birtek89

I think you could remove the other characters like Raditz, Salari, Goku and all the heroes altogether. What's the point of all this training if in the end Talot has to finish the fight and we all already know that he is many times superior in techniques and fighting power than the current villain (Cold). It kind of loses the fun of reading this. The entire fight between Raditz and Salari was about transformation and stages and all that nonsense and nothing else. And in the end they got beaten up badly, and Talot, who we already know is much stronger, comes and solves the problem. This plot is disappointing. As I said, it's better to retire the other warriors and let Talot alone defeat the villains in all cases. In the original anime and manga, at least the warriors didn't know in advance who their enemies were and how strong they were. In the original, there was suspense in each episode. We all always knew that Goku was always the strong protagonist and the key to the story, but he wasn't always available to solve the problem, which justified the battles of the other warriors, which doesn't happen here. Here, Talot is always available, making this plot pointless, kind of an attempt to boost the ego of the other heroes, but in the end they don't even accomplish the task, remembering that from the beginning it was something unnecessary, better to stop with this charm and let him eliminate all the villains and you have a guaranteed future. I say this even to Freeza, waiting for the guy to train is the height of idiocy, even more so when you are a survivor and seek revenge for your people. Let's remember that he is already a SSJ4, there is almost no one in universe 7 who can stand up to him. Now it would just be a matter of refining power and the search for divine Ki to reach the level of the gods. I'm sorry, author, but you gave Talot too much power before it was time, and justifying something by trying to strengthen his enemies, when he can go there and solve all the problems of the universe, including Majin Boo, is not the attitude of someone intelligent. If it's just about fighting and thirst for fighting, you don't need villains for that. And we must remember that the tournament between the universes is something inevitable and we will have this fight anyway. Another thing that is missing in this fic is the development of the characters, here everything is implicit but nothing very obvious, which makes the content of all those mentioned in the fic very poor. And the development of fighting power is not the development of character, personality, likes, dislikes, learning and everything else. Even the planet Earth, which in Dragon Ball is so unique and different, is poorly explored, not to mention the rest of the universe. To be fair, only a little of Raditz was mentioned here, where he tries to redeem himself and shows some remorse, and the Talot-Salari-Bulma pseudo-romance, which so far is pure garbage. I'm still following, since I've read this far. But the fic doesn't excite me anymore.

Very forced. Juzo Biwa is almost a walking corpse due to his injuries and still manages to participate in the fight. It's one thing to retreat and fight later. This is very unrealistic, especially for mist ninjas who fight much more for themselves than for the village. Raiga should have been portrayed as reasonably worn out. Because even though he won the fight and started attacking Seimei now, it was a long fight with an elite jonin who held him back for a long time, since in that same time Seimei alone killed more than half of the ninjas on the battlefield. Therefore, this exchange is very unrealistic. These details need to be improved.

What's killing this story is this excess of side plots. Chapters and chapters where the MC can't even be called a supporting character. And these are plots that aren't even interesting, they barely contribute to anything and only serve to increase the number of words. The plot has to be focused exclusively on the MC, since in addition to the MC being an introduced character, he is a reincarnator and must always be built and improved. The way things are, it seems that sometimes the MC is remembered, and then he quickly grows so many % in strength with the system, and this isn't even developed properly in the story. The system ends up as a boring crutch, used to justify the MC's sudden increase in strength, which is really boring. If it doesn't change, it will be just another story to leave out. I always make the observation that the author can and should write whatever he wants and have fun doing it, since it's a non-profit thing, but what's the point of publishing the story if the readers don't even bother to read it because the story becomes so boring.

I think the fic is well rated because of the beginning of the story, since many people make an evaluation without having read more than 10 chapters and almost always don't go back to reevaluate. As I said, the beginning is very good and promising and gave meaning to the title, but this ends when the MC acquires a new residence. In addition to the system being practically left out of the story for the rest of the story, the MC seems to become a supporting character and in my opinion this ruined the story, making it seem like the story was written by someone without focusing on who the main character is. From what I can see, this fic has already reached the maximum potential of the MC's development and the rest is just background story to give some filler to the fic. Focusing on other characters throughout the fic doesn't add anything, remembering that despite all the deviations due to the MC's interference, he is still in the MCU and the script of this universe is already well defined. What could make things different is the use of the system, but what I saw was just a spaceship from a Chinese story that almost no one knows about, that has the most incredible AI in the universe and that after all this time has barely been explored, and the worst part is because the MC doesn't want to or is afraid of I don't know what. In my opinion, with the MC's current strength and this ship, he doesn't need to fear anything on Earth anymore. If he wanted to subjugate everyone, he could. Thus, changing anything in the MCU. Even the use of Kamar-Taj has already been explored and both the MC and the supposed harem girlfriend are already strong enough to shrug and give a fuck. The MC doesn't even need to stay on Earth, he could explore the universe if he wanted, go after the other Infinity Stones to finish off Thanos without even having to fight. It seems to me more like the MC only thinks with his dick and is just manipulating everything and everyone to get more women for a harem and for him to need to be recognized in the future as a hero. From what I understand, this is a translation, so it's hard to expect much.

I completely agree with your assessment. I'm also dropping this fic.

I know it's a translation, but it's very annoying having to read full names all the time, especially the mc. Reduce it to just Hui please, I think it's possible to do that in translation. The story itself is a little poor, with an excess of praise for the MC's appearance, there is also the fact that 6-year-old girls make declarations of love and seek relationships, which is quite silly and unrealistic, at most there could be admiration juvenile (that's what we expect from many Chinese authors and their strange fetishes). I'm still at the beginning of the story. Regarding cultivation with different powers, I don't see a problem, as long as it is well planned and doesn't make the mc too op immediately and of course an idiot. And I hope the other ninjas aren't portrayed as idiots where only the MC can do something (there's a lot of Chinese history that you can't follow because of this).

This story is a complete copy without giving due credit to the true author. And the worst part is that they are still trying to profit from the story on patreon. For those who want to read the story that is already finished, it has the title: Harry Crow. Written by: RobSt. It can be found on the fanfiction website.

This story is a complete copy without giving due credit to the true author. And the worst part is that they are still trying to profit from the story on patreon. For those who want to read the story that is already finished, it has the title: Harry Crow. Written by: RobSt. It can be found on the fanfiction website.

Last arc is unnecessary and ruined the continuity of the story. Nerfed the MC and of course, more than 30 boring chapters that don't contribute positively to the story. Since the author doesn't care about the readers, it's not a story for those who are following along. If you are going to read it, it is better to wait until it is finished, as the author does not take the reader's opinion into account and also does not respond to their comments. Either way, it's not for me. As it is, it has lost the essence of the beginning. And it seems like there will be no end of universes embedded in the story. I think the right thing to do would be to set a maximum of 5 or 6 universes that are very in tune with HP and GOT and work with that, developing the characters that are brought to GOT well. As it stands, it doesn't even make sense to develop a kingdom in GOT.

The story is no longer for me. Lots of nonsense and has so many characters and meaningless conversations, many of them practically repetitive, making it beyond tiring. There are already 50 chapters and the story is practically over and it's just gone. I feel sorry for those who invested in Patreon. Don't get me wrong, the story has a lot of potential and would be a fun, alternative read, but it just doesn't work. I wish the author good luck, I hope he changes and reviews the progress of the story or he will lose more and more readers.