why is the author using complex sentences when there are simpler options ❓ first of all, writing style while explaining is weird which becomes harder with the author's choice of words. Author does not know how to end a topic. He or she just moves on with the next topic. i really don't like this way of writing
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LIKEi really like the story but I have a problem with the author's writing style of making things more complex than it has to be
I promise it gets better, the first problem I had was trying not to info dump while appropriately giving an explanation to the world building so it made quite a lot of sentence come as abrupt, but I'm getting better and improving with every chapter. Thank you for a review and I'll implore you to believe in me a little more 😭
also, the sentence will become simpler since I'm doing an editing already
P.S you can join thr discord server to interrupt with me directly, I'd love to know more about these things you deem complex.
I will do that
RighteousFilth:P.S you can join thr discord server to interrupt with me directly, I'd love to know more about these things you deem complex.
I did it
HADE_Thoppil:I will do that
I agree with your review, but the criticism you’re giving the author should be refined. While the author tends to jump from one point to another in this work, that isn’t something bad in writing. Sometimes it can be done well, if it’s properly worked on. Instead, what the author is doing wrong, is jumping from one point to another without smoothly transitioning over to another scene. They leave out important details, making the reader exit a scene with multiple unanswered questions and unexplained information. For example, in the first chapter - the author essentially says that MC was betrayed by his girlfriend, that’s cool? I guess? What he should have done is write a proper few chapters of background information, to build up a strong perspective on the mc’s character. It’s not enough to say he was simply betrayed for one’s character.
I swear, he's descriptions are saying a whole lot of nothing
I'm late to the party but I also feel that the sentences are needlessly complex with abrupt endings and sometimes the words don't mean anything. At some point, I began suspecting the author is using AI to edit his material, which honestly, if true, would be a pity. Hoping the quality of editing improves in further chapters.
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