The dialogue is pretty horrendous. A lot of it is just useless filler with no depth to it. The MC is a bit of a weirdo, but that's more the writers poor taste than anything. The dialogue is incredibly unrealistic, conversations especially. Yes, it's a fantasy world, but seriously? The conversations look like a child wrote them. The prose is awful. Each line adds nothing to the overall narrative, so much so you could skip the first 10 chapters and would of missed nothing of importance. I genuinely can't be bothered to give a more In depth review, the fanfic isn't worth anymore than what I've wrote.
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