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bigmadtoe
bigmadtoeLv47mth
2024-04-28 12:47

bloated. so many words to convey so less. it's better than most of the trash here. It keeps going on and on and the story barely moves forward. Reading this feels like a chore

I Can Copy And Evolve Talents

RighteousFilth
3.8
674 Chs

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RighteousFilth
RighteousFilthAuthor

I'm sorry, looks like the first thirty chapters really is the problem, since I was still trying to get a good grip on this whole writing stuff. I apologize if it stressed you out. I'm more of a novice author and this book was my way of getting a lot of things in place, while I do promise that it gets better, I have also seen the necessity to really touch and edit the first thirty chapters. Thank you very much for the review.

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novelmeister
novelmeisterLv15

Author, I commend you for responding to all reviews and natures of criticism on your work. It is a step novices must take for improvement. However, I wholeheartedly recommend dropping this story as soon as possible and working on a well-crafted one for your next work. Use the experience you have gained in writing this novel to jumpstart a different one. I am only giving this recommendation because your story isn’t unique in nature. Even if your writing quality and substance improves over time, there will be no escape from the initial 100 chapters in this novel that are lacking in quality. The only option is to write something new. Should you decide instead to rewrite the entire thing, I would redo some of the concept and further develop core character design.

RighteousFilth:I'm sorry, looks like the first thirty chapters really is the problem, since I was still trying to get a good grip on this whole writing stuff. I apologize if it stressed you out. I'm more of a novice author and this book was my way of getting a lot of things in place, while I do promise that it gets better, I have also seen the necessity to really touch and edit the first thirty chapters. Thank you very much for the review.
7mth
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RighteousFilth
RighteousFilthAuthor

Thank you very much, I appreciate your comment but I also think I'd love to see how far this book can go. I think one of what we authors owe our works is loyalty against all odds.

novelmeister:Author, I commend you for responding to all reviews and natures of criticism on your work. It is a step novices must take for improvement. However, I wholeheartedly recommend dropping this story as soon as possible and working on a well-crafted one for your next work. Use the experience you have gained in writing this novel to jumpstart a different one. I am only giving this recommendation because your story isn’t unique in nature. Even if your writing quality and substance improves over time, there will be no escape from the initial 100 chapters in this novel that are lacking in quality. The only option is to write something new. Should you decide instead to rewrite the entire thing, I would redo some of the concept and further develop core character design.
7mth
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LLagier
LLagierLv4

Eyyy you seem to have read lots of novels, can you recommend any for me pleasee. (Js no harem ty)

novelmeister:Author, I commend you for responding to all reviews and natures of criticism on your work. It is a step novices must take for improvement. However, I wholeheartedly recommend dropping this story as soon as possible and working on a well-crafted one for your next work. Use the experience you have gained in writing this novel to jumpstart a different one. I am only giving this recommendation because your story isn’t unique in nature. Even if your writing quality and substance improves over time, there will be no escape from the initial 100 chapters in this novel that are lacking in quality. The only option is to write something new. Should you decide instead to rewrite the entire thing, I would redo some of the concept and further develop core character design.
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novelmeister
novelmeisterLv15

I’d consider myself well-read, but each of us likes our own cliches and fantasies, meaning to recommend something to you I need to know what stories you enjoy. I’ll reccomend you some of my best stories in turn, both on this platform and off.

LLagier:Eyyy you seem to have read lots of novels, can you recommend any for me pleasee. (Js no harem ty)
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LLagier
LLagierLv4

I have read and liked birth of the demonic sword, kill the sun, Superhunt, lotm and mother of learning. I’ve read many more but they’re the usual trash of the app.

novelmeister:I’d consider myself well-read, but each of us likes our own cliches and fantasies, meaning to recommend something to you I need to know what stories you enjoy. I’ll reccomend you some of my best stories in turn, both on this platform and off.
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LLagier
LLagierLv4

Thx mate

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Pyrozian
PyrozianLv15

If not, then possibly rewrite the first chapters so that they are more intriguing, less longwinded and confusing, and so on

RighteousFilth:Thank you very much, I appreciate your comment but I also think I'd love to see how far this book can go. I think one of what we authors owe our works is loyalty against all odds.
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RighteousFilth
RighteousFilthAuthor

Yes, I've started work on that

Pyrozian:If not, then possibly rewrite the first chapters so that they are more intriguing, less longwinded and confusing, and so on
6mth
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RighteousFilth
RighteousFilthAuthor

Author's divine review. After a hundred chapters. I have decided to drop a honest review of my work. Okay, for the first hundred chapters we focus on Northern and his sufferings. Even though this is a book about an overpowered character, my MC is not suddenly strong from the beginning. We see how this happens, how he survives in a realm of suffering and comes out different and strong. So, yes if you are expecting an overpowered character from the beginning this is not it. But I do promise you that following Northern would be a delightful experience. Next we have the characters. The characters are made to be so realistic, you'll meet dumb characters, you'll meet brilliant characters, some of them you will love some of them you will hate, but you'll find yourself unable to just quit the story... there's so much information, so much to say because Ul'Tra-el is just a magnificent world full of wonders, even I have not explored it all. I implore you to dive into this world with me. I'd love to take Northern's journey to the very end with you guys, till he becomes the pinnacle of not just one world but all worlds, till he marries, gives birth, grows old and die. I'm determined to see this to the end, so come with me. Thank you.

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HADE_Thoppil
HADE_ThoppilLv4

why is the author using complex sentences when there are simpler options ❓ first of all, writing style while explaining is weird which becomes harder with the author's choice of words. Author does not know how to end a topic. He or she just moves on with the next topic. i really don't like this way of writing

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BoNe_of_mY_SwORd
BoNe_of_mY_SwORdLv14

the thing with novels is if u want people to spend money on them , u need to get them hooked or at least curious enough to read past the free chapters . this one didn't manage to do that with me . the writing could be much better. the constantly shifting povs in the beginning, weird info dumps and complex classifications just makes it much harder to read . also i understand if his parents didn't want to teach him how to fight so that he could get a better technique later but why didn't they teach him anything? nothing about rifts or even how to use a monster core . and he barely uses his system. it's supposed to be his power why not use it ?

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fukkinchicken
fukkinchickenLv11

I love everything about this novel and I hope this gets enough exposure 'cuz It's just that great. Everything is well thought of; The Story, The Character Development, The Fights, The World Building, and The Mystery EVERYTHING! I approve, Author-san and I hope you don't butcher this 'cuz I really really love it.

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dracula6969
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Cultured_Daoist69
Cultured_Daoist69Lv13

Grats fellow filthy brother on WPC🐐🐐🐐 THE GOATTT!🐐🐐

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Faeth_
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character progress is too slow it kill the mood

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Zerobeast
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