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W0lfi
W0lfiLv1110mth
2024-04-18 07:48

I like the character building, skills and world building, BUT the story is tooo complex, writing is rly bad, sometimes even after reading it twice u dont understand whats happening. So sadly i drop this. 3,5/5

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W0lfi
W0lfiLv11

and i have to agree thatother characters arent well introduced u get little to nothing information about other character so this will just slow down the whole novel. No connections, no emotions nothing…. its just boring

W0lfi
W0lfiLv11

but the author and this books have lots of potentials because the idea is really good. Just improve the writing, better english more simple structures. More character dev and side character and logical emotional events. For me it feels like the author has an idea about an event and shortly after sth the next event follows—> slow progress in one direction

RighteousFilth
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I did improve the writing quality, and as at 57 MC is still in a realm of suffering so we don't get to see other characters, but right now, MC has left the rift and is already interacting with other characters. And instead of info dumping other characters information, I prefer to show through their actions and decision, it'd take a little patience to follow but it's always interesting to follow. stick with me more and you won't regret it. Ah, I should see what I can do to those earlier chaps with messed up grammar, I started once but stopped to focus more on writing. Thank you for the review

W0lfi
W0lfiLv11

Eyy, its fine i think nobody would drop a 10/10 novel from the beginning the progress will make u better and as an viewer i have little to no intel about how hard it is to write a novel by myself, so just keep going and i think with time u will greatly improve 👍🏼

RighteousFilth:I did improve the writing quality, and as at 57 MC is still in a realm of suffering so we don't get to see other characters, but right now, MC has left the rift and is already interacting with other characters. And instead of info dumping other characters information, I prefer to show through their actions and decision, it'd take a little patience to follow but it's always interesting to follow. stick with me more and you won't regret it. Ah, I should see what I can do to those earlier chaps with messed up grammar, I started once but stopped to focus more on writing. Thank you for the review
novelmeister
novelmeisterLv15

Precisely. Writer needs to smoothly transition without leaving readers in the dark.

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