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Odil
OdilLv141yr
2024-04-27 00:31

The grammar needs serious work... So many 5 star reviews with nobody mentioning the simple fact that the grammar is horrendous at times is fishy.

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Tobi_444
Tobi_444Author

I'll pin this comment, English ain't my first language so if people don't prefer a story with grammar mistakes it'll help save time

HeavenShakingIdiot
HeavenShakingIdiotLv14

The grammar has improved tremendously since the fiction started. I still see mistakes from time to time, but honestly, the story and even the fighting scenes make it worth it.

Man_of_culture_69
Man_of_culture_69Lv3

Author who is female lead?hope it's Kushina, and please don't say that it'll destroy the orginal plot we are here to read about mc not some Dumbo chasing sasuke..oh yes you're author you can manage or Konan is also good love interest?

Tobi_444:I'll pin this comment, English ain't my first language so if people don't prefer a story with grammar mistakes it'll help save time
Man_of_culture_69
Man_of_culture_69Lv3

Well Ninja world is ruthless it would be disappointed if mc just forgive their parents plus they are not mc real parents they didn't even cared for mc And yes hope Kushina end up with mc she is my fav character as well hope just for plot author don't go with orginal plot

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Yanir_FP
Yanir_FPLv4

I agree what you say I really hope he won't be forgiven them and will shut them up and same here I really hope the creator will make MC X kushina together and not the original for the sake of the plot

Man_of_culture_69:Well Ninja world is ruthless it would be disappointed if mc just forgive their parents plus they are not mc real parents they didn't even cared for mc And yes hope Kushina end up with mc she is my fav character as well hope just for plot author don't go with orginal plot
_oinkchan
_oinkchanLv5

Why can’t you be grateful that it’s understandable. Most fics on WebNovel have bad grammar and those that have good are often pretty bad storywise.

Odil
OdilLv14

Because I wouldn't waste my time criticising or even rating trash. This fic is good, and the grammar improved over time, which means Author is doing something about it, and that's the whole point of the review system. Prospect readers get to gauge the work and not waste their time. And Author gets to see what the points of contention are and improve on them.

_oinkchan:Why can’t you be grateful that it’s understandable. Most fics on WebNovel have bad grammar and those that have good are often pretty bad storywise.
_oinkchan
_oinkchanLv5

You have a point.

Odil:Because I wouldn't waste my time criticising or even rating trash. This fic is good, and the grammar improved over time, which means Author is doing something about it, and that's the whole point of the review system. Prospect readers get to gauge the work and not waste their time. And Author gets to see what the points of contention are and improve on them.
Febfew
FebfewLv11

Harém?

Tobi_444:I'll pin this comment, English ain't my first language so if people don't prefer a story with grammar mistakes it'll help save time
Mann_Teufortian
Mann_TeufortianLv4

look, the only thing you need to do is fix dialogue, which for some reason you separate into different paragraphs. You're also missing punctuation. it goes like this: "Hello, I'm going to be Hokage," said Kazuki. Not like this, which is how you're doing it: "Hello, I'm going to be Hokage" Said Kazuki. it's literally that easy to fix

Tobi_444:I'll pin this comment, English ain't my first language so if people don't prefer a story with grammar mistakes it'll help save time
drago282007
drago282007Lv4

Yes but the reviews have categories for a reason he's giving good reasons atleast he gave 4 srars

_oinkchan:Why can’t you be grateful that it’s understandable. Most fics on WebNovel have bad grammar and those that have good are often pretty bad storywise.
Lost_Boy021
Lost_Boy021Lv4

It’s not

Man_of_culture_69:Author who is female lead?hope it's Kushina, and please don't say that it'll destroy the orginal plot we are here to read about mc not some Dumbo chasing sasuke..oh yes you're author you can manage or Konan is also good love interest?
SuSunnyGoldenLight
SuSunnyGoldenLightLv5

Yeah it's really hard to read the sentences twice or thrice to understand the them, because Author missed auxiliary verbs, dots and commas quite often.

GENGHIS_KHAN
GENGHIS_KHANLv13

Get out

Man_of_culture_69:Author who is female lead?hope it's Kushina, and please don't say that it'll destroy the orginal plot we are here to read about mc not some Dumbo chasing sasuke..oh yes you're author you can manage or Konan is also good love interest?
Man_of_culture_69
Man_of_culture_69Lv3

Randi ka bachhe ja maa chudwa le

GENGHIS_KHAN:Get out
KamikazeDrew
KamikazeDrewLv5

Because more than half the readers don't have English as their first or even second language.

Ryan_Ashari
Ryan_AshariLv4

for me it's good enough

dan12036
dan12036Lv2

The problem is that a lot of readers are not native English speakers, which in turn they read the story translated. Grammar count less then.

DxrkSosa
DxrkSosaLv1

I'm russian, u right A lot ppls just translated.

dan12036:The problem is that a lot of readers are not native English speakers, which in turn they read the story translated. Grammar count less then.
Daoist4MxvaV
Daoist4MxvaVLv14

but wouldn't be getting with kushina be really dumb , if kushina ends up with minato , then no naruto and if there is no naruto , who will take on the otsusuki , unless the author gives the mc a broken template

Man_of_culture_69:Author who is female lead?hope it's Kushina, and please don't say that it'll destroy the orginal plot we are here to read about mc not some Dumbo chasing sasuke..oh yes you're author you can manage or Konan is also good love interest?
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