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Salmon_El_Solomon
Salmon_El_SolomonLv31yr
2023-02-25 00:28

I do not plan to insult or offend anyone, it is my opinion of the novel. The novel has potential, a good development of the world and a clear level of power developed. And there my good opinion remains, the characters feel stupid, especially the mc, to begin with he seems to doubt life at all times, he never thinks about things and does everything on "impulse", until now he has not done anything thinking , from the beginning to the current chapter, he has been told that his ex-girlfriend is alive, which is the main and only reason why he transmigrated, but until now he has not done anything to find out her whereabouts, consult with his system, goddess or not even investigate or try to find it, another example is that of the mc leaving his position as heir to the duke, there is no logic or real reasons behind that, the mc knows that they are going to remove him from his position, and for that reason he resigns a month before When he could try not to remove him, taking advantage of all the resources that the heir to Duke would have, and also ignoring his sister's clear affection for him. Another issue is the mc taking it all as a game after almost dying 2 times in a row and experiencing a death. I'll leave it there, but the more you advance, the more stupid the mc is doing.

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NihilRuler
NihilRulerAuthor

Thanks for you long review despite disliking my novel. It's my first novel, I'm making mistakes obviously and I'm learning everydays thanks to all the comments of you all be it good or bad.

Salmon_El_Solomon
Salmon_El_SolomonLv3

Good luck, and don't get me wrong, I like the novel, but the character development is lousy. At first you showed us a logical mc with great emotional development, to the point of helping his friend to get ahead, at the cost of a friendly relationship and then you put us in a stupidly emotional mc who acts on impulse.

NihilRuler:Thanks for you long review despite disliking my novel. It's my first novel, I'm making mistakes obviously and I'm learning everydays thanks to all the comments of you all be it good or bad.
Campione_p
Campione_pLv14

remember that the MC at the beginning is not the same as we have now, it is the function of the normal MC with the unstable one and that they brainwashed him, if you look closely he always tries to be logical but emotions overcome him, even the goddess tries to call him attention is currently very mentally unstable in my opinion and I think the author also commented on it, I don't like the MC either so I have to say but I hope his development if not to kill the author :))))

Salmon_El_Solomon:Good luck, and don't get me wrong, I like the novel, but the character development is lousy. At first you showed us a logical mc with great emotional development, to the point of helping his friend to get ahead, at the cost of a friendly relationship and then you put us in a stupidly emotional mc who acts on impulse.
Campione_p
Campione_pLv14

I think character development is good, but if it's always like that, it would suck over time. no more waiting to see how it goes

Campione_p:remember that the MC at the beginning is not the same as we have now, it is the function of the normal MC with the unstable one and that they brainwashed him, if you look closely he always tries to be logical but emotions overcome him, even the goddess tries to call him attention is currently very mentally unstable in my opinion and I think the author also commented on it, I don't like the MC either so I have to say but I hope his development if not to kill the author :))))
DevilDarkness
DevilDarknessLv4

I read all those they're good except " I will kill d author" I didn't like that one so I dropped that. (personal fav "this young master had enough" that mc is SMART MAN RIGHT. ) as for u - u should try "destroying my own novel*****" "shadow author**" "conquering the novel**" "I am the young master*" "reincarnated villain makes d heroine beg for forgiveness****"{* marks shows it's quality--higher d better}

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Madwriter_2377
Madwriter_2377Lv3

Those are very good novel. it's just young Master have had enough was consistent. Now he is slow. I talked with him. He will soon start updating. waiting for that novel...

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chrono2
chrono2Lv1

It id indeed disturbeen to understand how the MC thinks amd where that cold Nylil went but the story, characters dev etc is so good, sometimes it a bit long but a top novel

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