webnovel
RageSmirk
RageSmirkLv131yr
2023-09-14 20:51

So I've read 44 chapters of the novel so far. The plot is good and the main character has an interesting system. I think the author should not sweat the small stuff, for example mentioning the name of the vehicles (because you'll need to Google to get an idea about it), instead I suggest to just emphasis the advantages of the vehicle like the engine is powerful or the armour is strong etcetera... But that beside the point. The writing is good. More thoughts should be invested on individuals interactions. Soldiers monologue is quite good, professionally done. Romance at this stage of the apocalypse will feel forced, so I suggest not to delve into it. The MC purchase currency is Gold, but it's earned by his accomplishments, so why not just call it coins since it's the system's own currency, but doesn't really matter I guess. I'm glad the MC got his troops early on in the story, otherwise it would feel dragged out. The story has promise and the reader can't guess future events easily so that's good. Hopefully the author can update the story more frequently.[img=update]

Liked by 21 people

LIKE
Replies3
Immortallord
ImmortallordLv12

Try out the novel. Eradawn: Mythos Unveiled. This is really a great and awesome novel. Truly one of a kind that I believe is unfair for others nit to see. I hope we can all support this novel. You will all love it without a doubt, just give it a chance. I really love this novel, and I think the author has more greater things installed for us. Thanks a lot.

Isaiah_Wilford
Isaiah_WilfordLv12

Is there any confirmation that the story will be in book format on Amazon or something for purchase? It’s so good!

Lucinda_Hacker
Lucinda_HackerLv4

I think that if the author wants a believable story just saying a weapon is powerful or an armor is strong isn't good enough.

Other Reviews
CephalonCoda
CephalonCodaLv15

So, I will preface this by saying I have no love at all of zombie stories. In my experience, most have lazy writing because "Zombies go brrr." luckily, this is NOT that kind of story, and it's clear to see that it is well thought out and a lot of passion is put into this work. TLDR: Solid 9/10, well done 👍Main character: 10/10 The main character is one of the key reasons i love this story so far. Otherr than adapting to his new role a little too quickly to be believable, he is very enjoyable to root for, and also has a backbone and very strong moral compass that is flexable in a believable and interesting way that makes him extremely relateable in my opinion.World building and zombies: 8/10While most of the world building is believable and makes sense, I will say that I am a bit sad that he doesn't explain a little more about the power dynamic in the zombies. by the end of the available chapters (161 of them at time of review), the author has managed to explain it enough during the fights to help me piece it together, but early in the story it can be a bit hard to figure out what exactly the enemy can and cant be affected by, which lost me a little bit as I was unsure why they were making the decisions that they were. This isn't something that ruined the story in the slightest, but it is something I noticed and thought i should mention. Writing: 10ish/10Good grammar and engaging writing made me stay up till 6 in the morning the day after Thanksgiving to read all the available chapters... I think that says enough 😂.Closing thoughts: Overall 9.5/10 Only concern moving forward is the power scaling of where the story can go from here in terms of the zombies, but im sure the author will handle it well as they have the rest of the book, and im looking forward to continuing to read. Thanks for the content, Author! 😁👍

Related Stories

Getting A System In A Modern World

[WSA 2024 Entry] Please Support. _________ Silas, as a normal hot-blooded youth with big dreams and huge ambition, wanted to see the world, experience what it has to offer while living his dream life. But when has life ever gone according to plan? when has it ever been fair to anyone? Silas was hit with a reality check after graduating, if school was hard, society is harder. For two years he worked but nothing seems to be working out. He gave up on his dreams and ambition and his determination waned. After a long day at work one day, he looked up at the ceiling and made a wish, a wish he never knew will come true and change his life forever. He got a system, one that seems to be an all-rounder and it has his dream feature. [Ding!] [You spent $1199. You received 10x rebate of expenses made. You earned $11,990. The money has been sent to host bank account] "My dream life is no longer out of reach!" ________ This is my first book and English is not my main, I will apologize for any possible error. ________ Disclaimer: 'Getting A System In A Modern World' is a work of fiction. Names, characters, businesses, places, events, locales, and incidents are either the products of the author's imagination or used in a fictitious manner. Any resemblance to actual persons, living or dead, or actual events is purely coincidental. This book may reference real companies and organizations, but these references are for narrative purposes only and are not intended to depict actual conduct or involvement of these entities. The use of these names and references is not meant to harm, defame, or discredit these companies or organizations. ________ Thank you for reading :)

Daoist_Godfiend · Sci-fi
4.1
325 Chs