Salmon_El_Solomon

This is my opinion and I do not plan to insult or offend anyone. Honestly this is garbage at best, honestly I'm currently on chapter 105 and 90% of it is the same as the original novel. Now you might be wondering, 90%? Yes, and that's stretching a large part. The only changes are that some events happened earlier, like the trip to the elven tribe or Leon taking care of Zola and the group from the women's forest. The only changes that are "original to the author" are that the MC has a second, "more assertive" personality, until chapter 30 where they mix and Leon returns to being the typical loser Japanese MC. The last 3 changes are that the MC now has more AI to help him (which did not contribute anything new), Leon's better relationship with his family and finally Leon prevents Clarisse from buying a slave and losing her virginity.

You are my hero, I wanted to read this, but the awful writing quality of the original make me sick. Thanks for translating this. If someone want the raw copy the title, go to the translator put English to Chinese simplified, and you got it

No, at the end the mc is single forever in the multiverse traveling around worlds, so the point of the ff, it's only to screw tang sang plans and humiliation of him, not even a single fml. Yes there are hints and interactions that lead to you to think that there will be a romance development,like with nana,yuan en yehui, wu si duo, etc but not. Seriously this only to the 130 chap interesting,after that is your typically op cliche mc, only without the harem or the romance

The second option would be to take charge of the Meta Liberation Army and start conquering everything or something like that.

You could make him a UN investigator (or part of the army, like a kind of UN secret agent, Roberta since she hacked everything could give her the background and everything), something that could get in contact with the great heroes like the number 1 of the United States and be able to have better contact with the Japanese heroes and have an excuse to have contact with the "villain" side, like the Meta Liberation Army and a reason to be close to the events or why he seeks to get close or AFO

Yes, you're right on a certain point, and at the same time, I also disagree. While going into too much detail can be cumbersome to read, writing it out would have allowed for better character development. Regarding the development of the recent episodes with Yahweh, that's exactly where my point hits. Everything feels very abrupt. The MC is very happy spending time with his girlfriend and his recently discovered brother and out of nowhere, BAM, he intrudes in heaven and destroys the castle. There's no emotional development or anything. As I said before, things are happening very abruptly and you're not leaving any room for things to settle down. Try to make slices of life more interesting. PS: The delay in responding is due to the fact that this week I have 10 college exams, 5 subjects, and theoretical and practical classes.

I understand your point, but even though it might not seem like it, the fact that it exists already creates a huge change on the outside, especially in Lex. You could have made it a kind of log showing how Lex goes from rejecting to slowly accepting the MC. How Cassandra comes up with it and why, her thoughts when accepting and "training" her, and how he sees her as she slowly gets closer to the MC emotionally. And regarding death, although the MC wouldn't interact with it directly, you could have shown how the MC feels being trapped in his body and how he gradually feels about death and how the presence of death affects the MC. You could explain how he goes from anxiety to acceptance and ending with the comfort of not being alone, locked away, that he has someone by his side.

you should at least put the raw name in te synopsis. this is it: 东京喰种：融合斑！开启无限月读 I sincerely recommend this translator's version over the original, since like all Chinese FFs, the names are always messed up and end up being illegible. P.S. Translator, keep it up, and thanks for translating and putting up with those awful Chinese writing mistakes.

At the author's request, here's a review :) (Let's be clear, this is my opinion and I don't intend to offend or insult anyone.) Honestly, it's not possible to write a proper review yet. So far, only very random things have happened, there hasn't been any world or character development. While 30 chapters sounds like a lot, nothing has happened, and what could be interesting is all happening behind the scenes. You've done too many time skips, and a lot of things have been developed "behind the scenes." Honestly, you could do better. By lengthening the part of the MC in a coma meeting Death, and developing Lex while you're at it. By better explaining and demonstrating the development of the relationship between MC and Cassandra. By better developing the MC at university. Another thing is Superboy's personality. You made him look too similar to Roberta from your other fic, when in reality he acted like a lost child in JJ. (He wasn't analytical or calm at all; he has a reckless personality.) Honestly, you rushed things too much. While the development seems good, it's very random and happens too quickly. so for me is: Writing Quality: 4 Stability of Updates: 5 Story Development: 1 Character Design: 1 World Background: 1 Total 2.4 PS: You should clarify what kind of reality you're doing the FF in. In some versions of the comics, each universe has its own Hell, meaning each universe has its own Lucifer, Asmodeus, Baal, etc. In others, Hell is multiversal, and they are unique, meaning there is only one Lucifer in the entire multiverse.

Pls tell me it's Rukia and yoruichi