it's actually a great novel idea. my only two points of concern would be 1. the doll plot point. it seems like the kind of thing you'll write and look back on in 2 weeks full of cringe and then drop the novel. Also he interacted with objectively way too many Marvel canon characters in chapter 1. it's a bit much. There were also a million ways you could've introduced debt as a driving force and neccesity without the 'dolls'. I also think you could've done the debt with something other than money, like lifespan etc. because ultimately losing all your money is better than visiting darkseid.
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LIKEI'll be honest as long as it's between two LEGAL and CONSENTING people there's nothing else to talk about end of and 16 just so happens to be legal in Britain no need to come across as angry (my interpretation of your constant use of full stops on webnovel of all places 🤷🏻♂️)
did you go through my profile or something? First you like teenagers and now you creep through someone profile. You need to be on a watch list cause you're showing some dangerous tendencies.
So you just disregard the comment I was replying to? The person said they were talking about Wednesday Adams, a highschool character. I am justified to say you’re a pedo when you point out how she looks good playing a high schooler, but then say at least she’s 20 irl. What’s your argument exactly, pedo defender?