The grammar needs serious work... So many 5 star reviews with nobody mentioning the simple fact that the grammar is horrendous at times is fishy.
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LIKEAuthor who is female lead?hope it's Kushina, and please don't say that it'll destroy the orginal plot we are here to read about mc not some Dumbo chasing sasuke..oh yes you're author you can manage or Konan is also good love interest?
Well Ninja world is ruthless it would be disappointed if mc just forgive their parents plus they are not mc real parents they didn't even cared for mc And yes hope Kushina end up with mc she is my fav character as well hope just for plot author don't go with orginal plot
I agree what you say I really hope he won't be forgiven them and will shut them up and same here I really hope the creator will make MC X kushina together and not the original for the sake of the plot
Because I wouldn't waste my time criticising or even rating trash. This fic is good, and the grammar improved over time, which means Author is doing something about it, and that's the whole point of the review system. Prospect readers get to gauge the work and not waste their time. And Author gets to see what the points of contention are and improve on them.
You have a point.
look, the only thing you need to do is fix dialogue, which for some reason you separate into different paragraphs. You're also missing punctuation. it goes like this: "Hello, I'm going to be Hokage," said Kazuki. Not like this, which is how you're doing it: "Hello, I'm going to be Hokage" Said Kazuki. it's literally that easy to fix
but wouldn't be getting with kushina be really dumb , if kushina ends up with minato , then no naruto and if there is no naruto , who will take on the otsusuki , unless the author gives the mc a broken template