Bruh. You ruined the whole thing by forcing the romance onto Alucard. Like why let Catherine see his memories and why turn her into a vampire? First of all, she needs to be a virgin to be turned into a vampire from Hellsing, and as she is a mother, she does not qualify! Then you let her watch his memories for no reason other than to let her know his secrets and finally you do the dumbest thing and make Alucard suddenly have the urge to protect her due to her sad background... Like really?!!? He has literally lived for thousands of years and consumed milios of people!!! What kind of sob story hasn't he heard? Especially when consuming those that wandered into his mansion (considering they were literally at the bottom of society)! But noooooo!! All of a sudden Alucard wants to protect her! You are basically forcing it so that the story goes the way you want. If you want to make her the love interest then do it in a more natural way like saying she is basically the parallel version of Integra or his lover that never got the chance to create her organization! That would definitely have Alucard interest. But no, he decides to make some random person (to him) into his sired vampire for no reason other than "just because". That's sad. This story has a lot of potential but it's ruined by forcing such a cliche plot. It would be better if you just did this with some reincarnated Mc that wished for Alucard's powers. Then you could push all your bs plot onto him however you want.
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Under his previous work already he was bashed by making Alucard too human. Yet, he did it again. Don't know why he need to call him Alucard so zealosly.
Well, it's a rewrite of his previous story, so I can tell you that this is just the tip of the iceberg.
In the first version of this fanfic, several readers criticized (me included) what you yourself say. We said that it would have been better to write about the reincarnation of a random man with Alucard's powers, but the author was closed in saying that he knew the true personality of the Vampire, that he would make him just like the OC. In the end, he did something st*pid that he couldn't even imitate the real Alucard.
And what about this story then, is it good ?
Culture_Lover:In the first version of this fanfic, several readers criticized (me included) what you yourself say. We said that it would have been better to write about the reincarnation of a random man with Alucard's powers, but the author was closed in saying that he knew the true personality of the Vampire, that he would make him just like the OC. In the end, he did something st*pid that he couldn't even imitate the real Alucard.
The novel is well written. It has a good rhythm and the reading is not heavy. The MC at times is shown as the OC, but then does the same as the first version of the fanfic. If you can get around this, it may be very light to read, but don't expect to read the real Alucard's personality in this fic.
Cathulhu:And what about this story then, is it good ?
Man I truly wish the author would respond to this and openly face this beyond fair criticism, I really want to know what he has to say for himself to justify these decisions.
