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Poet_LegionLv157mth
2024-07-02 16:20

The whole prison sequence in the war with the monsters. Just the first riff lasts way too long for it to be. Enjoyable to read, especially with the writing style. At the beginning of the book, it feels very soulless, especially with the abundance of fluffed chapters. There are so many chapters I read through. That just are pointless towards the story.There were a couple times that I skipped a few and it made no difference. Honestly, if the entire war arc with the monsters only lasted 30 chapters.What have been pretty good?But looks like it lasts about 60 or 70 and definitely over stays.It's welcome

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I raped the chapter 223 and honestly.The story is worse and worse.It's been over a 100 chapters since our main characters made any progress in power and while that's not bad, he's also made no progress in his personality as a character or even the world making any progress towards a world goal.If you can say that there is one in the story because honestly there isn't. From the novel, starting a bit Rocky to being a bit slow. When it came to the rift Ark, it got so much worse after he exited the rift. Cause you think once he got back with humans? It would at least be kind of cool. Maybe you'd have to kill a couple people. Maybe they have to come to terms with that. Maybe you'd have to come to terms with being a monster and what not? But instead we have our main character being shown in one scene. As a complete homocidal, maniac wants to kill his own teacher because she was. Trying to see if he was okay. And he didn't want her to find out his power to the next second. Being a complete West not being able to talk up to anybody about anything that's happening to. Even the next second are main character. Literally drowning and madness while fighting a pretty interesting way. Honestly, it was really nice to read that little section with the monster in the mansion, but it was completely ruined because right after. All this scenery was depicted with our main character.Being mentally insane and unstable to him trying to be the committee.Release 10 chapters later and just being a very awkward.B****** around everything and it's not even in a good way either.It's just so forced.Every interaction between the main character in raven is so forced that it's not even funny

A_N_O_N_Y_MLv3

could you review my book. I totally agree to what you say about this. My book: X-season 1

PhoenixYTLv3

Can't argue with that, dropped it once they went on their little adventure since it got tiring

Poet_Legion:I raped the chapter 223 and honestly.The story is worse and worse.It's been over a 100 chapters since our main characters made any progress in power and while that's not bad, he's also made no progress in his personality as a character or even the world making any progress towards a world goal.If you can say that there is one in the story because honestly there isn't. From the novel, starting a bit Rocky to being a bit slow. When it came to the rift Ark, it got so much worse after he exited the rift. Cause you think once he got back with humans? It would at least be kind of cool. Maybe you'd have to kill a couple people. Maybe they have to come to terms with that. Maybe you'd have to come to terms with being a monster and what not? But instead we have our main character being shown in one scene. As a complete homocidal, maniac wants to kill his own teacher because she was. Trying to see if he was okay. And he didn't want her to find out his power to the next second. Being a complete West not being able to talk up to anybody about anything that's happening to. Even the next second are main character. Literally drowning and madness while fighting a pretty interesting way. Honestly, it was really nice to read that little section with the monster in the mansion, but it was completely ruined because right after. All this scenery was depicted with our main character.Being mentally insane and unstable to him trying to be the committee.Release 10 chapters later and just being a very awkward.B****** around everything and it's not even in a good way either.It's just so forced.Every interaction between the main character in raven is so forced that it's not even funny
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