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  • birtek8922 days ago
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    What's killing this story is this excess of side plots. Chapters and chapters where the MC can't even be called a supporting character. And these are plots that aren't even interesting, they barely contribute to anything and only serve to increase the number of words. The plot has to be focused exclusively on the MC, since in addition to the MC being an introduced character, he is a reincarnator and must always be built and improved. The way things are, it seems that sometimes the MC is remembered, and then he quickly grows so many % in strength with the system, and this isn't even developed properly in the story. The system ends up as a boring crutch, used to justify the MC's sudden increase in strength, which is really boring. If it doesn't change, it will be just another story to leave out. I always make the observation that the author can and should write whatever he wants and have fun doing it, since it's a non-profit thing, but what's the point of publishing the story if the readers don't even bother to read it because the story becomes so boring.

  • birtek89a month ago
    Posted

    I think the fic is well rated because of the beginning of the story, since many people make an evaluation without having read more than 10 chapters and almost always don't go back to reevaluate. As I said, the beginning is very good and promising and gave meaning to the title, but this ends when the MC acquires a new residence. In addition to the system being practically left out of the story for the rest of the story, the MC seems to become a supporting character and in my opinion this ruined the story, making it seem like the story was written by someone without focusing on who the main character is. From what I can see, this fic has already reached the maximum potential of the MC's development and the rest is just background story to give some filler to the fic. Focusing on other characters throughout the fic doesn't add anything, remembering that despite all the deviations due to the MC's interference, he is still in the MCU and the script of this universe is already well defined. What could make things different is the use of the system, but what I saw was just a spaceship from a Chinese story that almost no one knows about, that has the most incredible AI in the universe and that after all this time has barely been explored, and the worst part is because the MC doesn't want to or is afraid of I don't know what. In my opinion, with the MC's current strength and this ship, he doesn't need to fear anything on Earth anymore. If he wanted to subjugate everyone, he could. Thus, changing anything in the MCU. Even the use of Kamar-Taj has already been explored and both the MC and the supposed harem girlfriend are already strong enough to shrug and give a fuck. The MC doesn't even need to stay on Earth, he could explore the universe if he wanted, go after the other Infinity Stones to finish off Thanos without even having to fight. It seems to me more like the MC only thinks with his dick and is just manipulating everything and everyone to get more women for a harem and for him to need to be recognized in the future as a hero. From what I understand, this is a translation, so it's hard to expect much.

  • birtek89a month ago
    Replied to A_Sleepless_dream

    I completely agree with your assessment. I'm also dropping this fic.

  • birtek89a month ago
    Posted

    I know it's a translation, but it's very annoying having to read full names all the time, especially the mc. Reduce it to just Hui please, I think it's possible to do that in translation. The story itself is a little poor, with an excess of praise for the MC's appearance, there is also the fact that 6-year-old girls make declarations of love and seek relationships, which is quite silly and unrealistic, at most there could be admiration juvenile (that's what we expect from many Chinese authors and their strange fetishes). I'm still at the beginning of the story. Regarding cultivation with different powers, I don't see a problem, as long as it is well planned and doesn't make the mc too op immediately and of course an idiot. And I hope the other ninjas aren't portrayed as idiots where only the MC can do something (there's a lot of Chinese history that you can't follow because of this).

  • birtek893 months ago
    Replied to A_Sleepless_dream

    This story is a complete copy without giving due credit to the true author. And the worst part is that they are still trying to profit from the story on patreon. For those who want to read the story that is already finished, it has the title: Harry Crow. Written by: RobSt. It can be found on the fanfiction website.

  • birtek893 months ago
    Posted

    This story is a complete copy without giving due credit to the true author. And the worst part is that they are still trying to profit from the story on patreon. For those who want to read the story that is already finished, it has the title: Harry Crow. Written by: RobSt. It can be found on the fanfiction website.

  • birtek894 months ago
    Posted

    Last arc is unnecessary and ruined the continuity of the story. Nerfed the MC and of course, more than 30 boring chapters that don't contribute positively to the story. Since the author doesn't care about the readers, it's not a story for those who are following along. If you are going to read it, it is better to wait until it is finished, as the author does not take the reader's opinion into account and also does not respond to their comments. Either way, it's not for me. As it is, it has lost the essence of the beginning. And it seems like there will be no end of universes embedded in the story. I think the right thing to do would be to set a maximum of 5 or 6 universes that are very in tune with HP and GOT and work with that, developing the characters that are brought to GOT well. As it stands, it doesn't even make sense to develop a kingdom in GOT.

  • birtek898 months ago
    Commented

    The story is no longer for me. Lots of nonsense and has so many characters and meaningless conversations, many of them practically repetitive, making it beyond tiring. There are already 50 chapters and the story is practically over and it's just gone. I feel sorry for those who invested in Patreon. Don't get me wrong, the story has a lot of potential and would be a fun, alternative read, but it just doesn't work. I wish the author good luck, I hope he changes and reviews the progress of the story or he will lose more and more readers.

  • birtek899 months ago
    Commented

    History is increasingly losing its natural essence. Systems are interesting, but when they are too dependent they make the story meaningless, since it barely seems like it is the character who uses the system but rather the system that uses the character. Then there are skills and powers outside of Naturo's original universe, and Naturo himself was very OP, not needing more powers, but very little skilled because he was very stupid. Good luck with the story, there are many who like it, but it's not for me anymore.

  • birtek89a year ago
    Posted

    For those who want a review of the story so far: The story is a complete copy of the canonical story, from the plot, events and even lines. We have a Harry with OP "potential", but still the same original jerk but now he's horny 3 years in advance. We have a shitty romance with Tonks, which is honestly rubbish as a female Auror has a relationship with someone under the age of 13, even worse is that when she met him Harry wasn't even 13; in other words, very forced. Even Sirius' actions, even after finding Andromeda, were stupid and senseless, and what's worse is that he ends up doing what he did canonically, for God's sake! And Andromeda is useless, Tonks too, capturing a mouse with free access to the castle is childish for a wizard, damn! And this sacred magic thing hasn't convinced, it hasn't added anything so far, it's poorly discussed and developed, which should be the focus of the story, but the story keeps clinging to the context of the original story for no reason at all. And the worst thing is the poor attempt to have a plot with sex in the story, and the criticism isn't even for something with minors but rather that everything is heading towards something forced.