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Giga_WeebLv21yr
2023-10-30 11:14

it's actually a great novel idea. my only two points of concern would be 1. the doll plot point. it seems like the kind of thing you'll write and look back on in 2 weeks full of cringe and then drop the novel. Also he interacted with objectively way too many Marvel canon characters in chapter 1. it's a bit much. There were also a million ways you could've introduced debt as a driving force and neccesity without the 'dolls'. I also think you could've done the debt with something other than money, like lifespan etc. because ultimately losing all your money is better than visiting darkseid.

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ThanatosGreekGodLv14

yeah the doll thing judging purely by the summary seems very annoying especially since he just starts in debt for a stupid reason

LUBTLv2

to be fair we are talking about wednesday addams plus the actor Jenna Ortega is 20 so no under age

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m3gah1tssLv4

I agreee with you....should have said from 108 dolla to a living doll.Like that you could addore dolla while not forcing yourself.

SexyYoungMasterLv14

She plays a highschool character… ur still a pedo

LUBT:to be fair we are talking about wednesday addams plus the actor Jenna Ortega is 20 so no under age
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Siege_JayLv13

even then bro she 16 that's legal

SexyYoungMaster:She plays a highschool character… ur still a pedo
THIZZGATORLv4

not in any reasonable state or country. Legal doesnt = morally acceptable

Siege_Jay:even then bro she 16 that's legal
Siege_JayLv13

I'll be honest as long as it's between two LEGAL and CONSENTING people there's nothing else to talk about end of and 16 just so happens to be legal in Britain no need to come across as angry (my interpretation of your constant use of full stops on webnovel of all places 🤷🏻‍♂️)

THIZZGATOR:not in any reasonable state or country. Legal doesnt = morally acceptable
THIZZGATORLv4

did you go through my profile or something? First you like teenagers and now you creep through someone profile. You need to be on a watch list cause you're showing some dangerous tendencies.

Siege_Jay:I'll be honest as long as it's between two LEGAL and CONSENTING people there's nothing else to talk about end of and 16 just so happens to be legal in Britain no need to come across as angry (my interpretation of your constant use of full stops on webnovel of all places 🤷🏻‍♂️)
lordhokageLv4

this LUBT could be a 15 year old for all we know people find Wednesday attractive due to her looks which is of a 20yr old with goth makeup calling someone a pedo for that is wild

SexyYoungMaster:She plays a highschool character… ur still a pedo
SexyYoungMasterLv14

Found a Dan Schneider clone

lordhokage:this LUBT could be a 15 year old for all we know people find Wednesday attractive due to her looks which is of a 20yr old with goth makeup calling someone a pedo for that is wild
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lordhokageLv4

SexyYoungMaster:Found a Dan Schneider clone
BlockshotLv15

Ain’t no way ☠️

Siege_Jay:even then bro she 16 that's legal
Mattex97Lv14

Not true since Mc is also a highschool student and is the same age group as Wednesday

SexyYoungMaster:She plays a highschool character… ur still a pedo
Xinum_SensationalLv4

are you serious? are you really implying that a a whole population of people who watched X rated teen drama are pedos? are you for real??

SexyYoungMaster:Found a Dan Schneider clone
Necfrean_Jones3128Lv3

She 21

LUBT:to be fair we are talking about wednesday addams plus the actor Jenna Ortega is 20 so no under age
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Necfrean_Jones3128Lv3

Scene from hot ones?

lordhokage:this LUBT could be a 15 year old for all we know people find Wednesday attractive due to her looks which is of a 20yr old with goth makeup calling someone a pedo for that is wild
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SexyYoungMasterLv14

So you just disregard the comment I was replying to? The person said they were talking about Wednesday Adams, a highschool character. I am justified to say you’re a pedo when you point out how she looks good playing a high schooler, but then say at least she’s 20 irl. What’s your argument exactly, pedo defender?

Xinum_Sensational:are you serious? are you really implying that a a whole population of people who watched X rated teen drama are pedos? are you for real??
LUBTLv2

bruh look how long ago i wrote it

Necfrean_Jones3128:She 21
Necfrean_Jones3128Lv3

5 months ago but she’s a little younger than me so 5 months ago she was still 21

LUBT:bruh look how long ago i wrote it
LUBTLv2

then google lied to me

Necfrean_Jones3128:5 months ago but she’s a little younger than me so 5 months ago she was still 21
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Daniel_Brennan_0577Lv14

It's not very good. the main point is that it gets too ridiculous. it starts off in a very dismally run school, where the strongest rule and the weak try to survive. a young man, who has white hair and good looks. which isn't terrible, but it's wandering into that Chuunbiyo area. he's actually good friends with Gwen Stacey, but with the possibility of something more. fine. He gets a system that allows him to stream whenever he likes, basically like alien tech. And he gets sent to alternate universes, DC, to stream from there. OK, interesting. I suppose the author wanted to give the character a reason, and so he was tricked during a multi day long streaming into buying one hundred very expensive dolls. Rozen Maiden Dolls. so, he's not only mixing comic book worlds with anime worlds, but he's making the MC look stupid. usually the MC seems fine. he's not self-sacrificing. and he can take care of himself, he cooks and cleans just fine. but for some reason he was on a stream where he wouldn't stop until his fans stopped paying him? this is dumb. and then he gets tricked into buying something. dumb. and then apparently the dolls come to life. but only one has appeared so far. it's ridiculous. then when he gets in, he starts to get anime powers from different universes. and we find out he can essentially time travel in different worlds. So not only is he developing relationships with three lovely girls at his high school, also with women outside of his universe. also, the hundred dolls seem like some of them are going to be part of his harem. DC, Marvel, Jujutsu Kaisen, Rozen Maiden, Addams Family, that's the IPs we've got so far. this is turning into another throw everything into the pot, story. where the author is trying to impress people with how many different IPs he knows. and then there are the errors, in spelling, in grammar, etc. If you are a person who has essentially watched or read everything, and don't care about how ridiculous or over the top things get, then go ahead and read this story. otherwise, don't bother.

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