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2024-05-05 17:21

I want to start with saying that I've been a fan of your wyvern fic and want to know when you will continue it. It was one of the best Dxd fic for me. As for this fic, the start was good but it went downhill after the bael heir plot at least for me. The harem is too big and for me it didn't work out too many OCs and the harem members character were a bit off though the romance part was not bad but not good either. But the main thing that I didn't like was the power concept of MC. Despite having power of gravity from demon lord Wilbert from testement sister new devil which is equal or stronger than power of destruction it was nearly invisible throughout the fic apart from the start where he used it to train. Soul magic, necromancy , mage, knight alchemist blacksmith etc. you have put a lot of eggs in one basket and instead of harmony it all looks chaotic . Summary: For the author, you have a lot of ambitions you should have taken one step at time for all those professions and even that harem to work out not just take the shortcut called timeskip overall the concept of the fic was good but the execution was poor.

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Yeah, I can see that

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