtually useless… and also reincarnation his past life, which should’ve been useful is useless…. Before chapters 80 up it’s good and can be called its own story…. Now it’s just like most other novels a copy pasta… I’m not mad with the death thing I’m disappointed in everything else…. Like sure that’s important and need to follow fate…. But what happens after just shows how useless and how much Mc just follows what everyone else tells him… he acts like a dog to everyone… if Mc killed people or actually looked for revenge or stood up for himself in a better way… I would respect and like the story and it would earn it self full stars… it would be an original story…. But Mc becomes stupid…. Plot hole: treat a death eater with respect and beg for forgiveness….. Plot hole: letting a man be thrown in prison…. Which is future plot if for mc but he still let it happen…. Plot hole: letting death eaters get away from prison bc of excuses… and not doing anything (what is the actual point of mc in this world? I can see this as the only way mc has anything else to do or proved an actually story…. That could be interesting but nothing let the murders of only people who loved u run away free…. Even his best friend has more balls and a spin then Mc….) Plot hole: how accepting he is of everything…. Plot hole: he is a lapdog for dumbledore…. Being told to shut up sit still and bark on command…. How well trained…. Well great idea for a novel ig… and good start…. Mid way thru / plot sucks but probably new author with not refined skills… if that isn’t the case well… try again next time I’m sure one day u can do a great story…. But that’s overall and a holistic view….

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birtek89
birtek89Lv3

I completely agree with your assessment. I'm also dropping this fic.

Varts
VartsLv14

cheers mate

Ashish_P
Ashish_PLv3

maybe Dumbledore hypnotised the mc , thats why mc is a 🐕 now

LastGod
LastGodLv5

u saved me time. I hoped he would have stayed away from people in cannon and bided his time till he became powerful. But he acts like a Griffindor and a ravenclaw but was put in slythrine .... makes no sense.

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