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DetachedDreamer
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2024-11-13 09:40

5/5 Mostly because Bob is a bum. See first review for reference. he wanted a side quester MC. what a loser. anyways, the story so far is decent. a few spelling/grammar issues but for the most part it's fine. I like the MC so far and this time period isn't usually focused on either. With so many fanfics written, everything is partially generic or cliche but how you navigate through it all is a major factor in a quality fanfic. so far this story hasn't strayed from that blueprint. if it does start to fall off, since its early, ill revise my rating but until then keep it up.

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DetachedDreamer
DetachedDreamerLv14

First big mistake. throwing an orphan in slytherin. probably one of the dumbest and overused cliches out there. Just read this after writing the review. hopefully it doesn't ruin the story but it does hurt it.

Bob_Uchiha_XD
Bob_Uchiha_XDLv4

But the novel is boring, with a boring and sexless protagonist. If someone wins the lottery, they wouldn't risk their life to fight a psychopath, unless they have a mental problem. What would you do if you won a lottery of 100 million dollars? Fight with knives with a psychotic war veteran or eat delicious meals on a luxury yacht, what would you do? 🤔 The protagonist has a second chance in his life. But, instead of improving his life, the protagonist decides to be a stupid man with a hero complex. It's not bad to be a hero, what's bad is being stupid and wanting to be a hero because it's "cool", synonymous with mental retardation.

A_Sleepless_dream
A_Sleepless_dreamLv14

It gets wrose…. So many plot holes…. Mc is a dog….

Bob_Uchiha_XD:But the novel is boring, with a boring and sexless protagonist. If someone wins the lottery, they wouldn't risk their life to fight a psychopath, unless they have a mental problem. What would you do if you won a lottery of 100 million dollars? Fight with knives with a psychotic war veteran or eat delicious meals on a luxury yacht, what would you do? 🤔 The protagonist has a second chance in his life. But, instead of improving his life, the protagonist decides to be a stupid man with a hero complex. It's not bad to be a hero, what's bad is being stupid and wanting to be a hero because it's "cool", synonymous with mental retardation.
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Bob_Uchiha_XD
Bob_Uchiha_XDLv4

🤣

A_Sleepless_dream:It gets wrose…. So many plot holes…. Mc is a dog….
Ciel_Best_Waifu
Ciel_Best_WaifuLv13

Lol so true

Bob_Uchiha_XD:But the novel is boring, with a boring and sexless protagonist. If someone wins the lottery, they wouldn't risk their life to fight a psychopath, unless they have a mental problem. What would you do if you won a lottery of 100 million dollars? Fight with knives with a psychotic war veteran or eat delicious meals on a luxury yacht, what would you do? 🤔 The protagonist has a second chance in his life. But, instead of improving his life, the protagonist decides to be a stupid man with a hero complex. It's not bad to be a hero, what's bad is being stupid and wanting to be a hero because it's "cool", synonymous with mental retardation.
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