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2024-01-28 10:02

This is too much out of canon. All characters are rewritten in authors image. The story gets slower with each chapter. At first the story was very fast paced with a lot of time skips and characters you could say were canon, but now... Chapters have so many bulls.... details, that the story barely progresses. At this rate author will need about a thousand or even more chapters just to finish this fic.

Dragon Ball Alternative

Equuleus_Nox
4.6
126 Chs

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Equuleus_Nox
Equuleus_NoxAuthor

Thanks for your review! This is rather unexpected since my other viewers are telling me to hurry up and diverge from the canon already! If you take a look at a review given a few days before yours, that reader was of the opinion that everything in my story was the same. As the author, I’m being pulled in two different directions! And well, it’ll be quite difficult to write a story if all the characters stayed absolutely the same. If you’re referring to some character that are way off like Popo and Nappa, well, there’s not a whole lot I can say there. I certainly couldn’t work with the originals since they did literally nothing in the canon… I did try, however to make the progression of the important characters start from a common point and progress logically. Goku is still the same but a little more serious and sassy. Gohan is a little more confident. Krillin isn’t as much of a coward. And Vegeta was more fleshed out but still the prideful Prince we know! As for the length, I did make a note in Chapter 0 that this is quite a long term project. Hopefully the story being long wasn’t too big of a surprise! That being said, I can see how too much useless details can clog up a story so I’ll pay more attention to it in the future!

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Keyaruga_Tsuki
Keyaruga_TsukiLv3

so first you guys coming that it's to much in Canon and then next you guys complain it's out of Canon.These reviews are emotional reviews.

3mth
Game_B_Roll
Game_B_RollLv4

Well guess they don't have a council to come to a consensus like that is the authors job. We are all just giving our preferences.

Keyaruga_Tsuki:so first you guys coming that it's to much in Canon and then next you guys complain it's out of Canon.These reviews are emotional reviews.
3mth
Other Reviews
Keyaruga_Tsuki
Keyaruga_TsukiLv3

good story by far the best in terms of Dragon Ball Fan Fics. 1. The main character of this story is a human and I think that's amazing,I'm tired of watching drgaon ball fanfics have the same trope of an overpowered sayain blah blah blah.Its very predictable and this is a new way of going about it and so far so good. 2.Some of you may be worried about him being human because if the fact its dragon ball and their are bigger forces at play like Frieza ect,Yes the Main character knows this and he wishes for an amazing ability throught the earthly dragonballs.Do not believe anyone telling you that the ability is nerfed or underwhelming,They are the same people expecting a fast paced story where the Mc becomes an "ancient legendary God baby big boy sayain" like grow up. 3.The writing quality is amazing so far so good,My only problem with this is the updating schedule, It's very slow but that's just my opinion it's steady I think it's like 1 chapter per week..I'm just addicted and want more...but yeah I did end up giving the updating stability 3 stars it should be 4 stars but I just want more chapters.. 4.World background not much to say on this end, It's a DragonBall fanfic everything is described well so like...idk bro it's DragonBall we know what everything looks like already bit the descriptions are great as well. 5.Story development is amazing.I love how it develops in such a nice pace.Not everything is happening fast and oh my God,The way characters react to his actions is amazing for example when he killed ___ person to forward the plot, Piccolo was questioning him and others looking at him suspiciously or when he let _____ person die,That also raised a few eye brows.His actions affect the reactions if those around him and I think that's great because UT brings more life to the side characters around him. 6.Overall this story is a 4.0 at least for me and I would give it a higher rating If the author just dropped more chapters 😭. The development is nicely done,Writing quality amazing,Sidr characters feel real and not just there for convenience,World background is great but I've already watched the show so I know what things look like but the descriptions can help you picture them better as well. 7.Advice, Moving forward I would like if the author posted images of what he was describing and what the main character did look like, I've seen other novels and fan fics do this and I think it would be a great addition if you just add a text that says image and then posted a picture of what you want us to see as readers by commenting on the image.That would be amazing as well.Please do update more if you can, I think this will help your fanfic grow faster because by all means I think this fanfic is the DragonBall version of Naruto faint smile both stories are peak.

4mth

Ixtabb
IxtabbLv4

Reveal spoiler

3mth
QBL
QBLLv4

We mourn the loss of a true legend, Akira Toriyama who brought joy and inspiration to millions around the world through his iconic creations. Toriyama's legacy will forever endure, his work will continue to inspire and bring smiles to countless hearts.

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Qwerttipper
QwerttipperLv4

The book starts out well, but all the decisions after he is granted his wish are downright arrogant. His thoughts of preserving the Canon is stupid when he is added into the world. Anyways not the story for me hopefully mc can grow as a person and not treat everyone as pawns.

1yr
YaBoyChris
YaBoyChrisLv14

This story started off really well. The main character logically laid out good plans, acted on them to the best of his ability, and started progressing. I liked him not having a super strong ability off rip, giving him something to work towards. Unfortunately, the author stated taking this story down the crack route. Between incredibly goofy dialogue and bringing in annoying aspects like characterizations from the Abridged series I’ve lost nearly all enjoyment for this fic. I guess I’ll check it out every once in a while to see where it’s progressed.

1yr
NunuXD
NunuXDLv12

Okay, that's a really well written story, but that's not a story for me, read about an MC so weak and useless isn't my cup of tea, 20 chapters and the Mc hasn't changed anything in the cannon besides some small "butterfly effects", an mc that have trained for 20 chapters and still got used as a baseball bat for radditz isn't an mc that I wanna keep following. I know that you wanna make some development, and I really like to read some weak to strong, but when the Mc is just weak and you plan make him strong in 200 chapters, that's not a pacing for me.

11mth
Mad_man13
Mad_man13Lv4

I have been on this platform for years and I have read thousands of books, for thousands of hours. And I have to say this is a realy high quality story, one of the best I have seen. The only advice I would give you is to keep the quality high, as a lot of times once a story gets into the hundreds of chapters the quality wanes. So please take your time, but don’t drop the story. I really look forward to the next chapter.

1yr
Beyond_
Beyond_Lv3

Even without many chapters to comment on, I like how the characters are portrayed and express their feelings, the protagonist is very weak from the looks of it, which is disappointing but has potential. Let your cover not just be an illustration, but a character.

1yr
ElPadre
ElPadreLv1

This Fanfic is the best of all Dragon ball's one here. The characters are fun to read and its an AU in a good way ! Goo job Author ! Keep Going ! Give me more !!!!!

11mth
NeaCambelt
NeaCambeltLv1

Dialogue bizarre [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

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