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HADE_Thoppil
HADE_ThoppilLv49mth
2024-04-01 15:17

why is the author using complex sentences when there are simpler options ❓ first of all, writing style while explaining is weird which becomes harder with the author's choice of words. Author does not know how to end a topic. He or she just moves on with the next topic. i really don't like this way of writing

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RighteousFilth
3.7
685 Chs

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HADE_Thoppil
HADE_ThoppilLv4

i really like the story but I have a problem with the author's writing style of making things more complex than it has to be

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RighteousFilth
RighteousFilthAuthor

I promise it gets better, the first problem I had was trying not to info dump while appropriately giving an explanation to the world building so it made quite a lot of sentence come as abrupt, but I'm getting better and improving with every chapter. Thank you for a review and I'll implore you to believe in me a little more 😭

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RighteousFilth
RighteousFilthAuthor

also, the sentence will become simpler since I'm doing an editing already

9mth
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RighteousFilth
RighteousFilthAuthor

P.S you can join thr discord server to interrupt with me directly, I'd love to know more about these things you deem complex.

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HADE_Thoppil
HADE_ThoppilLv4

I will do that

RighteousFilth:P.S you can join thr discord server to interrupt with me directly, I'd love to know more about these things you deem complex.
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HADE_Thoppil
HADE_ThoppilLv4

I did it

HADE_Thoppil:I will do that
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novelmeister
novelmeisterLv15

I agree with your review, but the criticism you’re giving the author should be refined. While the author tends to jump from one point to another in this work, that isn’t something bad in writing. Sometimes it can be done well, if it’s properly worked on. Instead, what the author is doing wrong, is jumping from one point to another without smoothly transitioning over to another scene. They leave out important details, making the reader exit a scene with multiple unanswered questions and unexplained information. For example, in the first chapter - the author essentially says that MC was betrayed by his girlfriend, that’s cool? I guess? What he should have done is write a proper few chapters of background information, to build up a strong perspective on the mc’s character. It’s not enough to say he was simply betrayed for one’s character.

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Otaku_242
Otaku_242Lv13

I swear, he's descriptions are saying a whole lot of nothing

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shanor
shanorLv5

I'm late to the party but I also feel that the sentences are needlessly complex with abrupt endings and sometimes the words don't mean anything. At some point, I began suspecting the author is using AI to edit his material, which honestly, if true, would be a pity. Hoping the quality of editing improves in further chapters.

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RoadWolfProduction
RoadWolfProductionLv3

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RighteousFilth
RighteousFilthAuthor

Author's divine review. After a hundred chapters. I have decided to drop a honest review of my work. Okay, for the first hundred chapters we focus on Northern and his sufferings. Even though this is a book about an overpowered character, my MC is not suddenly strong from the beginning. We see how this happens, how he survives in a realm of suffering and comes out different and strong. So, yes if you are expecting an overpowered character from the beginning this is not it. But I do promise you that following Northern would be a delightful experience. Next we have the characters. The characters are made to be so realistic, you'll meet dumb characters, you'll meet brilliant characters, some of them you will love some of them you will hate, but you'll find yourself unable to just quit the story... there's so much information, so much to say because Ul'Tra-el is just a magnificent world full of wonders, even I have not explored it all. I implore you to dive into this world with me. I'd love to take Northern's journey to the very end with you guys, till he becomes the pinnacle of not just one world but all worlds, till he marries, gives birth, grows old and die. I'm determined to see this to the end, so come with me. Thank you.

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BoNe_of_mY_SwORd
BoNe_of_mY_SwORdLv14

the thing with novels is if u want people to spend money on them , u need to get them hooked or at least curious enough to read past the free chapters . this one didn't manage to do that with me . the writing could be much better. the constantly shifting povs in the beginning, weird info dumps and complex classifications just makes it much harder to read . also i understand if his parents didn't want to teach him how to fight so that he could get a better technique later but why didn't they teach him anything? nothing about rifts or even how to use a monster core . and he barely uses his system. it's supposed to be his power why not use it ?

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fukkinchicken
fukkinchickenLv11

I love everything about this novel and I hope this gets enough exposure 'cuz It's just that great. Everything is well thought of; The Story, The Character Development, The Fights, The World Building, and The Mystery EVERYTHING! I approve, Author-san and I hope you don't butcher this 'cuz I really really love it.

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dracula6969
dracula6969Lv4

Reveal spoiler

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RedPandaK
RedPandaKLv13

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Cultured_Daoist69
Cultured_Daoist69Lv13

Grats fellow filthy brother on WPC🐐🐐🐐 THE GOATTT!🐐🐐

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bigmadtoe
bigmadtoeLv4

bloated. so many words to convey so less. it's better than most of the trash here. It keeps going on and on and the story barely moves forward. Reading this feels like a chore

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Faeth_
Faeth_Lv12

character progress is too slow it kill the mood

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Zerobeast
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